A flower withers..
Life is but a vapour..67 total reviews
Comment from L.M.Mullins
Fantastic spiritual piece you have written. Your AABB rhyming is perfect and the rhythm flows well keeping the reader focused on the message. Perfect poem for today.
L.M.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Fantastic spiritual piece you have written. Your AABB rhyming is perfect and the rhythm flows well keeping the reader focused on the message. Perfect poem for today.
L.M.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Thank you for the kind and encouraging comments, I appreciate your dropping by to have a look. Blessings, Roy.
Comment from Aussie
Best line: God's name is love, who gave His son, to die for all - it's finished - done. And yet it was only the beginning. He died that we may live, a pity we have taken His gift so precious and forgotten to thank the Father. Today, churches are empty except for the faithful - Jesus is just a swear word in so many mouths. This Easter let us give thanks to the Father every day. Well done friend.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Best line: God's name is love, who gave His son, to die for all - it's finished - done. And yet it was only the beginning. He died that we may live, a pity we have taken His gift so precious and forgotten to thank the Father. Today, churches are empty except for the faithful - Jesus is just a swear word in so many mouths. This Easter let us give thanks to the Father every day. Well done friend.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Thank you Kaye, for your comprehensive and affirming review, Jesus must bring much comfort! Scripture says there will be a great " falling away " in the last days, so you are right! Bless you my friend! Blessings, Roy.
Comment from thequeencatalyst
I'm not religious but I can see the greatness in this poem. Some of the lines I didn't necessarily understand until I read your author's notes though, I must admit. Congratulations on uploading such a good piece and also, happy Easter to you and your family! :)
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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I'm not religious but I can see the greatness in this poem. Some of the lines I didn't necessarily understand until I read your author's notes though, I must admit. Congratulations on uploading such a good piece and also, happy Easter to you and your family! :)
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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The same to you Jasmine, family is so important in my life and yours too I feel! Thank you for your affirming review and encouragement! Blessings, Roy.
Comment from Dom G Robles
The poem with the picture of a man with blood over all his face depicts Jesus Christ who was crucified. I liked the poem. Written in iambic pentameter, the rhyme and rhythm is nice.
The citation of things that had happened in the beginning of the poem adds to the theme of the poem. I saw some figures of speech in there. The dolphins cries its deathly calls.
Congratulations. Dom
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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The poem with the picture of a man with blood over all his face depicts Jesus Christ who was crucified. I liked the poem. Written in iambic pentameter, the rhyme and rhythm is nice.
The citation of things that had happened in the beginning of the poem adds to the theme of the poem. I saw some figures of speech in there. The dolphins cries its deathly calls.
Congratulations. Dom
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Thank you for a most insightful and kindly, encouraging review! Blessings, Roy.
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your timely and inspirational poem. I enjoyed your rhymed couplets in these quatrains. Your bookends in the first and final stanzas describing natural events are quite effective. Happy Easter evening- Joan
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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I admired your timely and inspirational poem. I enjoyed your rhymed couplets in these quatrains. Your bookends in the first and final stanzas describing natural events are quite effective. Happy Easter evening- Joan
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Thank you Joan, for this wonderful and inspiring review, blessings, Roy.
Comment from His Grayness
Dear Roy: thank you for this most masterful and majestic work of faith, remembrance and GRATITUDE presented so beautifully in all ways. Blessings to you dear friend! Vance
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Dear Roy: thank you for this most masterful and majestic work of faith, remembrance and GRATITUDE presented so beautifully in all ways. Blessings to you dear friend! Vance
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Thank you Vance, I have missed you for a while, it's so good to hear from you again, but hey, I love your outstanding comments and review, not to mention the wonderful 6, blessings to you and yours, my friend, blessing. Roy.
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You're most welcome Roy as you ALWAYS EARN them sixers!! Vance
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I appreciate your support, Vance, it's good to have people guard your back, Roy.
Comment from krys123
Roy, I found your home truly inspirational and stimulating and when showing here inventiveness and creativeness. I found your also your rhyming couplet quatrains very well written and your rhymes with neither forced, labored or strained and your rhythm flowed so smoothly throughout your poem. I would like to thank you for your author's notes which helped With the lines of your poem by exhibiting the Proverbs. Also your picture complemented your poem also. Thank you for sharing and posting your work for others and may the Lord be with you on this Easter Sunday.
Alex
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Roy, I found your home truly inspirational and stimulating and when showing here inventiveness and creativeness. I found your also your rhyming couplet quatrains very well written and your rhymes with neither forced, labored or strained and your rhythm flowed so smoothly throughout your poem. I would like to thank you for your author's notes which helped With the lines of your poem by exhibiting the Proverbs. Also your picture complemented your poem also. Thank you for sharing and posting your work for others and may the Lord be with you on this Easter Sunday.
Alex
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Thank you Alex, for your powerful, comprehensive and supportive review, and the same back to you on Easter as well, although it's Monday here now. But thank you again Again, Alex, blessings, Roy.
Comment from l.raven
OMG Roy, what a beautiful poem...it tells the story of Christ dying on the cross for us...a very powerful poem...so very well written...wonderful write...luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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OMG Roy, what a beautiful poem...it tells the story of Christ dying on the cross for us...a very powerful poem...so very well written...wonderful write...luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Thank you Luff Linda, for your superb review! I appreciate it so much! Blessings, Roy
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you are so welcome...xxoo
Comment from Petriesan
His crime to mankind was showing us how we could all live, how we could live better. That cannot stand. I like the wat yiu wrote this. Good word choices and good rhythm
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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His crime to mankind was showing us how we could all live, how we could live better. That cannot stand. I like the wat yiu wrote this. Good word choices and good rhythm
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Thank you for wonderful and kind comments and review? Blessings, Roy.
Comment from mfowler
Your poem is beautifully written Roy. It is here on the right day. It looks to the act of redemption by Jesus through his death on the cross, asking why people don't embrace the gift of this act, why his death does not impact on their consciousness. Roy, to be honest your first and last verses, while gorgeous in their poetic value, and obviously the bookends of your message, have me struggling to explain their exact meaning. I'll have a go, but I'm sorry if this is wrong. These are all deaths of innocence and of nature. They may happen at some point in time, yet go unnoticed. This killing of Jesus happened in obscurity too. It was just one of many brutal killings perpetrated by the Romans. Yet his death has changed the world and the prospects of humanity. You may be asking why is it that people see the death of the saviour in much the same way as the unheralded death of the sparrow or the flower. Lovely poetry.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Your poem is beautifully written Roy. It is here on the right day. It looks to the act of redemption by Jesus through his death on the cross, asking why people don't embrace the gift of this act, why his death does not impact on their consciousness. Roy, to be honest your first and last verses, while gorgeous in their poetic value, and obviously the bookends of your message, have me struggling to explain their exact meaning. I'll have a go, but I'm sorry if this is wrong. These are all deaths of innocence and of nature. They may happen at some point in time, yet go unnoticed. This killing of Jesus happened in obscurity too. It was just one of many brutal killings perpetrated by the Romans. Yet his death has changed the world and the prospects of humanity. You may be asking why is it that people see the death of the saviour in much the same way as the unheralded death of the sparrow or the flower. Lovely poetry.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Hi Mark, it's more in man's life being like a vapour, it's evangelical in nature, we don't know when our life will be required, not to be caught short. The 5 wise Virgins and the 5 unwise virgins explains it best! But thank you for this comprehensive and supportive review. Blessing, Roy.
