The Woman in Red
Fatal Beauty34 total reviews
Comment from Ric Myworld
Thanks for another great story that had me hooked from early on. I hoped that the safe was rigged, but just wasn't so sure, by the way the story was set up. Great job. :-)
>>"Okay, the tape is (in) my safe behind the picture on the wall over there."
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thanks for another great story that had me hooked from early on. I hoped that the safe was rigged, but just wasn't so sure, by the way the story was set up. Great job. :-)
>>"Okay, the tape is (in) my safe behind the picture on the wall over there."
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thank you very much. I appreciate the great review and edits. I seem to always miss a few.
JW
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I find things in everyone's work but my own. LOL.
Comment from Orphan33
Nicely written. Really enjoyed the story line. Kudos for the originality. The image was really a nice touch. Well done.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Nicely written. Really enjoyed the story line. Kudos for the originality. The image was really a nice touch. Well done.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Sylvia Page
She slowly parted her ruby lips and blew a thick stream grey of smoke into my face./She slowly parted her ruby lips and blew a thick stream of grey smoke into my face.
She opened the door, and a massive explosion of steal/steel and flame consumed her once flawless face.
That the headless woman was willing bring my kid into this
Good story. That safe trick was very smart.
Sylvia
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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She slowly parted her ruby lips and blew a thick stream grey of smoke into my face./She slowly parted her ruby lips and blew a thick stream of grey smoke into my face.
She opened the door, and a massive explosion of steal/steel and flame consumed her once flawless face.
That the headless woman was willing
Good story. That safe trick was very smart.
Sylvia
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thank you very much, Sylvia. I will fix those right away. I appreciate all your help.
Jw
Comment from Cindy Warren
I'll have to keep this in mind the next time I want to get into someone's safe! LOL Though I thought this lady got what she deserved, I had to wonder why a clever detective wouldn't take a tape like that to the FBI immediately, before the congressman could sober up and regret his mistake. Still, I did get a kick out of Alex's predicament. You have a couple of mistakes. Peak should be peek. Steal and flame should be steel and flame.
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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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I'll have to keep this in mind the next time I want to get into someone's safe! LOL Though I thought this lady got what she deserved, I had to wonder why a clever detective wouldn't take a tape like that to the FBI immediately, before the congressman could sober up and regret his mistake. Still, I did get a kick out of Alex's predicament. You have a couple of mistakes. Peak should be peek. Steal and flame should be steel and flame.
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Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thank you very much, Cindy. Fresh eyes are always appreciated. You are right about the two days. I will make it yesterday.
