Savannah Love
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Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Barbara:)
I have been unable to review for the past two weeks, so I am happy to find two of your entertaining posts waitihg for me.
Now that Cash and Billy Joe have returned with new information, every one deems to relax more especially Paige and Cash. Paige soon confirms tje presence of yunnels under her mansion. Can this ne the hiding plabe for a Civl War treasure?
I noted two errors in the first paragraph: As the door opened, Morgan pushed his way [passed ==>past] them and ran out [on] the grass.{ Note the use of 'passed' for 'past'. Did you leave out the word 'on'?}
Love and Irish Hugs for great fun and wonderful dialog.
Roger
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Hi Barbara:)
I have been unable to review for the past two weeks, so I am happy to find two of your entertaining posts waitihg for me.
Now that Cash and Billy Joe have returned with new information, every one deems to relax more especially Paige and Cash. Paige soon confirms tje presence of yunnels under her mansion. Can this ne the hiding plabe for a Civl War treasure?
I noted two errors in the first paragraph: As the door opened, Morgan pushed his way [passed ==>past] them and ran out [on] the grass.{ Note the use of 'passed' for 'past'. Did you leave out the word 'on'?}
Love and Irish Hugs for great fun and wonderful dialog.
Roger
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the catches. I never get passed or past correct. I have made the changes. You are a dear.
Comment from Narvik
I love your dialogue, Barbara. I think everyone does. It's hard to pull off a chapter so dense with conversation without intermittent narrative, but you pulled it off well.
Loved the competitive nature of Paige and Cash. It really brings the chapter to life. Makes it more vivid, especially with the childlike reactions to winning and losing.
Loved the line "the 'got to go now' dance" by the way. Overall, a good chapter that moves the story along well. Keep it up.
~ Jack
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2014
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I love your dialogue, Barbara. I think everyone does. It's hard to pull off a chapter so dense with conversation without intermittent narrative, but you pulled it off well.
Loved the competitive nature of Paige and Cash. It really brings the chapter to life. Makes it more vivid, especially with the childlike reactions to winning and losing.
Loved the line "the 'got to go now' dance" by the way. Overall, a good chapter that moves the story along well. Keep it up.
~ Jack
Comment Written 21-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2014
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My puppy often does that dance. I know it well. Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from Magpiemazy.
Having started your book on this chapter, I was pleasantly surprised to be grabbed immediately and pulled deep into the story. That is a rare quality. I look forward to reading more of your work.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2014
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Having started your book on this chapter, I was pleasantly surprised to be grabbed immediately and pulled deep into the story. That is a rare quality. I look forward to reading more of your work.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and the encouraging words.
Comment from Angel Blessings
I just stumbled on this chapter, so I am coming in late as far as relating to the characters, but it is very believe able. Google flow, and kept my attention! Good job! Angel Blessings
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2014
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I just stumbled on this chapter, so I am coming in late as far as relating to the characters, but it is very believe able. Google flow, and kept my attention! Good job! Angel Blessings
Comment Written 20-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2014
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Chrisfiore
Hi barbara wilkey,
Just found this from a random search for new material to read. Though I haven't read the other parts to your story, I can saw that this flows smoothly and the conversation seems believable. It is difficult to come in on the middle of ones work, but at the same time, perhaps "new" eyes will pick up on what regular readers miss. I hope you do well with this story. ; ) Chrisfiore
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014
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Hi barbara wilkey,
Just found this from a random search for new material to read. Though I haven't read the other parts to your story, I can saw that this flows smoothly and the conversation seems believable. It is difficult to come in on the middle of ones work, but at the same time, perhaps "new" eyes will pick up on what regular readers miss. I hope you do well with this story. ; ) Chrisfiore
Comment Written 20-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Patricia1
Very interesting to read! I always enjoy reading about the plantation, slavery, war, etc, era. I haven't had the opportunity to read all of your chapters but I like what I have read of the storyline here. Of course the love of two people and a special dog help to keep my interest! Good job.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014
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Very interesting to read! I always enjoy reading about the plantation, slavery, war, etc, era. I haven't had the opportunity to read all of your chapters but I like what I have read of the storyline here. Of course the love of two people and a special dog help to keep my interest! Good job.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from ragamuffin
Beautiful dog. I love the premise of this story, restoring an old house, romance in the making. Well written dialogue that flows well and keeps the reader's interest.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014
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Beautiful dog. I love the premise of this story, restoring an old house, romance in the making. Well written dialogue that flows well and keeps the reader's interest.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014
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Thank your for the kind review.
Comment from amahra
Great chapter Barbara. I liked the playfulness of Paige and Cash racing to breakfast. I don't think it's too much dialogue given the fact that the chapters are in four parts.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014
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Great chapter Barbara. I liked the playfulness of Paige and Cash racing to breakfast. I don't think it's too much dialogue given the fact that the chapters are in four parts.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and the encouragement.
Comment from smudge
A well written chapter of this novel . There is plentiful dialogue to move the story forward, as it should be. A well presented posting. I had the same thing when I pasted all my ' became ?as well as first inverted comma. I changed them all and forgot to save and had to do it all again!
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2014
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A well written chapter of this novel . There is plentiful dialogue to move the story forward, as it should be. A well presented posting. I had the same thing when I pasted all my ' became ?as well as first inverted comma. I changed them all and forgot to save and had to do it all again!
Comment Written 19-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2014
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How horrible! I wish FS would fix the problem. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from stephanieduftonfuimo102284
Beautifully written. I am looking forward to reading more of your work. There are a few things I would like to point out. Some of your sentances are incomplete, in some areas you jumped topics and some of your wording didnt make sence. None the less I did enjoy reading your work.
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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2014
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Beautifully written. I am looking forward to reading more of your work. There are a few things I would like to point out. Some of your sentances are incomplete, in some areas you jumped topics and some of your wording didnt make sence. None the less I did enjoy reading your work.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2014
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Hmmmm, first time I received a review like this. Thank you for the review.
