Tragedy
Pain has no borders.27 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your poignant poem that appears to be a naani. The striking carving is the perfect accompaniment and your use of alliteration is quite effective. Hugs and happy holiday weekend- Joan
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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I admired your poignant poem that appears to be a naani. The striking carving is the perfect accompaniment and your use of alliteration is quite effective. Hugs and happy holiday weekend- Joan
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Thanks for the kind review. It is a naani.
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Yeah--and it must be for a contest--good luck! -Joan
Comment from JonnyRhymes
In this well-written Naani poem, you have illustrated how tragedy can bring people and even whole societies together. An interesting, inspiring and thought-provoking read.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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In this well-written Naani poem, you have illustrated how tragedy can bring people and even whole societies together. An interesting, inspiring and thought-provoking read.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Thank you for the kind review. Glad you liked it.
Comment from acerisestory
This is a lovely Naani poem, saying much in few words; an inspiring message. The carving by Jim Shalom fits well. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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This is a lovely Naani poem, saying much in few words; an inspiring message. The carving by Jim Shalom fits well. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Thank you for reviewing. Welcome to fanstory.
Comment from Jay Squires
I love the way this poem has open endings for each line except the last, which is closed.
Everything builds, line by line, playing on the three images that contribute to the human condition.
Then from the macrocosm of All-grief we drop with a thud to the individual expression of that grief, the microcosm of "one tear at a time."
Super job, who ever you are. I wish I had a 6 for you that you truly deserve.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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I love the way this poem has open endings for each line except the last, which is closed.
Everything builds, line by line, playing on the three images that contribute to the human condition.
Then from the macrocosm of All-grief we drop with a thud to the individual expression of that grief, the microcosm of "one tear at a time."
Super job, who ever you are. I wish I had a 6 for you that you truly deserve.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Thank you for the awesome review.
Comment from Jackarrie
In the wake of tragedy
the heart of humanity
bleeds in unity
one tear at a time.
I like this naani and the image is a very good one to go with your poem,
well done, good luck in the contest. Mary
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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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In the wake of tragedy
the heart of humanity
bleeds in unity
one tear at a time.
I like this naani and the image is a very good one to go with your poem,
well done, good luck in the contest. Mary
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Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Thank you for reviewing
Comment from TAB_that's me
This is a wonderful and powerful little poem that really packs a punch into just a few words. Perfect naani form. Good luck to you;)
Teresa
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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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This is a wonderful and powerful little poem that really packs a punch into just a few words. Perfect naani form. Good luck to you;)
Teresa
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Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Thank you for reviewing
Comment from suep
Your true and heartfelt words are beautifully spoken in this poem. You meet the syllable and line requirements of the contest. Very nice flow. I enjoyed the rhyming of lines 2 and 3 and the alliteration with heart/humanity, tear/time. Powerful. Great picture choice, too. Excellent work ... Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Your true and heartfelt words are beautifully spoken in this poem. You meet the syllable and line requirements of the contest. Very nice flow. I enjoyed the rhyming of lines 2 and 3 and the alliteration with heart/humanity, tear/time. Powerful. Great picture choice, too. Excellent work ... Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much for the great review and the bonus six. I have been watching CNN and had to turn it off earlier. Breaks my heart.
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I was watching it earlier too ... hard to watch without crying ... very heartbreaking. I could so relate and felt that in your words...
