The Hero Falls
Revealing the fallacy of a child's view of their parent.95 total reviews
Comment from Bryan G
Thank you for sharing this difficult situation with us. In your poem you have beautifully captured the essence of one bound by the pain of love. I have found poetry to be my help in times of trouble. Wishing you the best.
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
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Thank you for sharing this difficult situation with us. In your poem you have beautifully captured the essence of one bound by the pain of love. I have found poetry to be my help in times of trouble. Wishing you the best.
Comment Written 17-May-2014
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
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Thank you for the lovely review and appreciation of my vulnerability revealed. You're encouragement is uplifting, indeed. Peace be with you.
Comment from arsinBW
This is really good. So close to a six but I don't have any more. Sorry. I really enjoyed it though and I wish you good luck with it.
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
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This is really good. So close to a six but I don't have any more. Sorry. I really enjoyed it though and I wish you good luck with it.
Comment Written 16-May-2014
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
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Thank you for the lovely review and generous stars. The mental sixth is noted and truly appreciated. Sometimes, I wish I had more to give out too. Your enjoyment is what matters the most :)
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello Willowsong, Excellent 5-7-5 poem, and your message is heartbreaking and sad:
her heart betrayed by his love
(so very sad.)
Very good. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
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Hello Willowsong, Excellent 5-7-5 poem, and your message is heartbreaking and sad:
her heart betrayed by his love
(so very sad.)
Very good. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 16-May-2014
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
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Thank you for the lovely review and generous stars. They are both truly appreciated.
Comment from WLHall
I think I can imagine from your notes and title the hurt and shock you must be going through. I know I can't know the depth at all. I'm so sorry. Knowing your hurt makes your poem so much more special. The words are strong and to the point painting a vivid word picture. I hope you come out the other side a stronger person. Take care.
Wanda
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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I think I can imagine from your notes and title the hurt and shock you must be going through. I know I can't know the depth at all. I'm so sorry. Knowing your hurt makes your poem so much more special. The words are strong and to the point painting a vivid word picture. I hope you come out the other side a stronger person. Take care.
Wanda
Comment Written 16-May-2014
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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Thank you kindly for your heartfelt and honest review. Your empathy is truly welcomed and appreciated. You understand completely the emotions my words portray. The high rating is honoring and humbling.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Yes, I get it, Willowsong. There is nothing worse, nothing that saddens me more, than a child's love going unrequited. Parents are supposed to love their children unconditionally. At least, that was how I was raised.
Hopefully through your writing, you will come to terms with this realization.
You'll be in my thoughts...
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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Yes, I get it, Willowsong. There is nothing worse, nothing that saddens me more, than a child's love going unrequited. Parents are supposed to love their children unconditionally. At least, that was how I was raised.
Hopefully through your writing, you will come to terms with this realization.
You'll be in my thoughts...
Comment Written 16-May-2014
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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Thank you for such a kind and heartfelt review. The most difficult aspect to my situation is that I know I'm loved. Unfortunately, the love falls extremely short, even when I expressed what it was I needed that would help fix my pain. I couldn't even get him to attempt to make me a cake for my birthday. Apparently, not knowing how to cook or bake was supposed to pacify the emptiness in my heart. Now, he will never even be able to begin to make up for the lack of quality that wasn't there in my childhood, even should he so desire to. His own selfish love for immorality has barred him for the rest of his life. I am thankful to have a wonderful husband who has spent many years making up for the lack of emotion from my parents, though he shouldn't have had to.
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A good, kind and caring spouse is always a plus, my friend.
You're every welcome for the review.
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Agreed...I'd be so lost in this world without him and our beautiful children by my side :-)
Comment from GWHARGIS
As I understood the poem, I thought it was about a child who suddenly realizes that a parent behind bars made selfish choices and left the child behind. Great use of sparse wording to make the point come across loud and clear.
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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As I understood the poem, I thought it was about a child who suddenly realizes that a parent behind bars made selfish choices and left the child behind. Great use of sparse wording to make the point come across loud and clear.
Comment Written 16-May-2014
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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Yes, you understand the message exactly. I know the video doesn't quite match, being two loves instead of parent and child, yet as put in the author notes, the point in which the two switch places, I felt it relevant to my situation; even though I'm on the outside looking in, I feel as though I am the one actually imprisoned. Thank you for your time and sharing your perspective. I appreciate the lovely review.
