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Comment from manicblue
This reads a bit disjointed (don't go away heart). It's hard to express thoughts when you only have a few words to do so.
Also, line one is 6 syllables instead of 5.
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This reads a bit disjointed (don't go away heart). It's hard to express thoughts when you only have a few words to do so.
Also, line one is 6 syllables instead of 5.
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Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
Comment from emrpoems
you are the only one,---6 syllables
i love you like earth loves sun,
don't go away heart.
Maybe you could use-- YOU'RE the only one---5 syllables
Once you have changed i will regrade for you
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you are the only one,---6 syllables
i love you like earth loves sun,
don't go away heart.
Maybe you could use-- YOU'RE the only one---5 syllables
Once you have changed i will regrade for you
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
Comment from judester
Great haiku comparing your love to the earth and sun. Good luck with the contest. I try not to use like in haiku, cheers Judester
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Great haiku comparing your love to the earth and sun. Good luck with the contest. I try not to use like in haiku, cheers Judester
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
