Savannah Love
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Comment from NaughtieScribe
Cash closed the hood. "I'm not arguing." - Don't mess with Bradley! lol
He reached over and kissed her cheek. "Good night." -Paige and Cash kissing in the tree, er bed - lol. Well at least since the baseball game and hotel they aren't denying their attraction for one another. I love how organic they are coming along as a couple. Too sweet.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Cash closed the hood. "I'm not arguing." - Don't mess with Bradley! lol
He reached over and kissed her cheek. "Good night." -Paige and Cash kissing in the tree, er bed - lol. Well at least since the baseball game and hotel they aren't denying their attraction for one another. I love how organic they are coming along as a couple. Too sweet.
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Comment from padumachitta
Hello. i liked this. i liked the ghost and the response to it.
Cash is a good guy and well, i just enjoy the read.
Kepp positn and writing.
may you be well
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Hello. i liked this. i liked the ghost and the response to it.
Cash is a good guy and well, i just enjoy the read.
Kepp positn and writing.
may you be well
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Comment from Tonulak
Dear Barbra,
I'm enjoying how you subtly introduce the supernatural elements in this post. the stalled vehicle that comes to life, then the picture and strange vibes in the house. Great job--Ted
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Dear Barbra,
I'm enjoying how you subtly introduce the supernatural elements in this post. the stalled vehicle that comes to life, then the picture and strange vibes in the house. Great job--Ted
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Comment from AprilShower
Whose car is Cash driving? This reads like it is someone else's car. It might have been mentioned, but it's been a while, and I've forgotten.
Barbara, I am also wondering about the statement below:
"I ain't movin' from this seat. It's dark out there and there ain't a moon or any stars. There's bears, mountain lions, and who know what else in those woods."
Most wild animals would not attack a car that was moving or men unless provoked. I might be wrong, but that sentence just didn't seem like something a man would say. This is just my opinion.
Otherwise this posting is well written.
April
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Whose car is Cash driving? This reads like it is someone else's car. It might have been mentioned, but it's been a while, and I've forgotten.
Barbara, I am also wondering about the statement below:
"I ain't movin' from this seat. It's dark out there and there ain't a moon or any stars. There's bears, mountain lions, and who know what else in those woods."
Most wild animals would not attack a car that was moving or men unless provoked. I might be wrong, but that sentence just didn't seem like something a man would say. This is just my opinion.
Otherwise this posting is well written.
April
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by. Just before that sentence Cash tells Billy Joe to get out and search the back seat for a flashlight. The car is Colten's Cash's brother who died in a car accident. All the ground work has been laid.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
It?s strange how Cash didn?t seem bothered about being kicked. Wouldn?t it have been a more frightening experience?
I?m left wondering if they will ever find the treasure.
Paige touch(ed) Cash's arm.
*We've been gone long enough(;) the girls are getting worried." ? semi-colon OR
We?ve been gone long enough. The girls WILL BE getting worried.
Margaret
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It?s strange how Cash didn?t seem bothered about being kicked. Wouldn?t it have been a more frightening experience?
I?m left wondering if they will ever find the treasure.
Paige touch(ed) Cash's arm.
*We've been gone long enough(;) the girls are getting worried." ? semi-colon OR
We?ve been gone long enough. The girls WILL BE getting worried.
Margaret
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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I am tired of those stupide question marks. EE keeps putting them in and I keep taking them out. GRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
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Once you've picked up/copied, try using the EDIT button at the top of the page to PASTE - I do so and don't get the question marks - I'd be interested to know if it works for you. M
Comment from pbroussard209
This was a great chapter, I loved the ghost kicking Cash, it add both humor and a touch of fear. Paige's reaction to what happened to her is very realistic, and I'm now wondering what was going on with the car and flashlight. Looking forward to your next post.
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This was a great chapter, I loved the ghost kicking Cash, it add both humor and a touch of fear. Paige's reaction to what happened to her is very realistic, and I'm now wondering what was going on with the car and flashlight. Looking forward to your next post.
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Comment from Sasha
I doubt Bradley's going to show himself anytime soon, if at all. It sure would be nice if they could find the treasure...but maybe he doesn't want it found?
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I doubt Bradley's going to show himself anytime soon, if at all. It sure would be nice if they could find the treasure...but maybe he doesn't want it found?
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Comment from jadapenn
Hi Barbie, I was waiting for Bradley to catch a wake-up. This treasure needs to be found pronto.
little gremlin:
Paige touch[ed] Cash's arm
luv jada
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Hi Barbie, I was waiting for Bradley to catch a wake-up. This treasure needs to be found pronto.
little gremlin:
Paige touch[ed] Cash's arm
luv jada
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
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Comment from Auroraboreal800
Very well written, good dialogues, this is another wonderful chapter. I enjoyed the suspense of knowing there might be a treasure.
GREAT job Barbara!
:)
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Very well written, good dialogues, this is another wonderful chapter. I enjoyed the suspense of knowing there might be a treasure.
GREAT job Barbara!
:)
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Comment from Katzintx
I am starting your story in the middle, that said, I find it easy to go with it and pick up the flow of the scene. It's dialogue did confuse me at times but as I read the piece I began to adjust. I think if I had been reading from the beginning I would not of notice it.
thanks for sharing Katz
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I am starting your story in the middle, that said, I find it easy to go with it and pick up the flow of the scene. It's dialogue did confuse me at times but as I read the piece I began to adjust. I think if I had been reading from the beginning I would not of notice it.
thanks for sharing Katz
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