Knock...knock. Knock...knock.
Short Story-Contest Entry-Last Man On Earth8 total reviews
Comment from Twilightspire
Oh man, I wish I had a six star for you. This story was brilliant. The idiom the protagonist uses is perfect and easily understood. The story itself was a new take on the "last man on earth." Normally, you expect a sci-fi or a horror, but this one shone because it was neither. What an imaginative and well thought out story. Great job and a fascinating read.
-T.J.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Oh man, I wish I had a six star for you. This story was brilliant. The idiom the protagonist uses is perfect and easily understood. The story itself was a new take on the "last man on earth." Normally, you expect a sci-fi or a horror, but this one shone because it was neither. What an imaginative and well thought out story. Great job and a fascinating read.
-T.J.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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I am so delighted with your great praise. You have hit on everything I was trying to do. I may not stop smiling for quite a while! Thank you so very much, mikey
Comment from Dean Kuch
Great little story with an even more profound message. Be careful what you wish for because you just might get it!
We all know people like Mr Roach, I think. Roach is an appropriate name, since many scientists have speculated that those resilient insects would be one of few remaining living things alive in abundance should our world be destroyed by some unforeseen catastrophe or man-made horror.
I noticed only one minor error, which I made note of for you below.
Well done...
"Chanticleer Roach hated mankind and never felt more comfortablethen than when he did in his soundproof cellar."
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Great little story with an even more profound message. Be careful what you wish for because you just might get it!
We all know people like Mr Roach, I think. Roach is an appropriate name, since many scientists have speculated that those resilient insects would be one of few remaining living things alive in abundance should our world be destroyed by some unforeseen catastrophe or man-made horror.
I noticed only one minor error, which I made note of for you below.
Well done...
"Chanticleer Roach hated mankind and never felt more comfortable
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
Comment from El Coyote
A well-written story that leads me to think that perhaps those loner-type, introverts have it right and in the end, they will be the survivors. Doesn't bode well for regeneration though. Your writing was inviting to the senses, especially the knocking at the end.
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A well-written story that leads me to think that perhaps those loner-type, introverts have it right and in the end, they will be the survivors. Doesn't bode well for regeneration though. Your writing was inviting to the senses, especially the knocking at the end.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
Comment from daniela.albu
By far the best story in in this contest that I have read. The writing is balanced, it has lots of bitter humor and irony and the constant knock makes it qualify as a piece of absurd literature in the Kafkian sense of the word.
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By far the best story in in this contest that I have read. The writing is balanced, it has lots of bitter humor and irony and the constant knock makes it qualify as a piece of absurd literature in the Kafkian sense of the word.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
Comment from adewpearl
great illustrative examples of the kind of knocks that used to annoy the man when he wasn't yet the only man on Earth
I like his attitude LOL
typo - vacuum sweepers of Fuller - or
more comfortable then when - than when
Compelling ending :-) Brooke
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great illustrative examples of the kind of knocks that used to annoy the man when he wasn't yet the only man on Earth
I like his attitude LOL
typo - vacuum sweepers of Fuller - or
more comfortable then when - than when
Compelling ending :-) Brooke
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
This takes the line from the prompt and writes a coherent piece. The line fits the story and is not just stuck at the neginning bevause ot is required. Hss my vote. NG
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This takes the line from the prompt and writes a coherent piece. The line fits the story and is not just stuck at the neginning bevause ot is required. Hss my vote. NG
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Sounds like he went koo koo! Looks like he is the only survivor resulting from Thermonuclear warfare. He's got peace at last but no one to _itch about. Looks like a Jim dandy, Mikey. You look like a strong contender. wackster
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Sounds like he went koo koo! Looks like he is the only survivor resulting from Thermonuclear warfare. He's got peace at last but no one to _itch about. Looks like a Jim dandy, Mikey. You look like a strong contender. wackster
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
Comment from jb wade
A very funny and entertaining read. I feel you hit the nail on the head (clichÃ?. Sorry.) I can relate to the character. This also goes for a blasted ringing phone you don't want to answer and then when you do you want to kick yourself. Thanks for sharing.
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A very funny and entertaining read. I feel you hit the nail on the head (clichÃ?. Sorry.) I can relate to the character. This also goes for a blasted ringing phone you don't want to answer and then when you do you want to kick yourself. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
