What If Uncle Buck raised Superman?
A little Superman alternate tale20 total reviews
Comment from emrpoems
Well written and entertaining
Good use of dialogue.
Fantastic and written passionately.
Filled with humor for an enjoyable read
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Well written and entertaining
Good use of dialogue.
Fantastic and written passionately.
Filled with humor for an enjoyable read
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Green Lake Girl
It is indeed a bit of fun! I love Uncle Buck. Crusty, but caring. Lots of bawdy humor, especially "guessing" about the underwear. A good read.
A suggestion:
I would love to see her butt-ass naked on a poll,"(I think you want "pole" here, not "poll".)
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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It is indeed a bit of fun! I love Uncle Buck. Crusty, but caring. Lots of bawdy humor, especially "guessing" about the underwear. A good read.
A suggestion:
I would love to see her butt-ass naked on a poll,"(I think you want "pole" here, not "poll".)
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Thank you very much. Good eye, I will fix that.
Comment from thequeencatalyst
Hi there! I just wanted to leave a review to say that I really enjoyed this cute, humourous piece. It certainly was different from Superman's original upbringing! Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Hi there! I just wanted to leave a review to say that I really enjoyed this cute, humourous piece. It certainly was different from Superman's original upbringing! Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Muffins
Splendid twist of fate story. The characters are believable especially Clarke with his innocence view of the world and complete trust in Uncle Buck. The theme you presented is one to think about and not only for fictional characters but for me, you and everyone. How much are we influence in our thoughts, careers everything from who raised us? And different would we turn out if someone else raised us? Thousands of questions. Wonderful story. I hope you take another fictional character down this road.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Splendid twist of fate story. The characters are believable especially Clarke with his innocence view of the world and complete trust in Uncle Buck. The theme you presented is one to think about and not only for fictional characters but for me, you and everyone. How much are we influence in our thoughts, careers everything from who raised us? And different would we turn out if someone else raised us? Thousands of questions. Wonderful story. I hope you take another fictional character down this road.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Thank you very much. You are right we are influenced greatly by those who bring us up. Another character, I think I have one in mind. Maybe Wonder Woman.
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I can't wait!!!
Comment from maggieadams
This is fantastic, with so much voice. You write with such a "twinkle in your eye".. At first I thought this story was going to be about John candy, who played Uncle Buck in the movie with the same title...I think it is ""pole", not poll.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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This is fantastic, with so much voice. You write with such a "twinkle in your eye".. At first I thought this story was going to be about John candy, who played Uncle Buck in the movie with the same title...I think it is ""pole", not poll.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Thank you very much. Yes, he was loosely modeled after John. Yes, it should be pole. I missed that one in the editing.
Comment from Millibrad
What an interesting thought to consider. I had fun reading this little alternate timeline where Clark's parents are killed and he is raised by the unconventional Uncle Buck.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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What an interesting thought to consider. I had fun reading this little alternate timeline where Clark's parents are killed and he is raised by the unconventional Uncle Buck.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Twilightspire
Holy Uncle Buck, Batman. Heh heh. This was one helluva story, my friend. You obviously know by now that I love comics and especially ole' Supes and this tale was absolutely hilarious.
You really got into young Clark's head and showed enough of the man we know he would be and still kept him an impressionable kid.
This was the most fun I've had reading a Superman story in a loooong time. Stupid DC reboot. :)
-T.J.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Holy Uncle Buck, Batman. Heh heh. This was one helluva story, my friend. You obviously know by now that I love comics and especially ole' Supes and this tale was absolutely hilarious.
You really got into young Clark's head and showed enough of the man we know he would be and still kept him an impressionable kid.
This was the most fun I've had reading a Superman story in a loooong time. Stupid DC reboot. :)
-T.J.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Thank you very much. Yeah, the reboot thing doesn't always work. I'm glad you liked it. I'm thinking of doing another one. Not sure who yet.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
This was entertaining and seemed realistic for what it was. I always thought young Clark should make use of his powers, but the Kents were stuffy and had far too much morality! LOL!
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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This was entertaining and seemed realistic for what it was. I always thought young Clark should make use of his powers, but the Kents were stuffy and had far too much morality! LOL!
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Thank you very much. Yes, I agree they were written too nice. That's not normal, well maybe it is in Kansas.
JW
Comment from judester
Fun story. Great dialogue, especially Uncle Buck. I like the idea of blending two well known characters and see what happens and where they go, I enjoyed this, cheers Judester
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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Fun story. Great dialogue, especially Uncle Buck. I like the idea of blending two well known characters and see what happens and where they go, I enjoyed this, cheers Judester
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Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Thank you very much. I loved John Candy as Uncle Buck. They should have made more.
