Bow to the Past's Shadow!
History leads the wise and drags the fool84 total reviews
Comment from Showboat
All the best luck in the contest. This one should do quite well. Excellent subject and one that makes us all stop and think. Loved the cadence,
Gayle
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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All the best luck in the contest. This one should do quite well. Excellent subject and one that makes us all stop and think. Loved the cadence,
Gayle
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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Hello Friend,
I am very glad you enjoyed it. Thank you very much for your so lovely and morale boosting comments backed by Best Wishes.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from Rondeno
I'm sorry, but I found your opening stanza rather awkwardly-worded. May I respectfully suggest ...
The past always casts a shadow on the present
And we should bear in mind this truth;
The dark moon's greater than its crescent,
Age has more to say than youth.
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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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I'm sorry, but I found your opening stanza rather awkwardly-worded. May I respectfully suggest ...
The past always casts a shadow on the present
And we should bear in mind this truth;
The dark moon's greater than its crescent,
Age has more to say than youth.
!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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Hello Friend,
Thanks for your suggestion, but, sorry to say, it doesn't suit the tone and tenor of this poem if it's seen in its totality.
Thanks again!
~RP.
Comment from Petriesan
nice clean poem. it does read well aloud
if we do not learn from our past, we will never slog our way past it.
Good job with thsi piece
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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nice clean poem. it does read well aloud
if we do not learn from our past, we will never slog our way past it.
Good job with thsi piece
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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Hello Petriesan,
What a great review with lustrous SIX STARS!
I am very glad you enjoyed it. Thank you very much for your so nice, encouraging comments and most coveted Six Stars.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from Njorgensen
Your poem is extremely well-written. I admire your word choice and swim in the flow of the piece. I agree most definitely agree with the subject you've presented, as well. Wisdom grows over time, and we must heed its naggings.
Excellent!
Njorgensen
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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Your poem is extremely well-written. I admire your word choice and swim in the flow of the piece. I agree most definitely agree with the subject you've presented, as well. Wisdom grows over time, and we must heed its naggings.
Excellent!
Njorgensen
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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Hello Njorgensen,
What a great review with lustrous SIX STARS!
I am very glad you enjoyed it. Thank you very much for your so nice, encouraging comments and most coveted Six Stars.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A very well done poem and abab contest entry. Theter is so much truth in this, but as a society (or humanity) we continue to make the same poor judgements time after time. Best bwishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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A very well done poem and abab contest entry. Theter is so much truth in this, but as a society (or humanity) we continue to make the same poor judgements time after time. Best bwishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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Hello Debbie,
I am glad you enjoyed it. Thank you very much for your so lovely, morale boosting comments and Best Wishes.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Four well written stanzas in abab form and a good entry for the contest. I was particularly struck by your first line. We are all affected by our past, some manage to shake it off but whether good or bad it does affect our lives. Your poem is very philosophical in its approach. A little teeny bit cliche in the first line - third stanza. But the whole is very well written. I love your quote at the beginning 'Don't let the shadow of your past eclipse the brightness of your future'. I say quote - maybe these are your words - if they are then I wish I had thought of them. Good Luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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Four well written stanzas in abab form and a good entry for the contest. I was particularly struck by your first line. We are all affected by our past, some manage to shake it off but whether good or bad it does affect our lives. Your poem is very philosophical in its approach. A little teeny bit cliche in the first line - third stanza. But the whole is very well written. I love your quote at the beginning 'Don't let the shadow of your past eclipse the brightness of your future'. I say quote - maybe these are your words - if they are then I wish I had thought of them. Good Luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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Hello Dorothy,
I am glad you enjoyed it. Thank you very much for your so lovely, morale boosting comments and Good Wishes.
Friend, I will try my best to come up to your desired mark in future.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from honeytree
The art work is really great here
We can remember a lot of our past some good times
The not so good times.
Remember the good times
Move on with many good days and memories within our lives.
honey tree
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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The art work is really great here
We can remember a lot of our past some good times
The not so good times.
Remember the good times
Move on with many good days and memories within our lives.
honey tree
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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Hello Friend,
Thank you very much for your so nice and lovely comments.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
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Glad you liked the review.
honeytree
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Glad you liked the review.
honeytree
Comment from chasennov
Bow to the Past's Shadow!' An excellent poem you have created here. I liked its naked power, and its past ruling over the future, for there can be no future without a past. Well done.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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Bow to the Past's Shadow!' An excellent poem you have created here. I liked its naked power, and its past ruling over the future, for there can be no future without a past. Well done.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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Hello Friend,
I am glad you enjoyed it. Thank you very much for your so lovely and morale boosting comments.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
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You are most welcome, RP.
Comment from Leineco
There are times, in this poem, where the out loud reading greatly magnifies the assonance and rhythmic cadence. A few spots are a little over ess-ed, but not to any real detriment.
A story often told, but often with repeating (just ask the Jews of Germany) - the past must never be forgotten - lest you merely repeat it's gaffs. :-)
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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There are times, in this poem, where the out loud reading greatly magnifies the assonance and rhythmic cadence. A few spots are a little over ess-ed, but not to any real detriment.
A story often told, but often with repeating (just ask the Jews of Germany) - the past must never be forgotten - lest you merely repeat it's gaffs. :-)
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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Hello Friend,
I am glad you enjoyed it. Thank you very much for your so lovely and morale boosting comments.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from DonandVicki
I really enjoyed the rhyme and meter of your poetic verse. It is true that you have to hear the tone of the words to get the true meaning of the poem. Don
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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I really enjoyed the rhyme and meter of your poetic verse. It is true that you have to hear the tone of the words to get the true meaning of the poem. Don
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Hello Friend,
Thank you very much for your so lovely and morale boosting comments.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
