Bow to the Past's Shadow!
History leads the wise and drags the fool84 total reviews
Comment from minopavlic
I read this poem through several times in careful consideration and as everyone has a different interpretation on the words read, these are my thoughts. A brilliant metaphorical theme, which in its articulate opening allows the mind to explore the vastness of the possibilities ahead, rather than the regretful steps of the past.
No_obstacle
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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I read this poem through several times in careful consideration and as everyone has a different interpretation on the words read, these are my thoughts. A brilliant metaphorical theme, which in its articulate opening allows the mind to explore the vastness of the possibilities ahead, rather than the regretful steps of the past.
No_obstacle
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Hello Friend,
Thank you very much for your so nice and encouraging comments.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from mfowler
You have packed a kitbag of wisdom into your abab rhyming poem here. I like how you've explored idioms such as 'History leads the wise and drags the fool' and given them a new perspective. It's just so true that what we sow is ultimately what we reap. Treat your kids poorly, for example, and they won't love you back in later life. Thanks for the stimulating read!
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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You have packed a kitbag of wisdom into your abab rhyming poem here. I like how you've explored idioms such as 'History leads the wise and drags the fool' and given them a new perspective. It's just so true that what we sow is ultimately what we reap. Treat your kids poorly, for example, and they won't love you back in later life. Thanks for the stimulating read!
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Hello Friend,
Thank you very much for your so nice and encouraging comments.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from c_lucas
This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. We can avoid areas in our daily life (micro) by studying the facts set forth in the macro.
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. We can avoid areas in our daily life (micro) by studying the facts set forth in the macro.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Hello Friend,
Thank you very much for your so nice and encouraging comments.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
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You're welcome, RP. Charlie
Comment from NicciFaye
Truly a great poem! Read it aloud and to myself. The opening is just wonderful on the mind. Filled with great wisdom and and awesome write.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Truly a great poem! Read it aloud and to myself. The opening is just wonderful on the mind. Filled with great wisdom and and awesome write.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Hello Friend,
Thank you very much for your so nice and encouraging comments.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from kiwijenny
Recall: History leads the wise and drags the fool,
It's an old saying, but still holds water;
Let's learn from it as we do from the nature's rule
And feel quite free from any disaster!
I had never heard this before....well done...well written wisdom
God bless
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Recall: History leads the wise and drags the fool,
It's an old saying, but still holds water;
Let's learn from it as we do from the nature's rule
And feel quite free from any disaster!
I had never heard this before....well done...well written wisdom
God bless
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Hello Friend,
Thank you very much for your so nice, encouraging comments and Good Wishes.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from smileycloud
your form cadence rhyme scheme are all great
the content/message is very well represented and the imagery of the poem speaks very clearly and loudly for itself
your talented work here has successfully combined teachings/seminar quality lecture BUT also remained a strong and beautiful poetic piece of lovely work
have a smiley day
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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your form cadence rhyme scheme are all great
the content/message is very well represented and the imagery of the poem speaks very clearly and loudly for itself
your talented work here has successfully combined teachings/seminar quality lecture BUT also remained a strong and beautiful poetic piece of lovely work
have a smiley day
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Hello Smileycloud,
Thank you very much for your so nice and encouraging comments backed by Good Wishes and shining SIX STARS!
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from Norbanus
This rhyming poet shows us there's a need
to help the rhyming couplet hold its ground
defend against encroaching free verse weed,
and spread iambic meter all around
The battle though, is hardly in the bag,
as artists of great skill have joined the foe
When even Fido gives his tail a wag,
to verses where rhyme knows no place to go
Old Shakespeare might roll over in his grave,
at seeing verses with naught but the word
Gad Zooks, my friends, there must be more to crave
yet they persist and grow, or so I've heard.
As the Keeper of the Flame, you hold the line
The rhymed verse lives, and it will do just fine
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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This rhyming poet shows us there's a need
to help the rhyming couplet hold its ground
defend against encroaching free verse weed,
and spread iambic meter all around
The battle though, is hardly in the bag,
as artists of great skill have joined the foe
When even Fido gives his tail a wag,
to verses where rhyme knows no place to go
Old Shakespeare might roll over in his grave,
at seeing verses with naught but the word
Gad Zooks, my friends, there must be more to crave
yet they persist and grow, or so I've heard.
As the Keeper of the Flame, you hold the line
The rhymed verse lives, and it will do just fine
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Hello Friend,
Thank you very much for your so nice and encouraging comments.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from DR DIP
what a beautiful wordsmith you are RP if I have read your works before I haven't read one so exquisite as this..I really love your style although I am a sucker for the rhyming poet I must admit. What I like about it is that I can easily under stand your beautiful metaphors right throughout without labouring over interpretation.
there are so many wonderful wordsmiths I discover everyday on this site and here is another! I will be fanning you for sure!!