Comment from healfromwithin
An interesting twist on Clark's upbringing...
Some possible revisions:
Add ? mark: "What If Uncle Buck raised Superman(?)"
It felt like a dream(,) at best(,) or at worst(,)a twisted nightmare
Clark, had always tried to be a good son, so when the tornado siren went off, and the teacher hustled his class into the storm shelter, even though no wind, no matter how strong could hurt him, he willingly went down with them. (this is pretty long, with more than one subject; consider dividing.)
(G)od-damn
children were just small (adults) with big
formed in his head( remove comma ,) died on his lips
Clark looked up at (Uncle Buck-his only family-) with amazement(;)for the first time since
don't start with, "In fact," it qualifies the previous words, which are in a closed sentence. I would drop it, and go with something like, "Buck even seemed.....used them, providing he was careful." - You have: "Provided he was careful." (an incomplete sentence.)
I liked this analogy: "The way I see it, Clark, you having super powers is like Hank Aaron being a god at baseball. It would be just as much a sin for you not to use your gifts, as it would be to tell Hank to lay down a bunt."
Please re-read: Clark was explaining what he had learned in history class when in walked Lana Lang and her mother, Rachelle. Rumor around town was that before she was pregnant with Lana, Rachelle was a fashion model in Metropolis. This was widely believed because both mother and daughter were considered the most beautiful females in town, and the fact that there was no Mister Lang. I'm not sure what was "widely believed:" that Rachelle got pregnant(when single, maybe)? or that she was a fashion model? or that they were the most beautiful? or there was no husband?
It seems a bit odd that Clark can talk about a "thong," but calls it "a thingy," also, that he gets "red" and "warm" when overhearing that he's "cute." (just a thought)
wasn't tired(-)he never was(-)but Buck
"Not (remove comma,) Ms. Lang(;) her breathing
the young farm(-)raised kid
scout on the last leg of (his/or the) journey. The
He told (me that) making big leagues
dream of his and his late Uncle('s.) With
The sportscaster's related interview could use some edits -- "with tears in his eyes" didn't sound right; maybe, "the kid was all choked up, talking about his folks," (or something like that.
Good luck with your writing.
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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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An interesting twist on Clark's upbringing...
Some possible revisions:
Add ? mark: "What If Uncle Buck raised Superman(?)"
It felt like a dream(,) at best(,) or at worst(,)a twisted nightmare
Clark, had always tried to be a good son, so when the tornado siren went off, and the teacher hustled his class into the storm shelter, even though no wind, no matter how strong could hurt him, he willingly went down with them. (this is pretty long, with more than one subject; consider dividing.)
(G)od-damn
children were just small (adults) with big
formed in his head( remove comma ,) died on his lips
Clark looked up at (Uncle Buck-his only family-) with amazement(;)for the first time since
don't start with, "In fact," it qualifies the previous words, which are in a closed sentence. I would drop it, and go with something like, "Buck even seemed.....used them, providing he was careful." - You have: "Provided he was careful." (an incomplete sentence.)
I liked this analogy: "The way I see it, Clark, you having super powers is like Hank Aaron being a god at baseball. It would be just as much a sin for you not to use your gifts, as it would be to tell Hank to lay down a bunt."
Please re-read: Clark was explaining what he had learned in history class when in walked Lana Lang and her mother, Rachelle. Rumor around town was that before she was pregnant with Lana, Rachelle was a fashion model in Metropolis. This was widely believed because both mother and daughter were considered the most beautiful females in town, and the fact that there was no Mister Lang. I'm not sure what was "widely believed:" that Rachelle got pregnant(when single, maybe)? or that she was a fashion model? or that they were the most beautiful? or there was no husband?
It seems a bit odd that Clark can talk about a "thong," but calls it "a thingy," also, that he gets "red" and "warm" when overhearing that he's "cute." (just a thought)
wasn't tired(-)he never was(-)but Buck
"Not (remove comma,) Ms. Lang(;) her breathing
the young farm(-)raised kid
scout on the last leg of (his/or the) journey. The
He told (me that) making big leagues
dream of his and his late Uncle('s.) With
The sportscaster's related interview could use some edits -- "with tears in his eyes" didn't sound right; maybe, "the kid was all choked up, talking about his folks," (or something like that.
Good luck with your writing.
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Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Thank you very much. That was some wonderful editing and great ideas. You were right on the money on everything.
JW
