The Hero Falls
Revealing the fallacy of a child's view of their parent.95 total reviews
Comment from angelface2
Very beautiful, willowsong. Sad in it's way, too. I hope the writing will help you to heal. I find poetry a very good therapeutic. XX OO Miss Sally
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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Very beautiful, willowsong. Sad in it's way, too. I hope the writing will help you to heal. I find poetry a very good therapeutic. XX OO Miss Sally
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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Aye, posting this has truly helped me a lot. It's given me an outlet to express myself in a healthy, non-violent manner and the feedback I've been getting has been inspirational. Thank you for sharing your thoughts.
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You are so welcome and I am happy it is helping you. Miss Sally
Comment from Lothlorien
A great5-7-5 poem. It is very expressive, and flows well. I really enjoyed reading it, because it expresses being let with a harsh reality very well.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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A great5-7-5 poem. It is very expressive, and flows well. I really enjoyed reading it, because it expresses being let with a harsh reality very well.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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Thank you for sharing your opinion, Lothlorien. Glad you enjoyed it. Love your name, btw...LOTR fan, are ya? ;)
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Yup!
Comment from ravenblack
Behind cold, steel bars- this line says much in the context of the poem. As a child, perceptions of this father were as a hungry prisoner longing for love. As an adult, memory of him , her heart betrayed by his [inappropriate] love has locked you in that place of betrayal and shame. Excellent 5-7-5 that communicates with depth. Keep healing.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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Behind cold, steel bars- this line says much in the context of the poem. As a child, perceptions of this father were as a hungry prisoner longing for love. As an adult, memory of him , her heart betrayed by his [inappropriate] love has locked you in that place of betrayal and shame. Excellent 5-7-5 that communicates with depth. Keep healing.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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Nicely put, Raven. Thank you for sharing your thoughts. They are most appreciated.
Comment from royowen
A beautiful piece of artwork that adorns this qualifying 5-7-5 contest entry! It tends to be a little ambiguous in nature, nice descriptive, image creative words. Well done, I think, blessings, Roy.
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A beautiful piece of artwork that adorns this qualifying 5-7-5 contest entry! It tends to be a little ambiguous in nature, nice descriptive, image creative words. Well done, I think, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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Thank you for sharing your opinion. The ambiguity is a portrayal of how one can be scorned by love, yet yearn for things to go back to the way they were before things went awry, equivalent to a love/hate relationship.
Comment from rouskin
Writing sad songs often has a way of healing a situation. It gets the hurt out in the open into the light, out of the darkness.
Blessings, Rouskin
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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Writing sad songs often has a way of healing a situation. It gets the hurt out in the open into the light, out of the darkness.
Blessings, Rouskin
Comment Written 13-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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Thank you for your thoughts. They are truly appreciated.
Comment from Njorgensen
Hi Willow,
There are many examples of this style of poetry. This is one painful, powerful and effective. Heartache is such a personal thing, but pouring out your heart with poetry is a fine way to aid in healing. I wish you luck and thank you for sharing this with us.
Sincerely,
Njorgensen
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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Hi Willow,
There are many examples of this style of poetry. This is one painful, powerful and effective. Heartache is such a personal thing, but pouring out your heart with poetry is a fine way to aid in healing. I wish you luck and thank you for sharing this with us.
Sincerely,
Njorgensen
Comment Written 13-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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Thank you for your kind, compassionate words. I appreciate your time and review.
Comment from Andrewajgblue
This is very poignant and touching, the heartache really shines through, your words are lovely, I hope things improve for you personally, great job,
Andrew
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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This is very poignant and touching, the heartache really shines through, your words are lovely, I hope things improve for you personally, great job,
Andrew
Comment Written 13-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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Thank you for your kind words. They are most appreciated.
Comment from c_lucas
One can truly be imprisoned when the chains are from their own makings. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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One can truly be imprisoned when the chains are from their own makings. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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Thank you for sharing your viewpoint and opinion. It is most valued.
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You are welcome, Willow. Charlie
Comment from 9999pool
Betrayed by love and felt unwanted is a devastating thought to live with.
Abandonment and left waiting to feel his love can be a torture with lots of pain and anguish inside.
We begin to ask "Why me?".
All these questions have no answers except that missing person can explain.
On a bleeding heart tree are the surrounding teardrops with one teardrop dripping from the stigma - and it is this stigma that will always come back to haunt, longing for a simple embrace to wipe that tear away.
Great write and well expressed about betrayal.
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie. :))
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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Betrayed by love and felt unwanted is a devastating thought to live with.
Abandonment and left waiting to feel his love can be a torture with lots of pain and anguish inside.
We begin to ask "Why me?".
All these questions have no answers except that missing person can explain.
On a bleeding heart tree are the surrounding teardrops with one teardrop dripping from the stigma - and it is this stigma that will always come back to haunt, longing for a simple embrace to wipe that tear away.
Great write and well expressed about betrayal.
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie. :))
Comment Written 13-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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Thank you for such an enchanting review. I love how you explained the bleeding heart's representation. :)
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For an enchanting write only an enchanting review will do it justice.
The flow of the story is good and the description helped a lot too.
Some reviewers may have got the message slightly slanted, smiles.
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie. :))
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I enjoy sharing in other's perspective, even if it may not match the author's per se. Different lifestyles will produce different viewpoints. It enlightens me to angles I may not have considered and can give a slight insight on another's world. Words can be so revealing. Cheers!
Comment from Zue65
Yes, young kids or teeners adolescent angst over their parents may only be confirmed to be wrong, when the kids themselves are in jail and have proven that their parents counsels are in themselves true after all. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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Yes, young kids or teeners adolescent angst over their parents may only be confirmed to be wrong, when the kids themselves are in jail and have proven that their parents counsels are in themselves true after all. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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A very intriguing point-of-view. Thank you for sharing your opinion and perspective. Namaste!
