Red Neck Monday
Just one of those mornings3 total reviews
Comment from nelliesellie
I LOVE THE STORY. My guess is this guy is a high ranking government official. Possibly the president. This guy seems to be living in the Land of Oz. His poor dog seems to try bringing him out of it. Great work.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
I LOVE THE STORY. My guess is this guy is a high ranking government official. Possibly the president. This guy seems to be living in the Land of Oz. His poor dog seems to try bringing him out of it. Great work.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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He is actually a bathroom attendant as stated in authors notes. have a great day!
Comment from Nosha17
A well written short piece of prose that fit the bill, it fit into the contest requirements very well. You made good use of language in the narrative and descriptions and read very well. Enjoyable read, good luck in the contest. Faye
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
A well written short piece of prose that fit the bill, it fit into the contest requirements very well. You made good use of language in the narrative and descriptions and read very well. Enjoyable read, good luck in the contest. Faye
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Thanks Faye it was fun to write.
Comment from adewpearl
moths, had napped - drop the comma
you set the stage and the mood well in your opening and introduce the narrator effectively
testies - testes
mullet-capped scalp - add the hyphen
good humor - dear Lord help us if we ever end up with a President like this guy :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
moths, had napped - drop the comma
you set the stage and the mood well in your opening and introduce the narrator effectively
testies - testes
mullet-capped scalp - add the hyphen
good humor - dear Lord help us if we ever end up with a President like this guy :-) Brooke
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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thanks for the help. Will revise. Happy Easter! It's a long shot but stranger things have happened. (president?)Ha!