Wrinkles
coming home ... to say goodbye ...92 total reviews
Comment from Charlene0513
To visionary1234,
The expressive but somber attitude that has transpired over the progression of time leaves the mind thinking, "what will be will be."
Many nice areas of metaphors used with discretion.
Charlene
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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To visionary1234,
The expressive but somber attitude that has transpired over the progression of time leaves the mind thinking, "what will be will be."
Many nice areas of metaphors used with discretion.
Charlene
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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thx so much Charlene! :)S
Comment from Bina1
This poem is so sad, but it reminds me of some people. Quite a story you tell here, very well done. Thank you for sharing, quite beautiful, but very sad.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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This poem is so sad, but it reminds me of some people. Quite a story you tell here, very well done. Thank you for sharing, quite beautiful, but very sad.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much for your lovely response, and for your special sixer on this one Bina! :)Sharyn
Comment from DALLAS01
How sad it is when we see that what our family valued so much, falls into disrepair, just as their bodies and minds are doing the same. I understand this completely, as my sister and I watched the slow deterioration in my mother's house keeping abilities, and watched my dad's garden shrivel.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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How sad it is when we see that what our family valued so much, falls into disrepair, just as their bodies and minds are doing the same. I understand this completely, as my sister and I watched the slow deterioration in my mother's house keeping abilities, and watched my dad's garden shrivel.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Then you totally understand Dallas - yes, it is VERY hard to watch, my dear. Thank you for your empathic reading, and of course, for your lovely six!
:)Sharyn
Comment from amahra
Loved the poem. Despite the complex style, it was a pleasure to read.
Even the landscape stood at attention,[love this line]
'Dark ling' I've learned a new word. [Thanks]
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Loved the poem. Despite the complex style, it was a pleasure to read.
Even the landscape stood at attention,[love this line]
'Dark ling' I've learned a new word. [Thanks]
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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thx so much amahra! :)S
Comment from Willowsong
This is quite a sad revelation of the process of entropy; a truth that everything will eventually discover in time. Nothing can escape it's grasp, none are safe from it's embrace. A very prophetic piece.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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This is quite a sad revelation of the process of entropy; a truth that everything will eventually discover in time. Nothing can escape it's grasp, none are safe from it's embrace. A very prophetic piece.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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thx so much Willowsong! :)S
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You're welcome :-)
Comment from El Coyote
A wonderful poem about the effects of family and things. And the reality of our finite existence on this planet. May we all do the best we can and learn and grow from our mistakes and experiences. Your poem reflects insights gained, thus growth for yourself and others. Wonderful poetry by a masterful wordsmith.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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A wonderful poem about the effects of family and things. And the reality of our finite existence on this planet. May we all do the best we can and learn and grow from our mistakes and experiences. Your poem reflects insights gained, thus growth for yourself and others. Wonderful poetry by a masterful wordsmith.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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thx so much EC! :)Sharyn
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Sharyn,
your stunning imagery brought memories flooding in... like I could hear the plodding clock and the silence that reverberates the air around it.
Not the way we want to remember things... a crumbling of the past that can never be put back together.
I found this to be amongst the best of your works, but when it comes from such a deep and tender spot from within your soul, the outcome was always going to be exceptional... just outstanding my dear friend... loved everything about every word and sentiment, it left an indelible stain upon my memory.
With our thoughts we create,
a memory of yesterday and a vision for tomorrow,
James xx
p.s.Touching stuff Sharyn, really left its mark.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Hi Sharyn,
your stunning imagery brought memories flooding in... like I could hear the plodding clock and the silence that reverberates the air around it.
Not the way we want to remember things... a crumbling of the past that can never be put back together.
I found this to be amongst the best of your works, but when it comes from such a deep and tender spot from within your soul, the outcome was always going to be exceptional... just outstanding my dear friend... loved everything about every word and sentiment, it left an indelible stain upon my memory.
With our thoughts we create,
a memory of yesterday and a vision for tomorrow,
James xx
p.s.Touching stuff Sharyn, really left its mark.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much James - and yes, I think it IS one of my best, so I'm delighted that you feel the same about it! Bless you for your lovely six, too!
:)S
Comment from Opal H.
Wow... I love how you first describe a place with your vivid imagery and then relate the same imagery to your mother, it adds an unexpected twist to it that is both amazing and touching. Great work!
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Wow... I love how you first describe a place with your vivid imagery and then relate the same imagery to your mother, it adds an unexpected twist to it that is both amazing and touching. Great work!
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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thx so much Opal!
Comment from TheGoldenPen
Descriptions, peerless. Humor, plenty. Poem=AMAZING. Another brilliant piece of work. It literally pulled out my mind and I collapsed. The words mixed with the background and the picture, making a powerful poem. Well done. Keep it up! =D
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Descriptions, peerless. Humor, plenty. Poem=AMAZING. Another brilliant piece of work. It literally pulled out my mind and I collapsed. The words mixed with the background and the picture, making a powerful poem. Well done. Keep it up! =D
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Bless you D - love your sixes and your empathy for my work. I'm honored, as always.
:)Sharyn
Comment from maggieadams
This is a professional rendering and poignantly sad. Your choice of words convey a place of stark coldness where live never got out of the starting blocks. You use sensory details to heighten this message that live should not be a sunless, perfectly placed pillow ....there are no do overs....fabulous poem.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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This is a professional rendering and poignantly sad. Your choice of words convey a place of stark coldness where live never got out of the starting blocks. You use sensory details to heighten this message that live should not be a sunless, perfectly placed pillow ....there are no do overs....fabulous poem.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much for your deep and lovely reading of my piece Maggie, and for your wonderful six. I'm honored.
Blessings,
Sharyn
