Bow to the Past's Shadow!
History leads the wise and drags the fool84 total reviews
Comment from Nosha17
This is a well written poem with a powerful message. I agree, we must look forward, not back; learn from our mistakes and carry on. You have made good use of language and rhyme to convey your thoughts and it was a smooth, enjoyable read. Good luck in the contest, Faye
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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This is a well written poem with a powerful message. I agree, we must look forward, not back; learn from our mistakes and carry on. You have made good use of language and rhyme to convey your thoughts and it was a smooth, enjoyable read. Good luck in the contest, Faye
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Hello Friend,
Thank you very much for your so lovely and morale boosting comments backed by Good Wishes.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from Glasstruth
As they say, History repeats. That's easy to do since our memory iis short. Love these lines:
"This truth survives in life as in rose resides scent
And we've to grasp its gist with astute tact!"
Your abab rhyming is smooth. The message written really superbly! Les
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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As they say, History repeats. That's easy to do since our memory iis short. Love these lines:
"This truth survives in life as in rose resides scent
And we've to grasp its gist with astute tact!"
Your abab rhyming is smooth. The message written really superbly! Les
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Hello Friend,
Thank you very much for your so lovely and morale boosting comments.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from sunnilicious
How the years can get twisted into the future... There is wonderful wisdom bestowed in this poem. You thought it out as it is clearly written with good visual imagery. Also, there is an air of spirituality. Great rhythm. Good rhymes. Nice work.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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How the years can get twisted into the future... There is wonderful wisdom bestowed in this poem. You thought it out as it is clearly written with good visual imagery. Also, there is an air of spirituality. Great rhythm. Good rhymes. Nice work.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Hello Friend,
Thank you very much for your so lovely and morale boosting comments.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
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Have a good week :)
Comment from elchupakabra
I was back and forth with this piece. The thing is, some of the linework, while well written, still feels jarring when I read it, particularly this line;
This truth survives in life as in rose resides scent
The imagery is nice but the line feels crammed in like a puzzle piece that is almost perfect but not quite. I enjoyed the assonance you started with and the p alliteration later on, and overall I like the meaning of the piece. The last thing I'll say though, a quote I read that I really enjoyed. "The most dangerous sentence in the human language is; this is the way we've always done things." Great work on this piece, thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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I was back and forth with this piece. The thing is, some of the linework, while well written, still feels jarring when I read it, particularly this line;
This truth survives in life as in rose resides scent
The imagery is nice but the line feels crammed in like a puzzle piece that is almost perfect but not quite. I enjoyed the assonance you started with and the p alliteration later on, and overall I like the meaning of the piece. The last thing I'll say though, a quote I read that I really enjoyed. "The most dangerous sentence in the human language is; this is the way we've always done things." Great work on this piece, thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Hello Friend,
Thank you very much for your so lovely and morale boosting comments backed by Good Wishes.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from donaldww
The poet implores us to be cognizant of history, as it has a direct effect on the present.
Good end-line rhymes in all four stanzas.
I agree with your sentiment. Society must pay attention to history. A good start would be to re-elevate the subject of history in schools to the same importance as technology.
Cheers, DW
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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The poet implores us to be cognizant of history, as it has a direct effect on the present.
Good end-line rhymes in all four stanzas.
I agree with your sentiment. Society must pay attention to history. A good start would be to re-elevate the subject of history in schools to the same importance as technology.
Cheers, DW
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Hello Friend,
Thank you very much for your so lovely and morale boosting comments.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from TAB_that's me
You speak many truths in the poem. It is well written in the ABAB form with great rhyme and meter. Good luck in the contest.
teresa
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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You speak many truths in the poem. It is well written in the ABAB form with great rhyme and meter. Good luck in the contest.
teresa
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Hello Friend,
Thank you very much for your so lovely and morale boosting comments backed by Good Wishes.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from Just2Write
Nice ABAB poetry -
I especially liked this line:
Recall: History leads the wise and drags the fool
How true that is. Reminds me of another saying:
Those who to not learn from history, are doomed to repeat it.
Interesting slant rhyme with water/disaster.
good alliteration in: peace, progress, prosperity
Rose
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Nice ABAB poetry -
I especially liked this line:
Recall: History leads the wise and drags the fool
How true that is. Reminds me of another saying:
Those who to not learn from history, are doomed to repeat it.
Interesting slant rhyme with water/disaster.
good alliteration in: peace, progress, prosperity
Rose
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Hello Friend,
Thank you very much for your so lovely and morale boosting comments.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from akulkumol
Beautiful poem it's like a moral story. The truth it speaks about is really important in building one's life. Really loved reading it aloud. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Beautiful poem it's like a moral story. The truth it speaks about is really important in building one's life. Really loved reading it aloud. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Hello Friend,
Thank you very much for your so lovely and morale boosting comments.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from James Dooney
I did what you said to do and yes I think it works well ! I like what you have done here. I will read your poems out loud more now !
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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I did what you said to do and yes I think it works well ! I like what you have done here. I will read your poems out loud more now !
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Hello Friend,
Thank you very much for your so lovely and morale boosting comments.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from Kingsland
This poem has some very good advice in its thoughts and phrases. You have wisdom in its lines and the line flow very smoothly along its wisdom. This was a very enjoyable and positive poetic thought process. I enjoyed reading and writing this response for it... John
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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This poem has some very good advice in its thoughts and phrases. You have wisdom in its lines and the line flow very smoothly along its wisdom. This was a very enjoyable and positive poetic thought process. I enjoyed reading and writing this response for it... John
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Hello Friend,
Thank you very much for your so lovely and morale boosting comments.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
