Comment from Petriesan

Excellent

my favorite of these simple couplets is this:

In my dreams, I see your sweet face
Always there, something I can't erase

well done - I already read the next chapter. . thought I was going in order. . .

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014

Thanks, my friend. It is my fault they are out of order. I forgot to add some to my 'book'~debbie

Comment from GracieAnn

Excellent

Debbie, the rhyming couplets successfully elicit all the niceties of one lover who waits on the other for simple courtesies as a demonstration of love in the dreamworld. Well done. :0 GracieAnn

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014

Thank you, my friend~Debbie

Comment from Maureen's Pen

Excellent

Dear Debbie - I enjoyed this one - made me ponder my own dreams.
Yours sound more interesting than mine. Nicely descriptive, strong couplets.
A well penned post for April poetry month.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014

If only dreams would come true, but it is still nice to imagine what it would be like. Thank you, my friend~Debbie

Comment from Deborah Marie

Excellent

Clever use of descriptive wording along with "In my dreams" to start each stanza. Nice progression, rhythm and flow. Thanks for sharing, Deb

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014

Thank you. Glad you enjoyed it, my friend~Debbie

Comment from RGstar

Excellent

A nice write here Debbie, yet I can't help but wonder what ''sweet'' you are making. It seems as though something missing after sweet. It would be nice with ' love.'

Best wishes,
RGstar

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014

yes, it is supposed to be love--thanks for letting me know. I don't know why that word didn't copy. Thank you, my friend~Debbie

Comment from Gungalo

Excellent

In my dreams, we are making sweet (love)
Underneath golden moon, above

Nice rhyming couplets Debbie and you really took it to the limit for love.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014

Oops, I don't know where 'love' went, but I added it back. Thank you, my friend~Debbie

reply by Gungalo on 17-Apr-2014

LOL smile Debbie.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

A beautiful poem dreaming of things that can be, as if they are, which is what the definition of faith is! Beautiful words for something we all should have! One scripture says " without a vision my people perish" hope is what keeps us going! Blessings, Debbie, Roy..

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014

Thank you, my friend~Debbie

Comment from lancellot

Excellent

Very nice rhyming couplets. In dreams anything is possible, but when you're in love, all you dream about is what's possible with other. well done and I love the ending

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014

Clever! Thank you, my friend~Debbie

Comment from lakeport

Excellent

In my dreams, indeed , I love to dream, that's a very heartfelt expressed dream. nioe rhyming. I enjoyed reading it.God bless you.lakeport.

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014

Clever! Thank you, my friend~Debbie

reply by lakeport on 17-Apr-2014

your welcome.Hugs!Lakeport.

Comment from Zue65

Excellent

I am self-confessed romance sucker, I love romantic plots and romance poems just like what you have shared here. I don't know why love can also be equated with dreams, but honestly love can elicit dreams, it is like waking up the sub-conscious at night and allowing them to walk to dreamland with your beloved.I really enjoyed your poem. Thanks for sharing.

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 Comment Written 14-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014

Clever! Thank you, my friend~Debbie