Each Blade of Grass
rhyming quatrains in 8/6/8/6168 total reviews
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Brooke,
What a perfect Easter/springtime poem. I hope you have had nice weather today. Here in Houston, it's warm and the sun is shining and it is simply delightful - just like your poem.
Hugs,
Lou
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Hi Brooke,
What a perfect Easter/springtime poem. I hope you have had nice weather today. Here in Houston, it's warm and the sun is shining and it is simply delightful - just like your poem.
Hugs,
Lou
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Lou, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from sunnilicious
That poem as a whole came out super cute. The first verse was my favorite as it was the most lyrical. Great visual imagery created. Creative descriptions. Good rhythm. Great rhymes. Nice work.
Happy Easter :)
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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That poem as a whole came out super cute. The first verse was my favorite as it was the most lyrical. Great visual imagery created. Creative descriptions. Good rhythm. Great rhymes. Nice work.
Happy Easter :)
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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sunnilicious, I hope you had a great Easter. Thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from zurxe
I enjoyed you way of manipulating your words into personifying the flowers into thriving creatures rather than plant based lives. It was overall very interesting to read. Thank you for the poem!
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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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I enjoyed you way of manipulating your words into personifying the flowers into thriving creatures rather than plant based lives. It was overall very interesting to read. Thank you for the poem!
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Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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zurxe, thank you for reviewing. Since a 4 rating translates to "needs improvement," could you please clarify what part you would like me to revise? Brooke
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I apologize, since I am fairly new to this site I have overlooked the Fanstory guidelines. Although, nearly flawlessly written, the repetition of "green" in stanzas one and two extracts from the unique consistency of the poem. Although I am just being picky, you are a far greater writer than I!
Comment from rama devi
Love those color names! They sound poetic read aloud.
Happy Easter to you and yours..please tickle Sawyer for me.
:)
Well crafted poem with good flow and rhyming. Nice touches of alliteration as well (as usual!)
grass, green,growing, goal -- good!
Love this:
the periwinkle sky.
Superb phrasing--rolls off the tongue read aloud, especially with consonance of M, alliteration of G and both consonance and alliteration of R (yummy!):
Each bright magenta rambler rose
that grows among the green,
Read that aloud three times.
Clever personification in second stanza and alliteration of P in this line:
to prettify and preen.
Fine alliteration of C and consonance of echoing K plus alliteration of F and B:
The flowers come to congregate
and strike their brightest pose,
as they show off the finery
of brand new Easter clothes.
Nice pairing of Easter and Spring themes.
Warmly,
rd
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Love those color names! They sound poetic read aloud.
Happy Easter to you and yours..please tickle Sawyer for me.
:)
Well crafted poem with good flow and rhyming. Nice touches of alliteration as well (as usual!)
grass, green,growing, goal -- good!
Love this:
the periwinkle sky.
Superb phrasing--rolls off the tongue read aloud, especially with consonance of M, alliteration of G and both consonance and alliteration of R (yummy!):
Each bright magenta rambler rose
that grows among the green,
Read that aloud three times.
Clever personification in second stanza and alliteration of P in this line:
to prettify and preen.
Fine alliteration of C and consonance of echoing K plus alliteration of F and B:
The flowers come to congregate
and strike their brightest pose,
as they show off the finery
of brand new Easter clothes.
Nice pairing of Easter and Spring themes.
Warmly,
rd
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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thank you, rama devi, for your thoughtful feedback :-) Brooke
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Comment from Rondeno
Delightful Easter poem, Brooke, with very appealing alliteration and color-words which are totally inspired! Reading your creations is never a chore, always a joy.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Delightful Easter poem, Brooke, with very appealing alliteration and color-words which are totally inspired! Reading your creations is never a chore, always a joy.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Michael, thank you so much for your gracious and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Bryan G
This is a excellent poem. I am new to poetry so I am unfamiliar with rhyming quatrains. I enjoyed the description of the grass and flowers and their mission to beautify. Did you paint the painting that goes with this poem? It really adds life to your work.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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This is a excellent poem. I am new to poetry so I am unfamiliar with rhyming quatrains. I enjoyed the description of the grass and flowers and their mission to beautify. Did you paint the painting that goes with this poem? It really adds life to your work.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Bryan, thank you so much for your generous review. No, the painting is one I found on our sister site, fan art. :-) Brooke
Comment from L.M.Mullins
Very colorful quatrains you have written. At first I thought you missed a syllable on your second to last line, but my mind was just stumbling. Very nice choice of Rhymes.
L.M.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Very colorful quatrains you have written. At first I thought you missed a syllable on your second to last line, but my mind was just stumbling. Very nice choice of Rhymes.
L.M.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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L.M, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from angelface2
What a good idea, Brooke. Sawyer is a smart little boy and he looks so cute as an Easter Bunny. I also love the flower picture. It is lovely. Your rhymes are superb. Miss Sally
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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What a good idea, Brooke. Sawyer is a smart little boy and he looks so cute as an Easter Bunny. I also love the flower picture. It is lovely. Your rhymes are superb. Miss Sally
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Miss Sally, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from seaglass
This is the perfect poem to read on Easter. A timely piece as we all inspect out gardens daily, hoping to see results. Spring is a time of thinking 'colors' after the dim greys of winter.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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This is the perfect poem to read on Easter. A timely piece as we all inspect out gardens daily, hoping to see results. Spring is a time of thinking 'colors' after the dim greys of winter.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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seaglass, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Connie C
What a lovely poem this is, Brooke, to celebrate spring and Easter. The imagery is so effective, thanks, in part, to the mention of those new colors that Sawyer has learned. I love your reference to the "periwinkle sky." I hope you are having a happy Easter.
Connie
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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What a lovely poem this is, Brooke, to celebrate spring and Easter. The imagery is so effective, thanks, in part, to the mention of those new colors that Sawyer has learned. I love your reference to the "periwinkle sky." I hope you are having a happy Easter.
Connie
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Connie, thank you so much :-) Happy Easter. Brooke
