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Comment from JM daSilva
I think this sentence should be in the past tense since he's dead.
The police have come to many crime scenes and have seen what he's capable of.
And I think she did the right thing. Sometimes mothers defend their children too much.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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I think this sentence should be in the past tense since he's dead.
The police have come to many crime scenes and have seen what he's capable of.
And I think she did the right thing. Sometimes mothers defend their children too much.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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You're correct and I fixed that sentence. Thank you for helping and dropping by. I always appreciate your input.
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Great pleasure.
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Good chapter, Barbara. I enjoyed the easy relationship between Paige and Cash. Good dialogue, especially with the confrontation.
And you leave us with quite the hook! Where has Morgan gone? Well done.
Av
call the police and have you() removed."
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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Good chapter, Barbara. I enjoyed the easy relationship between Paige and Cash. Good dialogue, especially with the confrontation.
And you leave us with quite the hook! Where has Morgan gone? Well done.
Av
call the police and have you() removed."
Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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I fixed it. Thank you for the catch and dropping by.
Comment from abbasjoy
The whole atmosphere seems go be one foreshadowing doom and gloom to come, or at any rate drama that is about to unfold.
First the Walkers with their high and mighty attitude,then this storm which is obviously a fierce one, and now the disappearance of Morgan.
The fact that no one is around is rather frightening, especially with Morgan's disappearance, and the lights being off. Now the mystery continues.
Another intriguing chapter.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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The whole atmosphere seems go be one foreshadowing doom and gloom to come, or at any rate drama that is about to unfold.
First the Walkers with their high and mighty attitude,then this storm which is obviously a fierce one, and now the disappearance of Morgan.
The fact that no one is around is rather frightening, especially with Morgan's disappearance, and the lights being off. Now the mystery continues.
Another intriguing chapter.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from Writingfundimension
The nerve of the Walkers to show up at Paige's door! And the ending with the cool air and missing pup - the ghost has to be behind all this. I always enjoy your easy dialogue, Barbara. Great job. :0) Bev
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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The nerve of the Walkers to show up at Paige's door! And the ending with the cool air and missing pup - the ghost has to be behind all this. I always enjoy your easy dialogue, Barbara. Great job. :0) Bev
Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by. I appreciate your input.
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You're very welcome, barbara.
Comment from barkingdog
The nerve of those Walkers, showing up at the door! Well written dialogue. Sick the lawyers on them!! LOL
Now, I have to worry about Morgan? Damn. Where has he gone?
One suggestion, since he is dead:
"The police have come to many crime scenes and have seen what he's capable of."
"The police came to many crime scenes and saw what he was capable of."
-"Please leave(, or) I'll call the police and have your(you) removed."
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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The nerve of those Walkers, showing up at the door! Well written dialogue. Sick the lawyers on them!! LOL
Now, I have to worry about Morgan? Damn. Where has he gone?
One suggestion, since he is dead:
"The police have come to many crime scenes and have seen what he's capable of."
"The police came to many crime scenes and saw what he was capable of."
-"Please leave(, or) I'll call the police and have your(you) removed."
Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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I have fixed those areas. Thank you for the kind review and your help. I appreciate both.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Barbara - this has a flowing emotion through your characters that held me captive. They almost seem as if real in my living room. Well penned heated action with the Walkers. A strong hook near the end that also captivated me, wondering what is coming next. Great imagery, easy smooth read and as always great transitions in dialogue.
Overall great piece for your story.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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Dear Barbara - this has a flowing emotion through your characters that held me captive. They almost seem as if real in my living room. Well penned heated action with the Walkers. A strong hook near the end that also captivated me, wondering what is coming next. Great imagery, easy smooth read and as always great transitions in dialogue.
Overall great piece for your story.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the kind review. There's all sorts of road construction on the way to work. I live in one town and drive into the city to work. I don't know my way around the city and each day last week I got lost. Friday I tried a different way, and really got lost. I actually thought of you and one of your wonderful peaceful poems.
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That just put a big smile on my face - not that you got lost, but thought of my peaceful poems...greatest gift of all.
Thank you!
Hugs
M
Comment from Norbanus
Surely Morgan didn't run away and hide when the storm hit? Nah! Maybe he just behind a chair where he can still see Paige and protect her if he needs too.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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Surely Morgan didn't run away and hide when the storm hit? Nah! Maybe he just behind a chair where he can still see Paige and protect her if he needs too.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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A hint. Morgan really did it this time. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Wow great chapter, Barbara. Those Walkers were absolute fruitcakes - what planet are they from? (LOL) They seemed rather unrealistically concerned with Paige, rather than grieving the very recent death of their son. Sheesh.
Poor puppy has probably scooted somewhere hiding from the storm (I hope)!
Nice, tight writing, as usual, and tension is building with Paige alone and the storm approaching!!!
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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Wow great chapter, Barbara. Those Walkers were absolute fruitcakes - what planet are they from? (LOL) They seemed rather unrealistically concerned with Paige, rather than grieving the very recent death of their son. Sheesh.
Poor puppy has probably scooted somewhere hiding from the storm (I hope)!
Nice, tight writing, as usual, and tension is building with Paige alone and the storm approaching!!!
Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and appreciate you dropping by.
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Barbara:)
Another great chapter, with wonderful dialog. I especially liker the confrontation between Paige and the Walkers, although I would not have expected them to come to the mansion, but it is more apparent than ever that they are a couple and belong together.
I am surprised that neither Mary Pat or Billy Joe mentioned where Cash spent the night in Paige's bedroom. Of course, Cash was too much of a gentleman to take advantage of Paige,
Now a bad storm has closed in and as the lights go out Paige fins that Morgan is missing. In hiding from yhe storm, will Morgan uncover a hidden entrance to tunnels beneath the house.
Love and Irish Hugs for more great storytelling.
Roger
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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Hi Barbara:)
Another great chapter, with wonderful dialog. I especially liker the confrontation between Paige and the Walkers, although I would not have expected them to come to the mansion, but it is more apparent than ever that they are a couple and belong together.
I am surprised that neither Mary Pat or Billy Joe mentioned where Cash spent the night in Paige's bedroom. Of course, Cash was too much of a gentleman to take advantage of Paige,
Now a bad storm has closed in and as the lights go out Paige fins that Morgan is missing. In hiding from yhe storm, will Morgan uncover a hidden entrance to tunnels beneath the house.
Love and Irish Hugs for more great storytelling.
Roger
Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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I think Mary Pat and Billy Joe trust and know Cash would be a gentleman in every sense of the word. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
The confrontation with the Walkers is excellent, it seems to me that there is a lot wrong with that family and in this town, far more than anyone is admitting. Now Morgan has vanished from next to Paige. What are you plotting for this girl now?
Good hook on the end of this, now we must wait again to see where you've put the pup and what happens next for Paige.
Patrick
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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Hi Barbara,
The confrontation with the Walkers is excellent, it seems to me that there is a lot wrong with that family and in this town, far more than anyone is admitting. Now Morgan has vanished from next to Paige. What are you plotting for this girl now?
Good hook on the end of this, now we must wait again to see where you've put the pup and what happens next for Paige.
Patrick
Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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A hint, Morgan really did it this time. Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