May I be so bold in just observing one thing and it really is quite insignificant, but in the scheme of the perfect ABAB rhyming verse and especially in the parameters of a contest with very anal judges may I suggest you re address the following two verses:
Always remember: As you sow, so shall you reap
And it mirrors 'cause and effect theory';
Stir your past deeds where verity lies half asleep
And displays ways to success and glory!
to maybe:
Always remember: As you sow, so shall you reap
And it mirrors 'cause and effect theory';
Stir your past deeds where verity lies half asleep
And even displays ways to success when weary!
just thought phonetically it rhymes more perfectly in the context of ABAB rhyme
SECONDLY:
Recall: History leads the wise and drags the fool,
It's an old saying, but still holds water;
Let's learn from it as we do from the nature's rule
And feel quite free from any disaster!
now this might just be in pronunciation but I would reconsider the rhyming words water/disaster
just because they end in the same syllabic meter doesn't mean perfect ABAB rhyme look I'm not telling a beautiful experienced lecturer in the English language how to suck eggs by no means lol but just a layman's observation
IN THE CONTEXT OF THE RULES OF THIS CONTEXT IN THE JUDGES EYES lol
Recall: History leads the wise and drags the fool,
It's an old saying, but still holds water;
Let's learn from it as we do from the nature's rule
And feel quite free from any disaster!
to maybe
Recall: History leads the wise and drags the fool,
It's an old saying, but still holds water;
Let's learn from it as we do from the nature's rule
And feel no evil hold from devil's daughter
only a thought PLEASE don't take my suggestion as insulting because I would never do that I love the piece I was just trying to be helpful and supportive of a fellow rhyming poet
xxdip
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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what a beautiful wordsmith you are RP if I have read your works before I haven't read one so exquisite as this..I really love your style although I am a sucker for the rhyming poet I must admit. What I like about it is that I can easily under stand your beautiful metaphors right throughout without labouring over interpretation.
there are so many wonderful wordsmiths I discover everyday on this site and here is another! I will be fanning you for sure!!
May I be so bold in just observing one thing and it really is quite insignificant, but in the scheme of the perfect ABAB rhyming verse and especially in the parameters of a contest with very anal judges may I suggest you re address the following two verses:
Always remember: As you sow, so shall you reap
And it mirrors 'cause and effect theory';
Stir your past deeds where verity lies half asleep
And displays ways to success and glory!
to maybe:
Always remember: As you sow, so shall you reap
And it mirrors 'cause and effect theory';
Stir your past deeds where verity lies half asleep
And even displays ways to success when weary!
just thought phonetically it rhymes more perfectly in the context of ABAB rhyme
SECONDLY:
Recall: History leads the wise and drags the fool,
It's an old saying, but still holds water;
Let's learn from it as we do from the nature's rule
And feel quite free from any disaster!
now this might just be in pronunciation but I would reconsider the rhyming words water/disaster
just because they end in the same syllabic meter doesn't mean perfect ABAB rhyme look I'm not telling a beautiful experienced lecturer in the English language how to suck eggs by no means lol but just a layman's observation
IN THE CONTEXT OF THE RULES OF THIS CONTEXT IN THE JUDGES EYES lol
Recall: History leads the wise and drags the fool,
It's an old saying, but still holds water;
Let's learn from it as we do from the nature's rule
And feel quite free from any disaster!
to maybe
Recall: History leads the wise and drags the fool,
It's an old saying, but still holds water;
Let's learn from it as we do from the nature's rule
And feel no evil hold from devil's daughter
only a thought PLEASE don't take my suggestion as insulting because I would never do that I love the piece I was just trying to be helpful and supportive of a fellow rhyming poet
xxdip
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Hello DR DIP,
Thank you very much for your so nice, encouraging comments and Good Wishes.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
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Sorry for my suggestions..I can read between the lines you were somewhat miffed. hey that's cool each to their own good luck in the contest
dip
Comment from Janet Foor
I loved the artwork at presentation. Excellent ABAB rhyme. Excellent alliteration with peace, progress, prosperity.
Vivid imagery throughout. Very well done with a excellent message.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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I loved the artwork at presentation. Excellent ABAB rhyme. Excellent alliteration with peace, progress, prosperity.
Vivid imagery throughout. Very well done with a excellent message.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Hello Friend,
Thank you very much for your so nice, encouraging comments and Good Wishes.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from Karen B.
Lots of wisdom in your words. The past will always be around to guide and instruct us, the important thing is to not let it ensnare us in regrets or bad behaviors, and to remember that we reap what we sow. Your poem flows well with great rhyming. An enjoyable and interesting read.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Lots of wisdom in your words. The past will always be around to guide and instruct us, the important thing is to not let it ensnare us in regrets or bad behaviors, and to remember that we reap what we sow. Your poem flows well with great rhyming. An enjoyable and interesting read.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Hello Friend,
Thank you very much for your so nice and encouraging comments.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
