Comment from LoannaLois

Excellent

I'm in! I am thoroughly into the characters already. I LOVE the way you can take each character'a verbiage and make it his own within a word or two! Love this.I'll anticipate the next part.

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014

Thanks, L.Lois, that's good to know! I'm really happy that you enjoyed the story thus far. I really appreciate you tagging along for the ride!

Comment from barkingdog

Excellent

Hi Dean,
You've established your two main characters and their relationship. Now, off to the cemetery. I'll try to keep up.

-and daddy(Daddy) says

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014

Thanks, Ellen, I'd really appreciate your feedback, if you're able to provide it.

Just like the catch you made in this story, with "Daddy". That's the sort of things I still struggle with sometimes, and I even know the damn rules that apply! I get so frustrated with myself sometimes, lol.

Thanks again...for everything!

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

Good start my friend. And a very interresting beginning to a nice horror story to follow if i know you. I am along for the ride of my life i figure

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014

Thanks very much, Barb, and I will certainly try to provide you with one!

Comment from jgirlie152

Excellent

YOU DID IT AGAIN. ANOTHER INTERESTING STORY. GOOD DIALOGUE AND REACTIONS. WILL WATCH FOR THE NEXT EPISODE TO SEE WHAT HAPPENS NEXT.
JOAN

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014

Thanks so much, Joan, I'm very pleased to know that you liked it and will be following along. That means a great deal to me.

Comment from faragon

Exceptional

I love this story so far! At first I thought it was older guys talking. I can't wait to travel into the graveyard with them. The conversational tone flowed freely and naturally. The little snippets of past information was just enough to give you a taste of what was coming!

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014

Thanks a million, faragon. I'm so glad you enjoyed reading part one of this story. I hope you'll be following along, I'd sure appreciate it!

reply by faragon on 24-Apr-2014

I definately will be following...you have become one of my favorite authors! :)

reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014

Thank you, I appreciate that.

Comment from Jim Lorson Sr

Excellent

Great story dean about 2 teenage boys with one Dan being the dominate and more craftier then Timmy. Timmy already pranked and feeling stupid by Dan wants nothing to do with the plan to visit Harlan Hill and to engage Hubbard's Crypt.

This is a very good beginning to a ghoulish tale that you are a master at creating. Keep up the good work my friend,,,,,,Jim

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014

Thanks, Jim, I'm really glad you took time out to weigh in on this one for me. I always value your opinions, my friend.

Thanks so much again!

Comment from lindalcreel

Exceptional

It sounds like the beginning of a great story. I'll be on board for the next chapters. Boys (no offense) can be so gullible sometimes. The little bets they make with each other and never considering the dangers they are placing themselves or others in. Can't wait to see what happens in the cemetery.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014

Thanks very much, Linda, and no offense taken because, well...you're right. That's one primary factor to point to as to why it's a proven fact that girls mature far faster than boys do. All of that testosterone and hormonal influences get in the way far too often, I think.

I really am glad that you enjoyed the story, and I certainly appreciate your awesome review!

Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

You've got the 14 year old voice down to a T. And anyone who pinky swears deserves whatever fate delivers. Danny in the hockey mask prank-scaring his friends- why do I get the idea that that resembled little Dean?

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014

Who, moi? I don't know what could have possibly given you that impression, my dear friend (LOL). But, you're dead right, and much of this story will be drawn from a personal experience.

Thanks for weighing in on this story for me, ravenblack. I really appreciate it.

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

It is not the ghost in the grave yard one should worry about, it the ones locked in your mind. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014

Thanks for giving me your take on this story, Charlie. I sincerely appreciate that...I think? (LOL!)

reply by c_lucas on 22-Apr-2014

You're welcome, Dean. Charlie

Comment from Tomes Johnston

Excellent

This is yet another interesting story that the author has created with this piece of writing. I plan to stay on board to see just how this pans out in the end. This is yet another compelling read.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014

Thank you very much for your review, Tomes.

reply by Tomes Johnston on 22-Apr-2014

My pleasure

reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014

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