Savannah Love
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Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, barbara, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where the walkers threaten paige and she files a restraining order against them. the storm hits and paige is alone. morgan goes missing
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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this is very well written, barbara, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where the walkers threaten paige and she files a restraining order against them. the storm hits and paige is alone. morgan goes missing
Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from Janie King
Oh darling please don't leave me hanging for a whole week wandering what happened to Morgan. I'm terrible having patience with something like this, but i will if I must. God loves you and so do I.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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Oh darling please don't leave me hanging for a whole week wandering what happened to Morgan. I'm terrible having patience with something like this, but i will if I must. God loves you and so do I.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from NaughtieScribe
Mr. Walker turned and faced Paige. "She knows all right. She just doesn't care." - Go Paige, go Paige! Doing my happy dance. Loving it.
Oh crap, please don't tell me that one of Walker's cronies had grabbed Morgan. Or maybe he's following Bookman? Are we finally going to find out about this treasure?
You never fail to leave me wonder what's coming next.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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Mr. Walker turned and faced Paige. "She knows all right. She just doesn't care." - Go Paige, go Paige! Doing my happy dance. Loving it.
Oh crap, please don't tell me that one of Walker's cronies had grabbed Morgan. Or maybe he's following Bookman? Are we finally going to find out about this treasure?
You never fail to leave me wonder what's coming next.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by. I am right there with the happy dance.
Comment from angelface2
Wow, this was a scary chapter. Keeping everyone on their toes, huh? I don't like thunderstorms. Hope the dog is ok. And I am so glad your son is doing ok now. Can't wait for more. Miss Sally
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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Wow, this was a scary chapter. Keeping everyone on their toes, huh? I don't like thunderstorms. Hope the dog is ok. And I am so glad your son is doing ok now. Can't wait for more. Miss Sally
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from elgone
Another good installment as we get closer to the conclusion. Are they going to find the treasure. Is the ghost going to help them? A lot left to be resolved.
E
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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Another good installment as we get closer to the conclusion. Are they going to find the treasure. Is the ghost going to help them? A lot left to be resolved.
E
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by. HUGS!!!
Comment from amahra
That was a great scene here with everyone gone and bad storm brewing and Peige and her trusty dog, Right? Oh no, where did Morgan go. Peige can't be left alone. Great cliffhanger...indeed. Oh, I think I've said this before, but love your character's names: Peige, Cash, Mary Pat, Billy Joe, Morgan for a dog's name. Great chapter.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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That was a great scene here with everyone gone and bad storm brewing and Peige and her trusty dog, Right? Oh no, where did Morgan go. Peige can't be left alone. Great cliffhanger...indeed. Oh, I think I've said this before, but love your character's names: Peige, Cash, Mary Pat, Billy Joe, Morgan for a dog's name. Great chapter.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and the encouragement. Morgan got Paige in a real mess this time.
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Thank you for the kind review and the encouragement. Morgan got Paige in a real mess this time.
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Thank you for the kind review and the encouragement. Morgan got Paige in a real mess this time.
Comment from Fridayauthor
You're a fine writer; no doubt about it. Your writing doesn't need more expletives of praise.
I'm reading you for the first time and I have time on my hands, so please indulge me in my comments; not criticisms.
My early background is writing for the theater where emotion is demonstrated less by words than actions. However, in fiction, the reader isn't privy to the visual; we have to tell them or, better yet, show them.
When Paige finds she has a bed-mate, she turns pink, but you don't tell us her feelings or reasons. Did she not want this to happen? She invited him. We don't know but you're missing the opportunity to show us by her action or rejoinder.
"Paige patted the dog's head." Think of the scene. We, the readers desperately want to know her reaction to this meeting at her door, don't we? There's no description of emotion on anyone's part.
"Mrs. Walker cried." There has to be a better way to describe this reaction to a very tense situation. And what is Mr. Walker doing? He's just standing by until he at least threatens her, but how? "Red faced, he snarled..."
