The Hero Falls
Revealing the fallacy of a child's view of their parent.95 total reviews
Comment from ArtGal
You just reviewed me, so I wanted to reciprocate. I don't know if I'm interpreting this correctly, but if this is about a Father, then I can truly understand. I'm so sorry that you're facing this now, and without a Mother. I hope you have siblings or others you can talk to. And as I said before, if you feel like it, send me a PM and we can talk. It seems as if we have a lot in common. I may be able to help, or at least I'll try. . .Sharon
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2014
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You just reviewed me, so I wanted to reciprocate. I don't know if I'm interpreting this correctly, but if this is about a Father, then I can truly understand. I'm so sorry that you're facing this now, and without a Mother. I hope you have siblings or others you can talk to. And as I said before, if you feel like it, send me a PM and we can talk. It seems as if we have a lot in common. I may be able to help, or at least I'll try. . .Sharon
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2014
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That is very kind and thoughtful of you. I truly appreciate your time. You interpreted correctly. I do have two half siblings. Unfortunately, one is behind the mess of it all and the other is too busy sitting on the fence trying not to get involved which is only adding more confusion, frustration and pain. Families can be too dysfunctional sometimes. Coming here and sharing my thoughts with others is saving my sanity.
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Yes, this is the place to be to escape for awhile and writing is the best way I can think of. You'll have to review often, but you'll learn a lot by doing that and earning money in order to post also. Enjoy!
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That's exactly what I've been working on the last couple days too, lol. Writing reviews to help keep my poem posted for others to view. I'm up to rank 3 and can post up to 14 reviews a day now. I'm on the free membership sign up atm but hoping if I win first place in the 5-7-5 contest, I can use my winnings to buy a membership and keep on going. I've worked my poem up to page 4. The goal is page 1, of course. I would love to see it hit the featured page. That would just make my day! I'm also finding many ppl who have shared similar harships in their lives and that helps keep me grounded and gives me the strength to keep moving forward. Knowing I'm not alone in my pain greatly eases it. I'm glad to have met you :)
Comment from judester
A poignant poem, made even more so, as it is truly affecting you. Longing for embrace, might be the 3 saddest words to imagine. I wish you peace,love and clarity, Judester
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2014
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A poignant poem, made even more so, as it is truly affecting you. Longing for embrace, might be the 3 saddest words to imagine. I wish you peace,love and clarity, Judester
Comment Written 09-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2014
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I am humbly greatful for your kind words. Thank you.
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
Behind cold, steel bars
Her heart betrayed by his love
Longing for embrace
'betrayed' and 'longing' are strange bedfellows (contradiction). The piece is well presented by the pic as noted. Meets all strictures. Good luck in this crisis of heart.
Regards:
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2014
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Behind cold, steel bars
Her heart betrayed by his love
Longing for embrace
'betrayed' and 'longing' are strange bedfellows (contradiction). The piece is well presented by the pic as noted. Meets all strictures. Good luck in this crisis of heart.
Regards:
Comment Written 09-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2014
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Thank you for your thoughts. I appreciate your candor. Aye, those two words do strongly contradict each other, I agree. I chose them specifically to represent how a child can be torn in two by their emotions for a parent. To be angry and heartbroken by choices made and at the same time to be consumed with the desire to return to what once was. Most relationships would end by such emotions but a child/parent relationship can be so much more complicated evovling mixed emotions that can't be resolved.
Comment from NicciFaye
This is a beautiful 5-7-5..the contruction of it is nicely done and you've met all the requirements of this contest entry. Its amazing what we can write about as poets just by living every day life. May God heal your hurt and keep you protected. Many blessings.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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This is a beautiful 5-7-5..the contruction of it is nicely done and you've met all the requirements of this contest entry. Its amazing what we can write about as poets just by living every day life. May God heal your hurt and keep you protected. Many blessings.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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Thank you kindly for your review. I'm new to Fanstory and this is my first official entry. It's pleasing to not only receive feedback, but that's it's positive as well. I'm very timid when it comes to sharing my writing with others, especially when it expresses vulnerability. I appreciate the time you took to share your opinion with me. It's quite encouraging.
Comment from Karen B.
So much sadness in these few syllables, the hurt and loss come thru loud and clear. Very well written, with each word well chosen. Best wishes in the contest.
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reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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So much sadness in these few syllables, the hurt and loss come thru loud and clear. Very well written, with each word well chosen. Best wishes in the contest.
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Comment Written 08-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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Thank you for taking the time to review my poem. Though the message is one of sadness and pain, I am glad to know the emotion comes across. I figure sharing it with others is far better than wallowing in it alone and this gives me a positive outlet to let it out. I appreciate your time.
