Comment from Smoothiecool

Excellent

good luck in the contest

perfect line and syllable count in each for this contest

your vivid images in few words are strong for the reader to see and feel as the bullying still lingers

cheers Smoothiecool

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014

Thanks for the review Smoothiecool. Well, that's the thing with bullying, it does affect some for many years afterward. Cheers

reply by Smoothiecool on 21-Apr-2014

welcome...SC

Comment from l.raven

Excellent

I think you never forgot being bullied as a kid...I was never bullied but I those who where...your poem is very well expressed...very well written..

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014

Thanks for the review

reply by l.raven on 20-Apr-2014

you are so welcome...xxoo

Comment from Lady Ophelia

Excellent

You capture a problem I know all too well very nicely. The syllable count holds and it has a nice flow. You paint a clear picture that reveals a deeper story with your words. The picture is a good choice too. Nice work! :)

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014

Thanks for the review

Comment from Maureen's Pen

Excellent

I thought this was a powerful senryu. Your last line was profound and yet simply stated, its raw and thought provoking. - great submission and good luck.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014

thanks for the review

Comment from acerisestory

Excellent

What a message! Your point is well made in this senryu poem. I listened to NPR this morning, and senryu poem was featured. Perhaps a coincidence that I found your poem right afterwards. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014

Thanks for the review