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Comment from Angel Blessings
Excellent reading kept my attention throughout the whole piece very dramatic.Paige is a great character really enjoyed your work unfortunately this is the first chapter I've read so now they have to go back and read all the chapters thus far good job congratulations on this chapter thank you for your work sincerely AngelBlessings
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Excellent reading kept my attention throughout the whole piece very dramatic.Paige is a great character really enjoyed your work unfortunately this is the first chapter I've read so now they have to go back and read all the chapters thus far good job congratulations on this chapter thank you for your work sincerely AngelBlessings
Comment Written 06-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Barb. How are you. It's so good to read your chapters again. A bit of violence in the making eh? Lots of action and you described it very well. fights are difficult as you no doubt fouind out. LOL
Great images as always, Barb.
Suggestion: "Paige stretched and grabbed the fire extinguisher. She tried to raise it and hit Dwayne but from her angle couldn't. She pulled the safety key and sprayed Walker's face." I would re-write this perhaps as follows:
"Paige managed to grab the extinguisher, but couldn't raise it from her angle. Instead, she pulled the safety key and sprayed Walker's face."
Great write. Bob
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2014
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Hi, Barb. How are you. It's so good to read your chapters again. A bit of violence in the making eh? Lots of action and you described it very well. fights are difficult as you no doubt fouind out. LOL
Great images as always, Barb.
Suggestion: "Paige stretched and grabbed the fire extinguisher. She tried to raise it and hit Dwayne but from her angle couldn't. She pulled the safety key and sprayed Walker's face." I would re-write this perhaps as follows:
"Paige managed to grab the extinguisher, but couldn't raise it from her angle. Instead, she pulled the safety key and sprayed Walker's face."
Great write. Bob
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2014
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Sorry it has taken me so long to answer this. I needed time to make the changes safely with out making additional mistakes. I appreciate your help.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
No dragging moments in this writing. It definitely is fast-paced. I see other reviewers pointed out that it seems Paige stabbed more than once in self-defense, but from what I understand, it would take more than one wound to stop the character of Dwayne Walker.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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No dragging moments in this writing. It definitely is fast-paced. I see other reviewers pointed out that it seems Paige stabbed more than once in self-defense, but from what I understand, it would take more than one wound to stop the character of Dwayne Walker.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
New problems are bound to arise for Paige. Multiple stab wounds aren't usually dismissed as self defense.
"Cash walked over to Paige and caressed her cheek. "Where's Mary Pat and Morgan." - omit first " / ? after Morgan /is there a more descriptive verb than "walked" to describe Cash's action? It seems bland after the fight.
Coming along very well, Barbara. :) nancy
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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New problems are bound to arise for Paige. Multiple stab wounds aren't usually dismissed as self defense.
"Cash walked over to Paige and caressed her cheek. "Where's Mary Pat and Morgan." - omit first " / ? after Morgan /is there a more descriptive verb than "walked" to describe Cash's action? It seems bland after the fight.
Coming along very well, Barbara. :) nancy
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the catch. I changed that area and still got it wrong. I appreciate the help.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
some serious action in this chapter,
Barbara. Paige was obviously protecting Cash.
I hope there's no trouble over this.
great chapter, my friend.
Margaret
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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some serious action in this chapter,
Barbara. Paige was obviously protecting Cash.
I hope there's no trouble over this.
great chapter, my friend.
Margaret
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from smudge
A well written fast action chapter. Paige is our likeable heroine. Plenty of dialogue to move the story on. Its not just a ghost writer!
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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A well written fast action chapter. Paige is our likeable heroine. Plenty of dialogue to move the story on. Its not just a ghost writer!
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from AprilShower
I'm curious. Did Paige stab Dwayne that many because of anger or was she trying to protect Cash. It seemed that Cash had things under control. I am wondering if she and Cash will be in trouble for killing him.
Why did Dwayne think there was treasure hidden in her house? He should have said why he thought there was treasure there.
April
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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I'm curious. Did Paige stab Dwayne that many because of anger or was she trying to protect Cash. It seemed that Cash had things under control. I am wondering if she and Cash will be in trouble for killing him.
Why did Dwayne think there was treasure hidden in her house? He should have said why he thought there was treasure there.
April
Comment Written 03-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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In my earlier chapters the treasure was established. Thank you for the kind review b
Comment from bhogg
Barbara - the only negative to me was that it ended so soon. I've enjoyed your book very much. You develop and maintain such interesting characters. I admire your work. Warm regards, Bill
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Barbara - the only negative to me was that it ended so soon. I've enjoyed your book very much. You develop and maintain such interesting characters. I admire your work. Warm regards, Bill
Comment Written 03-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from Auroraboreal800
I think this is a very special chapter, with old Morgan coming to the rescue. Dog's part is beautiful, as they are so faithful. You're doing a great job Barbara.
Excellent!
:)
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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I think this is a very special chapter, with old Morgan coming to the rescue. Dog's part is beautiful, as they are so faithful. You're doing a great job Barbara.
Excellent!
:)
Comment Written 03-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from Writingfundimension
The action turns very serious in this rather dark chapter, Barbara. Maybe Paige will surprise everyone about the news she contributed to Walker's death -- afer all he was going after Cash. Well done, Barbara. :0) Bev
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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The action turns very serious in this rather dark chapter, Barbara. Maybe Paige will surprise everyone about the news she contributed to Walker's death -- afer all he was going after Cash. Well done, Barbara. :0) Bev
Comment Written 03-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
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You're very welcome!
