Bow to the Past's Shadow!
History leads the wise and drags the fool84 total reviews
Comment from healfromwithin
The poem's opening line was the best.
The near-rhymes may interfere with the contest rules (theory/glory, water/disaster) so you may want to re-thing them; ABAB.
I wrote a poem about the lunar eclipse tonight, too, called "Blood Moon, Shadow Moon;" I hope you have time to drop by and read it.
Good luck in your writing.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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The poem's opening line was the best.
The near-rhymes may interfere with the contest rules (theory/glory, water/disaster) so you may want to re-thing them; ABAB.
I wrote a poem about the lunar eclipse tonight, too, called "Blood Moon, Shadow Moon;" I hope you have time to drop by and read it.
Good luck in your writing.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Hello Friend,
Thank you very much for your so lovely and morale boosting comments backed by Good Wishes. I'll certainly read your poem.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem has a lot of truth in it. I assign the relatively recent wars and economic struggles to the refusal of our leaders to realize they were taking us into the 1930s again.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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This poem has a lot of truth in it. I assign the relatively recent wars and economic struggles to the refusal of our leaders to realize they were taking us into the 1930s again.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Hello Friend,
Thank you very much for your so lovely and morale boosting comments.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from Eternal Muse
This was so very good. Lots of wisdom in these lines. You are right - our future is in our past, and we reap what we sow. We should learn from the past and move on, not repeating our mistakes. I loved how you laid it all out. I also needed this today, for some reasons of my own.
Great lines:
Always remember: As you sow, so shall you reap
And it mirrors 'cause and effect theory';
Stir your past deeds where verity lies half asleep
And displays ways to success and glory!
Thank you so much for this delight. I enjoyed it thoroughly.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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This was so very good. Lots of wisdom in these lines. You are right - our future is in our past, and we reap what we sow. We should learn from the past and move on, not repeating our mistakes. I loved how you laid it all out. I also needed this today, for some reasons of my own.
Great lines:
Always remember: As you sow, so shall you reap
And it mirrors 'cause and effect theory';
Stir your past deeds where verity lies half asleep
And displays ways to success and glory!
Thank you so much for this delight. I enjoyed it thoroughly.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Hello Yeltel,
Thank you very much for your such a lovely and morale boosting review backed by shining SIX STARS and Good Wishes!
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from Jackarrie
a well written abab poem, advocating not to let the past overshadow your future. these are wise words indeed. We suffer if we do not learn and move on.
Recall: History leads the wise and drags the fool,
It's an old saying, but still holds water;
Let's learn from it as we do from the nature's rule
And feel quite free from any disaster!
unfortunately some of us has not learned for the wrongs of the past.
Well done, good luck in the contest. Mary
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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a well written abab poem, advocating not to let the past overshadow your future. these are wise words indeed. We suffer if we do not learn and move on.
Recall: History leads the wise and drags the fool,
It's an old saying, but still holds water;
Let's learn from it as we do from the nature's rule
And feel quite free from any disaster!
unfortunately some of us has not learned for the wrongs of the past.
Well done, good luck in the contest. Mary
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Hello Friend,
Thank you very much for your so nice, encouraging comments and Good Wishes.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from padumachitta
Hi. Good luck in the contest. This is a super pome in both meter and rhyme. The message is clear and the words are not forced.
and, I agree:-)
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Hi. Good luck in the contest. This is a super pome in both meter and rhyme. The message is clear and the words are not forced.
and, I agree:-)
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Hello Friend,
Thank you very much for your so nice, encouraging comments and Good Wishes.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from Willowsong
This is a well written, extremely poignant piece. It has an excellent flow to it and follows the pattern criteria well. It holds slight sadness because history does always appear doomed to repeat itself, no matter how much one may think they've learned. The phrase at the top with the image is truly existential and the eclipsed photo and color scheme adds wonderful imagery to your words. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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This is a well written, extremely poignant piece. It has an excellent flow to it and follows the pattern criteria well. It holds slight sadness because history does always appear doomed to repeat itself, no matter how much one may think they've learned. The phrase at the top with the image is truly existential and the eclipsed photo and color scheme adds wonderful imagery to your words. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Hello Friend,
Thank you very much for your so nice, encouraging comments and Good Wishes.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
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It was my pleasure and good wishes in return :)
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi RPSaxena,
History casts a very long shadow. I think it was Pliny who wrote that he who forgets his past is doomed to repeat its failures. Something I think our current political classes would do very well to ponder.
Nicely put in your excellent poem.
Patrick
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Hi RPSaxena,
History casts a very long shadow. I think it was Pliny who wrote that he who forgets his past is doomed to repeat its failures. Something I think our current political classes would do very well to ponder.
Nicely put in your excellent poem.
Patrick
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Hello Patrick,
Thank you very much for your so nice and encouraging comments backed by shining SIX STARS!
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, rpsaxena, you did an excellent job writing this quatrain poem about the way we can learn from others. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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this is very well written, rpsaxena, you did an excellent job writing this quatrain poem about the way we can learn from others. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Hello Sweetwoodjax,
Thank you very much for your so nice, encouraging comments and Good Wishes.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from Autumn Splendour
Well said and true indeed. We should not be shackled by the past but learn from it and move on.
I like the juxtaposition of philosophical thoughts and images: "This truth survives in life as in rose resides scent" Lovely!
The image chosen is a perfect fit. The black backdrop depicts sinister shadows that consumes if we are not careful and the disc with the halo of light augurs a better future if we "sow wisely their prolific seed"
Look forward to reading more of your profound thoughts.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Well said and true indeed. We should not be shackled by the past but learn from it and move on.
I like the juxtaposition of philosophical thoughts and images: "This truth survives in life as in rose resides scent" Lovely!
The image chosen is a perfect fit. The black backdrop depicts sinister shadows that consumes if we are not careful and the disc with the halo of light augurs a better future if we "sow wisely their prolific seed"
Look forward to reading more of your profound thoughts.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Hello Friend,
Thank you very much for your so nice, encouraging comments and Good Wishes.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from Irish Rain
So very true, the past is a direct influence, shadow on the present, and as such, time moves forward...we can always tell where we've been, and because of where we've been, often where we're going...great entry! Blessings to you tonight!
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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So very true, the past is a direct influence, shadow on the present, and as such, time moves forward...we can always tell where we've been, and because of where we've been, often where we're going...great entry! Blessings to you tonight!
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Hello Friend,
Thank you very much for your so nice, encouraging comments and Good Wishes.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
