Thursday's Child - Part 3
Mama got married28 total reviews
Comment from jmdg1954
I enjoyed reading this next part to your story. A nice moving story, full of love and growth, and unfortunately the truth of the new dad-
As Thursday's child gained confidence
She learned she had some spunk
Her mom was careful with the truth
But her new dad's a drunk
Good alliteration throughout.
Nicely done... John
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
I enjoyed reading this next part to your story. A nice moving story, full of love and growth, and unfortunately the truth of the new dad-
As Thursday's child gained confidence
She learned she had some spunk
Her mom was careful with the truth
But her new dad's a drunk
Good alliteration throughout.
Nicely done... John
Comment Written 23-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Thank you John for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Janet
Comment from Willowsong
A great new addition to your story. Had a lovely flow with a nice abcb pattern. Excellent color choice, truly brightens up the piece with a cute, quaint image to compliment.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
A great new addition to your story. Had a lovely flow with a nice abcb pattern. Excellent color choice, truly brightens up the piece with a cute, quaint image to compliment.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Janet
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You're welcome :-)
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good alliteration with mama/married...to/town...house/hope...mom/made...home/her...some/spunk...dad's/drunk...learned/lessons...treasured/time. Good rhythm and flow. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good alliteration with mama/married...to/town...house/hope...mom/made...home/her...some/spunk...dad's/drunk...learned/lessons...treasured/time. Good rhythm and flow. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Thank you RR for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Janet
Comment from kiwijenny
As Thursday's child gained confidence
She learned she had some spunk
Her mom was careful with the truth
But her new dad's a drunk
How sad what she will have to face
God bless
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
As Thursday's child gained confidence
She learned she had some spunk
Her mom was careful with the truth
But her new dad's a drunk
How sad what she will have to face
God bless
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Janet
Comment from Selina Stambi
Hello Janet,
I am loving this touching little tale about Thursday's Child. You have not disappointed so far. Looking forward to the next part.
Have a lovely week!
Love,
Sonali :)
But her new dad's a drunk .. would you consider ...
But her new dad was a drunk ...? ...May help the metre along a wee bit. Just a thought - toss it out, if you will. :)
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
Hello Janet,
I am loving this touching little tale about Thursday's Child. You have not disappointed so far. Looking forward to the next part.
Have a lovely week!
Love,
Sonali :)
But her new dad's a drunk .. would you consider ...
But her new dad was a drunk ...? ...May help the metre along a wee bit. Just a thought - toss it out, if you will. :)
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Janet
Comment from adewpearl
solid use of abcb rhyming
good alliteration in some spunk and dad's a drunk
and in learned her lessons and treasured time
you continue to tell your story with good detail and insight into the characters
Brooke
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
solid use of abcb rhyming
good alliteration in some spunk and dad's a drunk
and in learned her lessons and treasured time
you continue to tell your story with good detail and insight into the characters
Brooke
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Thank you Brooke for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Janet
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Thursday's child has far to go - and I think this applies to your poem as well. Well written in story form. A good read and a happy ending as well. Or is there more to come? that would be nice. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
Thursday's child has far to go - and I think this applies to your poem as well. Well written in story form. A good read and a happy ending as well. Or is there more to come? that would be nice. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Thank you Dorothy for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thursday's child definitely has lots more to tell.
Janet
Comment from Muffins
Even when things look up, many times there is a glitch in the plan. The father's drinking for this child will unfortunately make her grow up fast( I can relate) but with give her the strength she needs to hopefully make better decisions than her mother. I treasure story/poems and I'm discovering so many of them on this site. It was a pleasure to read this.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
Even when things look up, many times there is a glitch in the plan. The father's drinking for this child will unfortunately make her grow up fast( I can relate) but with give her the strength she needs to hopefully make better decisions than her mother. I treasure story/poems and I'm discovering so many of them on this site. It was a pleasure to read this.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Janet
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I love you 8/6/8/6 meter and the abab rhyme. Thursdays child has far to go. I hope mom keeps a good watch on old dad because I don't like where this is leading. Well done. Nancy
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
I love you 8/6/8/6 meter and the abab rhyme. Thursdays child has far to go. I hope mom keeps a good watch on old dad because I don't like where this is leading. Well done. Nancy
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Thank you Nancy for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Janet
Comment from Deborah Marie
Your series is breathtaking. Just love the way you put each part together. This one is well penned. It has a lot meaning that I can relate to. God Bless, Deb
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
Your series is breathtaking. Just love the way you put each part together. This one is well penned. It has a lot meaning that I can relate to. God Bless, Deb
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Thank you Deb for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Janet