Savannah Love
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Comment from Norbanus
Paige dear, have no fear
Cash will find the villain
Morgan's bark may lead him there
If ever'body's willin'.
Poor Morgan's silence is a shock
Are Paige and him together?
Did someone hit him with a rock,
Or put him on a villian?
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Paige dear, have no fear
Cash will find the villain
Morgan's bark may lead him there
If ever'body's willin'.
Poor Morgan's silence is a shock
Are Paige and him together?
Did someone hit him with a rock,
Or put him on a villian?
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by. I love your reviews.
Comment from Tina McKala
WOW! you made a real progress with your writing! only two small nitpicks, because this was really smooth reading, to the point, easy to follow, the dialogues were clear, you captured their body language and the scene was easy to imagine. You're on the right track ;) more chapters like this! :)
nitpicks/typos:
While waiting for the others, [HE] paced. // missing a subject in the sentence
The two men, who came with Amos['s] walked around searching for clues. // delete the part in the square brackets
I was truly impressed with this chapter, the tension builder was perfect! :) I hope they will find Page soon and that she is going to be fine. And Morgan as well.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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WOW! you made a real progress with your writing! only two small nitpicks, because this was really smooth reading, to the point, easy to follow, the dialogues were clear, you captured their body language and the scene was easy to imagine. You're on the right track ;) more chapters like this! :)
nitpicks/typos:
While waiting for the others, [HE] paced. // missing a subject in the sentence
The two men, who came with Amos['s] walked around searching for clues. // delete the part in the square brackets
I was truly impressed with this chapter, the tension builder was perfect! :) I hope they will find Page soon and that she is going to be fine. And Morgan as well.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by. Thank you for the catches.
Comment from elgone
Amos is a colorful characters and a good addition to the story. he believes in ghosts where the more sophisticated, younger men don't. Good play of wisdom against brashness.
He pointed to the right on. - one
breaks off from dat dere center on - one (I'm thinking the way Southerner's talk one might be pronounced un and in dat center un or really more like dat sinter un - but that might confuse the reader as to what was actually being said.
No ghost's helping anybody, - this one might be said - Ain't no ghost helping nobody.
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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Amos is a colorful characters and a good addition to the story. he believes in ghosts where the more sophisticated, younger men don't. Good play of wisdom against brashness.
He pointed to the right on. - one
breaks off from dat dere center on - one (I'm thinking the way Southerner's talk one might be pronounced un and in dat center un or really more like dat sinter un - but that might confuse the reader as to what was actually being said.
No ghost's helping anybody, - this one might be said - Ain't no ghost helping nobody.
E
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by. Always glad to hear from you. HUGS
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, barbara, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where the men are led down the tunnel to rescue paige but the rocks fall and they end up taking the tunnel to the church
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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this is very well written, barbara, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where the men are led down the tunnel to rescue paige but the rocks fall and they end up taking the tunnel to the church
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Nicely done again, Barbara- the tension is good, and the suspenseful way you are handling Paige's disappearance keeps the interest flagged.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Nicely done again, Barbara- the tension is good, and the suspenseful way you are handling Paige's disappearance keeps the interest flagged.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
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My pleasure. :)
Comment from Tonulak
Dear Barbra,
Once again, you've drawn me in and have left me wanting more. Nice detail of regional dialect and good tension in the story. Great job--Ted
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Dear Barbra,
Once again, you've drawn me in and have left me wanting more. Nice detail of regional dialect and good tension in the story. Great job--Ted
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from Sasha
I think Billy Joe's in for a pleasant (or not so pleasant) surprise because I have no doubt whatsoever that Bradley is helping Paige get to safety. I enjoyed this chapter and look forward to the next one.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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I think Billy Joe's in for a pleasant (or not so pleasant) surprise because I have no doubt whatsoever that Bradley is helping Paige get to safety. I enjoyed this chapter and look forward to the next one.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by. Poor Billy Joe.
Comment from angelface2
Well, I don't know what has happened to Paige. It's been so long and I have forgotten what has been happening. But the writing is very good. Miss Sally
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Well, I don't know what has happened to Paige. It's been so long and I have forgotten what has been happening. But the writing is very good. Miss Sally
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from DonandVicki
Barbara your story continues to hold on to the readers interest and is such a joy to read. You keep the reader wanting more at the end of the page. Don and Vicki
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Barbara your story continues to hold on to the readers interest and is such a joy to read. You keep the reader wanting more at the end of the page. Don and Vicki
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from Sankey
Once again good to be back. Can't wait to see where it is all going. Suspense excitement and all other words that fit.Good work and no spags thanks again as usual.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Once again good to be back. Can't wait to see where it is all going. Suspense excitement and all other words that fit.Good work and no spags thanks again as usual.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by. HUGS
