Comment from Smoothiecool

Excellent

good luck in the contest

your few words allow the reader to see and feel the images as McIver's wife shot him and his mistress dead after placing a camera in the bedroom

part rhyme works flows

cheers Smoothiecool

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014

Thank you for the kind review.

reply by Smoothiecool on 17-Apr-2014

welcome..SC

Comment from mfowler

Excellent

Poor McIver! He used to be so good at getting him out of sticky situations (TV show 80-90s). I like the easy flow of the epitaph through rhyme and rhythm. I also like the dark humour which pervades the entire thing. It's amazing just how much storyline you can fit into one small poem.

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014

Thanks for the kind review. It is truly amazing when a short poem can bring forth what is in between the lines.

Comment from DR DIP

Excellent

Interesting read, interesting picture
So I gather mciver was having an affair lol
Hell hath no fury like a woman scorned!
in the parameters of the competition prompt it is very witty and well done

dip

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from rouskin

Excellent

Very strong contender Gone away Owin' more Than he could pay.:):):):):) I wish you the best of luck in the contest
Blessings, Rouskin

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014

Thanks for the kind review.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Heh heh, this has everything that appeals to my tastes. A murder of passion (as long as it's not me being murdered), a dual gargoyled head stone, with the word HELL written on it in blood, Patsy Kline, and one heckuva great rhyming scheme. What more does a good epitaph need, I ask you?

Great work, I hope you do well in the contest.

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014

Thanks, glad you approve...

Comment from Lysa Schuler

Excellent

this was a good poem. But for some reason it scared me. However, it was written very well. It read well, subject fascinated me, and kept my interest entirely. Excellent work, and God bless.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014

Thank you for reviewing. Tombstones and murder are scary subjects, but it was meant to be humorous also. Didn't mean to scare you.

reply by Lysa Schuler on 16-Apr-2014

Humor, to each his own,and You're welcome, and thank you for sharing. Cheers, and many blessings.

Comment from Kingsland

Excellent

This reminds me of the Lizzie Borden poem. I like a good epitaph with humor as you've written here. This was a very enjoyable piece of poetic art to have read and written this response for... John

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014

Thanks, John. It was one of those (just for fun writes.)

Comment from mbagby23

Excellent

He paid the cost and so did she. I bet she didn't think sleeping with this married man would cost her, her life. The husband didn't know that was coming.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014

Yep, its called consequences. Thanks for reviewing.

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

strong rhymes, great cadence and flow when read aloud
a most dramatic and tragic story
great play on words with "climax"
I sure hope I die more peacefully than this! Brooke

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014

Thanks for reviewing. as long as we stay in our own beds, we will probably be ok...lol

Comment from Dawn Munro

Exceptional

HAHAHAHA - too cool! What a great entry for this contest. Not only well-metered and rhymed, but a very clever little story in this epitaph. Best of luck in the contest! (Great word-play too. *grin*)

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014

Thanks for reviewing and the bonus star. This one was fun.

reply by Dawn Munro on 16-Apr-2014

It was my pleasure.