Picture Poems
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17 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
I enjoyed the form and the wonderful winter scene. The shifting meaning in the repeats and your rhymes are quite effective. Thank you for sharing the photograph of the berry bush and adding alliteration for increased intensity. Hugs and happy holiday weekend- Joan
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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I enjoyed the form and the wonderful winter scene. The shifting meaning in the repeats and your rhymes are quite effective. Thank you for sharing the photograph of the berry bush and adding alliteration for increased intensity. Hugs and happy holiday weekend- Joan
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Thank you Joan. happy Easter!
Comment from mrsmajor
A beautifully written Pantoum poem, (I love the form), the theme of the berry bush was real and thoughtful, it shows how God looks out for all his creations...
My favorite line: "it's placed with care by God's own hand, A berry bush to feed to the birds"
The picture and the words, made for a lovely package, for me it's a 6 star poem!
Thanks so much for sharing, it was a joy to read
Hugs,
Victoria
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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A beautifully written Pantoum poem, (I love the form), the theme of the berry bush was real and thoughtful, it shows how God looks out for all his creations...
My favorite line: "it's placed with care by God's own hand, A berry bush to feed to the birds"
The picture and the words, made for a lovely package, for me it's a 6 star poem!
Thanks so much for sharing, it was a joy to read
Hugs,
Victoria
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Thank you Victoria. I'm am glag you liked it and am pleased with that high rating.
You're very welcome, it was my pleasure!
Hugs,
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
I guess this is similar to an oasis in the desert.
This is an interesting style to use and serves the purpose of
Explaining this bountiful harvest which has appeared in the snow
Quite well.
A great image to use and interesting style with clever word choice and excellent choice of repeating lines.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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I guess this is similar to an oasis in the desert.
This is an interesting style to use and serves the purpose of
Explaining this bountiful harvest which has appeared in the snow
Quite well.
A great image to use and interesting style with clever word choice and excellent choice of repeating lines.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Thanks Shirley. Never thought of it that way before, but yes, I suppose it is.
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
Amazing resilience resides
In nature's yield, beyond all words.
Its bounty shared, as it provides
A berry bush to feed the birds.
In nature's yield, beyond all words,
There's plenty food for them to find,
A berry bush to feed the birds.
In winter, GIVING peace of mind.
There's plenty food for them to find.
It's placed with care by God's own hand.
In winter, GIVING peace of mind.
The best of it is really grand.
It's placed with care by God's own hand,
A berry bush to feed the birds.
The best of it is really grand,
In nature's yield, beyond all words.
A berry bush to feed the birds.
Its bounty shared, as it provides.
In nature's yield, beyond all words,
Amazing resilience resides.
Excellent.
Regards:
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Amazing resilience resides
In nature's yield, beyond all words.
Its bounty shared, as it provides
A berry bush to feed the birds.
In nature's yield, beyond all words,
There's plenty food for them to find,
A berry bush to feed the birds.
In winter, GIVING peace of mind.
There's plenty food for them to find.
It's placed with care by God's own hand.
In winter, GIVING peace of mind.
The best of it is really grand.
It's placed with care by God's own hand,
A berry bush to feed the birds.
The best of it is really grand,
In nature's yield, beyond all words.
A berry bush to feed the birds.
Its bounty shared, as it provides.
In nature's yield, beyond all words,
Amazing resilience resides.
Excellent.
Regards:
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much. I like that change and am very pleased by the stars.
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Dear Tom: Well deserved. Sent in my MS to publisher. Am waiting, breath bated.
Cheers: Steve
Comment from Writingfundimension
This poem beautifully illustrates the way nature provides in such an elegant manner for its many needy. If only we could see with the eyes of some of God's other creatures. I really enjoyed your splendid Pantoum. Warm regards, Bev
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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This poem beautifully illustrates the way nature provides in such an elegant manner for its many needy. If only we could see with the eyes of some of God's other creatures. I really enjoyed your splendid Pantoum. Warm regards, Bev
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Thank you Bev. I am happy you appreciated it so much.
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You're very welcome, Treischel. :0)
Comment from rod007
God places wonderful things in nature for our poor animals. It is indeed wonderful and this poem expresses the allure and power of that little berry bush. Well done, Tom.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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God places wonderful things in nature for our poor animals. It is indeed wonderful and this poem expresses the allure and power of that little berry bush. Well done, Tom.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Thank you rod. Yes, they know how to find it too.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
"Berry Bush" is an excellent poem in Pantoum format and follows the requirements of that form. It has excellent meter, and rhyme and a rhyme scheme followed consistently. It has good figurative language and imagery (amazing resilience resides).
Preston
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Hi, Treischel,
"Berry Bush" is an excellent poem in Pantoum format and follows the requirements of that form. It has excellent meter, and rhyme and a rhyme scheme followed consistently. It has good figurative language and imagery (amazing resilience resides).
Preston
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Thank you Oreston.
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Thank you Preston.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Wonderful pantoum, Tom, and brilliantly written. It speaks to how God provides for even the most meekly mild of His many wonderful creations.
Matthew 6:26: Behold the fowls of the air: for they sow not, neither do they reap, nor gather into barns; yet your heavenly Father feedeth them. Are ye not much better than they?
A wonderful poem for Good Friday, my friend. Well done!
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Wonderful pantoum, Tom, and brilliantly written. It speaks to how God provides for even the most meekly mild of His many wonderful creations.
Matthew 6:26: Behold the fowls of the air: for they sow not, neither do they reap, nor gather into barns; yet your heavenly Father feedeth them. Are ye not much better than they?
A wonderful poem for Good Friday, my friend. Well done!
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much Dean. That is the perfect scriptural reflection.
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You're very welcome, Tom. If I'd had a "real" six, it would have been yours. However, I had to add a "virtual" six for now.
Happy Easter, my friend!
Comment from DR DIP
Very well written Treischel I really enjoyed the recurring theme of the berry bush
I have never heard of a pantoum before fan story is one big learning curve for me.
thankyou for sharing this wonderful poem
dip
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Very well written Treischel I really enjoyed the recurring theme of the berry bush
I have never heard of a pantoum before fan story is one big learning curve for me.
thankyou for sharing this wonderful poem
dip
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Thank you Dr. dip. There is so much to learn in so many types of poetry.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
What an amazing job you did with this poem, Tom, there wasn't one line that was forced to complete it. The subject was delightful, such vivid imagery in each stanza, it really was a treat to read. Your photo is really lovely, Tom, your words and the photo truly compliment each other. :) xsx sandra
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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What an amazing job you did with this poem, Tom, there wasn't one line that was forced to complete it. The subject was delightful, such vivid imagery in each stanza, it really was a treat to read. Your photo is really lovely, Tom, your words and the photo truly compliment each other. :) xsx sandra
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much Sandra. I'm happy you enjoyed it .
