Savannah Love
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Comment from Cajungirl
Action, violence, murder; this part of Chapter eighteen has it all. I enjoyed the excitement of this part. Poor Paige will probably have trouble coping with the fact that she actually murdered Walker. I look forward to what's going to happen next.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Action, violence, murder; this part of Chapter eighteen has it all. I enjoyed the excitement of this part. Poor Paige will probably have trouble coping with the fact that she actually murdered Walker. I look forward to what's going to happen next.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
Consider: Omit 'was' when ever possible
"Once Billy Joe had finished talking,...
"The knife had fallen to the side. Paige noticed as it moved toward her.
"Would somebody PLEASE tell me what happened!
"I don't know for sure but I think THEY'RE in the mud room.
Little details count=reader interest, for ex:
"Cash went back to Paige and held her.
CONSIDER:
"I know." Cash walked back to Paige. He brushed aside a lock of hair that had fallen over her face. She looked up and smiled as he held her tight.
Regards:
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Consider: Omit 'was' when ever possible
"Once Billy Joe had finished talking,...
"The knife had fallen to the side. Paige noticed as it moved toward her.
"Would somebody PLEASE tell me what happened!
"I don't know for sure but I think THEY'RE in the mud room.
Little details count=reader interest, for ex:
"Cash went back to Paige and held her.
CONSIDER:
"I know." Cash walked back to Paige. He brushed aside a lock of hair that had fallen over her face. She looked up and smiled as he held her tight.
Regards:
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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I will take care of that. I knew about 'was' I guess I got careless. Thank you for putting me back on track.
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Dear Barbara: We watch each others back don't we.
XXX Steve
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that's a good thing.
Comment from Sasha
I am so pleased Billy Joe picked up on the terrible fact that Paige will experience serious regret knowing she killed Walker. Now, I hope Bradley reveals where the treasure it or at least proves there isn't one. You had me hanging on the edge of my chair with this one. Great chapter and I look forward to the next one.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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I am so pleased Billy Joe picked up on the terrible fact that Paige will experience serious regret knowing she killed Walker. Now, I hope Bradley reveals where the treasure it or at least proves there isn't one. You had me hanging on the edge of my chair with this one. Great chapter and I look forward to the next one.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by. I always enjoy hearing from you.
Comment from Janie King
Wow, Paige got into that one for sure. But, this was s dangerous dude. I hope they don't arrest her for murder. God loves you and so do I.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Wow, Paige got into that one for sure. But, this was s dangerous dude. I hope they don't arrest her for murder. God loves you and so do I.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from Ben Colder
This is better that a Sherlock Holmes skit. Knife fighters. Wow Take that, and that. Now on to finding the treasure. Bet it's in the crawl space. Shalom my friend.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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This is better that a Sherlock Holmes skit. Knife fighters. Wow Take that, and that. Now on to finding the treasure. Bet it's in the crawl space. Shalom my friend.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by. I have to find the treasure first. I am not sure where it's hiding. LOL
Comment from Erik McGinley
I liked this. Maybe this is the story about the ghost that I read some of quite a while back?
I remember I didn't like the amount of dialog in that but I thoroughly enjoyed this chapter, reading it quite happily as a short story in its own right.
It echoes a really weird 'dream' I have about stopping a rape in a local pub and trying to stop the bargirl from stabbing her assailant with a bread knife saying that if she did, she likely go to jail too. Then someone he got stabbed anyway. Can't say I was unhappy about that however it happened. I'd never liked him :P
Like I said, nice chapter and well written.
Thank you for a fun read :)
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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I liked this. Maybe this is the story about the ghost that I read some of quite a while back?
I remember I didn't like the amount of dialog in that but I thoroughly enjoyed this chapter, reading it quite happily as a short story in its own right.
It echoes a really weird 'dream' I have about stopping a rape in a local pub and trying to stop the bargirl from stabbing her assailant with a bread knife saying that if she did, she likely go to jail too. Then someone he got stabbed anyway. Can't say I was unhappy about that however it happened. I'd never liked him :P
Like I said, nice chapter and well written.
Thank you for a fun read :)
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sylvia Page
"Paige!" Cash lifted Walker from her and repeated/repeatedly slugged Walker's already battered body.
She grabbed it and thrust it into Walker's side, not once, but repeatedly and yelled,
"Walker, I presume."
"If you would've believed me the first time, or even the second, this wouldn't have
"I don't understand why/what he does or doesn't do. I just know I saw the knife move
I think I have missed a few chapters. So went back to come up to date.
This is a chapter full of violent action. Well done.
Cheers
Sylvia
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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"Paige!" Cash lifted Walker from her and repeated/repeatedly slugged Walker's already battered body.
She grabbed it and thrust it into Walker's side, not once, but repeatedly and yelled,
"Walker, I presume."
"If you would've believed me the first time, or even the second, this wouldn't have
"I don't understand why/what he does or doesn't do. I just know I saw the knife move
I think I have missed a few chapters. So went back to come up to date.
This is a chapter full of violent action. Well done.
Cheers
Sylvia
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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I have made all those changes. I guess it took a while for the changes to take place. I just went back and checked. They are corrected. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
Great work! Been wondering when you were gonna turn up with some more stuff for us. Good reading and very exciting. No Spags. I have added another verse to my Creepy Neighbours poem, and tidied it up a bit if interested,
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Great work! Been wondering when you were gonna turn up with some more stuff for us. Good reading and very exciting. No Spags. I have added another verse to my Creepy Neighbours poem, and tidied it up a bit if interested,
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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It hasn't come into my PM box. I wonder why. I will check it out.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
Well I can't say the ghastly Dwayne didn't deserve it, and the detective needs an attitude adjustment or a change of career. You resolved the attempt on Paige well, now all that remains is what has happened to Nala, and what the heck Bradley the Friendly Ghost (to some) is hiding in these tunnels.
Patrick
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Hi Barbara,
Well I can't say the ghastly Dwayne didn't deserve it, and the detective needs an attitude adjustment or a change of career. You resolved the attempt on Paige well, now all that remains is what has happened to Nala, and what the heck Bradley the Friendly Ghost (to some) is hiding in these tunnels.
Patrick
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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I can't wait to see what's in those tunnels myself. LOL. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from mumsyone
Good chapter, Barbara.
"Paige!" Cash lifted Walker from her and repeated (repeatedly) slugged Walker's already battered body.
He,(no comma) then,(no comma) grabbed Cash around the shoulders and dragged him away.
"Walker(,) I presume." He took out his phone,
"I don't understand why (what) he does or doesn't do.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Good chapter, Barbara.
"Paige!" Cash lifted Walker from her and repeated (repeatedly) slugged Walker's already battered body.
He,(no comma) then,(no comma) grabbed Cash around the shoulders and dragged him away.
"Walker(,) I presume." He took out his phone,
"I don't understand why (what) he does or doesn't do.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the kind review. I have made the corrections.
