haiku (bubbles float)
Bubble rainbows46 total reviews
Comment from Eternal Muse
This is probably the most unique haiku in the contest. How very imaginative - to think of rainbows that come from bubbles! The visuals are fantastic - I can see the child blowing bubbles and grabbing those rainbows with his chubby fingers. No picture needed, as your words create vivid pictures in readers' minds. Superb creativity on this one. This should do very well in the contest, good luck in the booths, love, Y.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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This is probably the most unique haiku in the contest. How very imaginative - to think of rainbows that come from bubbles! The visuals are fantastic - I can see the child blowing bubbles and grabbing those rainbows with his chubby fingers. No picture needed, as your words create vivid pictures in readers' minds. Superb creativity on this one. This should do very well in the contest, good luck in the booths, love, Y.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Thank you for your great review for my haiku, Yeltel. I very much appreciate your comment about the poem being creative and able to provide you with pictures with the words. Thank you for sponsoring the haiku contest.
Comment from Righteous Riter
bubbles float
on sunny afternoon
child grabs rainbow
This piece meets the criteria of the Haiku poem as this piece does not exceed 17 syllables. The message is short, simple, clear and paints a clear picture in my mind.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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bubbles float
on sunny afternoon
child grabs rainbow
This piece meets the criteria of the Haiku poem as this piece does not exceed 17 syllables. The message is short, simple, clear and paints a clear picture in my mind.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my haiku, Riter. I appreciate your comment about the poem painting a picture for you in your mind.
Comment from tfawcus
This is lovely! It takes the rainbow down to a child's size! How wonderful those small dancing rainbows can be! I am not an expert in this form but I sense a certain perfection in yours. It is complete yet it inspires further reflection - or, in this case, refraction perhaps!
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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This is lovely! It takes the rainbow down to a child's size! How wonderful those small dancing rainbows can be! I am not an expert in this form but I sense a certain perfection in yours. It is complete yet it inspires further reflection - or, in this case, refraction perhaps!
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much, tfawcus! Your review is wonderful and I appreciate your great comments. It's such a compliment that you feel the poem provides more thought for the reader. I loved your reflection/refraction comment, too! Thank you so much.
Comment from Zue65
The author followed the strict rules for rainbow haiku, no personification, no metaphor just two interconnected visual imagery and a satori for the third line. An excellent write. God bless.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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The author followed the strict rules for rainbow haiku, no personification, no metaphor just two interconnected visual imagery and a satori for the third line. An excellent write. God bless.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much for your kind review and comments for my haiku, nassus. I appreciate your comments and thank you for reading.
Comment from JonnyRhymes
This is a well-written and thought provoking haiku about the nature of bubbles. It helped me to understand why my 1-year-old son loves them so much!
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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This is a well-written and thought provoking haiku about the nature of bubbles. It helped me to understand why my 1-year-old son loves them so much!
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much, Jonny, for reading my poem and for your kind review and comments. Yeah, I don't think there's any kid who doesn't love bubbles ... Well, I love them, too, and I'm an old biddy. lol
Comment from TAB_that's me
I love blowing bubbles. I love rainbows and I love the rainbows in the bubbles so of course I love your poem:) Good luck!
Teresa
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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I love blowing bubbles. I love rainbows and I love the rainbows in the bubbles so of course I love your poem:) Good luck!
Teresa
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much, Teresa, for your kind review and comments for my haiku. I love bubbles, too, so it was the first thing I thought of when I entered the rainbow contest. Thanks!
Comment from Gloria ....
Oh my land, author this is beautiful! Perfect haiku form and excellent satori line. I guess that's why we love blowing bubbles so much, even as older children. We gotta grab those rainbows and then reel in the pot of gold. :P Best wishes to you in the contest.
Gloria
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Oh my land, author this is beautiful! Perfect haiku form and excellent satori line. I guess that's why we love blowing bubbles so much, even as older children. We gotta grab those rainbows and then reel in the pot of gold. :P Best wishes to you in the contest.
Gloria
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Gosh, you write such wonderful and encouraging reviews, Gloria. Thanks for giving my haiku a read and for sharing your great comments. Thanks for your good luck wish for the contest.
Comment from c_lucas
A child chases after rainbows when they can be captured through spying through the bottom of a crystal glass. This is very well written.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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A child chases after rainbows when they can be captured through spying through the bottom of a crystal glass. This is very well written.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Thank you for reading my poem, Charlie, and for sharing your kind thoughts. I appreciate your review.
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You're welcome.
Comment from rama devi
Good one. Charming, imaginative and unique. What a lively, joyful image. I believe it fits the contest criteria well. Superb consonance of S in all three lines. Good luck in the contest.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Good one. Charming, imaginative and unique. What a lively, joyful image. I believe it fits the contest criteria well. Superb consonance of S in all three lines. Good luck in the contest.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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I'm glad you liked this haiku, rd, and thank you for your great review. I wanted to write something a little different about rainbows and thought bubbles would be perfect. Thanks!
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Yep! Unique entry. Good Luck! ;)
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This is a beautifully subtle rainbow haiku, and it's in legitimate haiku form. Bubbles prove that for children, rainbows don't have to be out of reach. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer.
Can't keep from adding a P.S. to this: For the first time, I received two Member Cent Pumps from one review - one from Bonus Reviewing and one from the Treasure Chest. So there was gold for me at the end of your bubble rainbows.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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This is a beautifully subtle rainbow haiku, and it's in legitimate haiku form. Bubbles prove that for children, rainbows don't have to be out of reach. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer.
Can't keep from adding a P.S. to this: For the first time, I received two Member Cent Pumps from one review - one from Bonus Reviewing and one from the Treasure Chest. So there was gold for me at the end of your bubble rainbows.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Thanks for your kind review, Jeanie, and I'm so glad you enjoyed the poem. Wow...I can't think of a better person to earn two pumps for your reviewing.
congratulations. lol