Comment from WritingsByG
You sent me a congrats on my 'bad poem'. I thought I'd stop by and see who you are, and I find someone else who has had 'the veil of perception lifted'. I see you are home schooling your children. Very commendable, and I congratulate you for doing so.
The song is very apropo to my situation also. I've lost physical contact with my children now going on 9 years. They were 8 & 5 when I was forced out due to the veil of perception. I have Skype etc contact, but no hugs or kisses. How can she do this when it's illegal, and immoral? The justice system could care less.
Take care and hold your babies tight.
G
reply by the author on 14-May-2014
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You sent me a congrats on my 'bad poem'. I thought I'd stop by and see who you are, and I find someone else who has had 'the veil of perception lifted'. I see you are home schooling your children. Very commendable, and I congratulate you for doing so.
The song is very apropo to my situation also. I've lost physical contact with my children now going on 9 years. They were 8 & 5 when I was forced out due to the veil of perception. I have Skype etc contact, but no hugs or kisses. How can she do this when it's illegal, and immoral? The justice system could care less.
Take care and hold your babies tight.
G
Comment Written 14-May-2014
reply by the author on 14-May-2014
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My deepest empathy for your plight. This past year I've learned a truly valuable & hard lessons: life is never fair, no matter how hard you work at doing the right thing :-( It's definitely a dog eat dog world evil is always consuming. Just keep placing one foot in front of the other and one day you will get to hold your babies again someday. They won't be children forever and hopefully you'll have many adult years to come to make up for that lack of closeness. It's good you still can talk with them & see them via Skype. Remind them every time how much you love them and wish you were with them. Don't ever stop believing in them. I don't take one moment for granted with them, knowing at any given time, they can be swept away from me for any number of reasons. They are truly precious to me. I appreciate you taking the time to stop by, view my entry and leave such a heartfelt review. I'm honored by the generous stars. Keep a stout heart and peace be with you.
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Thank you for your kind words. I wish you all that I wish for myself and my children.
Take care
G
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You're most welcome and my humble thanks to you as well, friend. Peace be with you :-)
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And with you
G
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:-)
Comment from L.A.Matthies
An excellent 5-7-5, the pure emotion is clearly revealed in your well chosen words. The bleeding heart is a nice compliment to this piece :)Linda
reply by the author on 06-May-2014
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An excellent 5-7-5, the pure emotion is clearly revealed in your well chosen words. The bleeding heart is a nice compliment to this piece :)Linda
Comment Written 05-May-2014
reply by the author on 06-May-2014
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Thank you for the positive review and the generous stars. I truly appreciate your time and thoughts. Peace be with you.
Comment from Jessica Harrison
As short as this poem is, to me, it speaks volumes. Unfortunately, I pushed away someone dear to me and I still don't know if it was for the best or not or I just panicked.
Reading poems and stories like this one maybe good for some but to others its like a sting, quick and sad.
Nicely written.
reply by the author on 05-May-2014
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As short as this poem is, to me, it speaks volumes. Unfortunately, I pushed away someone dear to me and I still don't know if it was for the best or not or I just panicked.
Reading poems and stories like this one maybe good for some but to others its like a sting, quick and sad.
Nicely written.
Comment Written 05-May-2014
reply by the author on 05-May-2014
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Thank you for sharing your personal thoughts and for the generous review. I truly appreciate you opening up about your own pain. Sometimes, it's difficult to know what's best for us until we walk far enough down a chosen path to get a clear, cut view of a situation. That does mean making yourself vulnerable to pain and sadness should the path not be ideal. It's scary to open yourself up and put your heart on the line, and much easier to withdraw from it than face any pain that may come with it. Outside of our parents, we get to have that choice and control of who we give our hearts to. It sounds like you've been scorned in the past and why you most likely pushed away the person who meant so much to you. You have to ask yourself, "Is this person worth taking the risk?" There's an old adage, I'm sure you're familiar with: It's far better to have loved and lost, than to have never loved at all. Peace be with you, friend :)
Comment from Norbanus
Your author notes and other quotes
that lie behind the verse
show stories here bereft of cheer
and only growing worse
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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Your author notes and other quotes
that lie behind the verse
show stories here bereft of cheer
and only growing worse
Comment Written 04-May-2014
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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Thank you for the insightful review and generous stars. I enjoyed reading your poetic perspective; your intuition is spot on. It's not quite over yet. Peace be with you.