I apologize for being so picky, but the site asks me to point out what I see, and perhaps, what I don't.
Thank you for posting this; I plan to read more of your offerings.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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You're a fine writer; no doubt about it. Your writing doesn't need more expletives of praise.
I'm reading you for the first time and I have time on my hands, so please indulge me in my comments; not criticisms.
My early background is writing for the theater where emotion is demonstrated less by words than actions. However, in fiction, the reader isn't privy to the visual; we have to tell them or, better yet, show them.
When Paige finds she has a bed-mate, she turns pink, but you don't tell us her feelings or reasons. Did she not want this to happen? She invited him. We don't know but you're missing the opportunity to show us by her action or rejoinder.
"Paige patted the dog's head." Think of the scene. We, the readers desperately want to know her reaction to this meeting at her door, don't we? There's no description of emotion on anyone's part.
"Mrs. Walker cried." There has to be a better way to describe this reaction to a very tense situation. And what is Mr. Walker doing? He's just standing by until he at least threatens her, but how? "Red faced, he snarled..."
I apologize for being so picky, but the site asks me to point out what I see, and perhaps, what I don't.
Thank you for posting this; I plan to read more of your offerings.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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I made some of the changes you suggested, but not all of them. I appreciate the time you took to give me a thorough review.
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I made some of the changes you suggested, but not all of them. I appreciate the time you took to give me a thorough review.
Comment from Gungalo
Wow!! When it rains it pours eh? The rain and thunder and lightning are so intense and I thing Paige is about to have another visit she will regret. SIgh.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Wow!! When it rains it pours eh? The rain and thunder and lightning are so intense and I thing Paige is about to have another visit she will regret. SIgh.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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I sure hope not. Paige just can't stay out of trouble. Cash should never leave her. Don't you agree? LOL Thank you for the kind review.
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I think they should be getting married soon. LOL
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb
what an eventful chapter with all that was going on with Paige a storm, the Walkers being so distraught over the death of their son and Morgan running off when there is no electricity.
Cash should of never left her alone.
Gert
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Hello Barb
what an eventful chapter with all that was going on with Paige a storm, the Walkers being so distraught over the death of their son and Morgan running off when there is no electricity.
Cash should of never left her alone.
Gert
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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I hope realizes that. Leave Paige alone and trouble will find her. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
Love the dialogues I forget who said I should use more in my book was that you?
Some spag and just some idle comments ok.
isn't in the glove box where it should (b)me."
He he following not a spag but she's startin to tolk Redneck "That way 'you all' can leave and be back before the storm hits." maybe I'm wrong ok
hehe.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Love the dialogues I forget who said I should use more in my book was that you?
Some spag and just some idle comments ok.
isn't in the glove box where it should (b)me."
He he following not a spag but she's startin to tolk Redneck "That way 'you all' can leave and be back before the storm hits." maybe I'm wrong ok
hehe.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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I hadn't caught on to Paige speakin' redneck. OH MY!!!!!!!!!! Am I turning into a Southern? OH NO!!!! I may live in TX, but I'm proud of my Yankee roots. Thank you for the kind review.
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Hi yeah actually it was more tx than redneck methinks now you mention it hehe. I kinda study yankee and redneck and Aussie dialects so the Tx fits the 'you all' or the "ya'll" or whatever. One of the very first Americans I met was from the panhandle in Tx Man I had a job getting around her acceunt ya'll! hEHE!! had a bad habit of doing the 50 states dialects in five seconds for a while I did hehe.
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When we moved to South Carolins, first I ticketed for having IL plates on my car, not kidding. Anyway, every body said Hey, instead of Hello or Hi, it threw me. I thought everybody was uneducated, then I realized no matter how much education they had they said Hey.
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I think I talked about the won't for 'want' in the saouth hehe also far for fire and are for our sigh.
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I think I talked about the won't for 'want' in the saouth hehe also far for fire and are for our sigh.
