Savannah Love
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Comment from elgone
So now we're getting the history of he treasure and some of the basis for why the Walkers think it is theirs. Bradley helped his grandson cheat at card to win the loot.
dink ya came tame - can
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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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So now we're getting the history of he treasure and some of the basis for why the Walkers think it is theirs. Bradley helped his grandson cheat at card to win the loot.
dink ya came tame - can
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Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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I fixed the typo, thank you for catching. I appreciate the kind review.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hi Barb dropping by to see what your are doing with your story
Smiled for the southern way of talking.
I liked it. and what a great part about the gator.
Gert
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Hi Barb dropping by to see what your are doing with your story
Smiled for the southern way of talking.
I liked it. and what a great part about the gator.
Gert
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by. I thought everybody would enjoy the gator. I am hoping to use him later on.
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You are welcome
Gert
Comment from A Matter Of Words
I believe this is my first chapter of Savannah Love. You are correct in saying that it is not a stand alone piece, but it was written well enough - with enough- threads - to give the reader that these men were trying to figure out clues to finding a treasure. You did an excellent job, Barbara, with the dialect and dialogue. I was at the table eating pie and drinking coffee.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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I believe this is my first chapter of Savannah Love. You are correct in saying that it is not a stand alone piece, but it was written well enough - with enough- threads - to give the reader that these men were trying to figure out clues to finding a treasure. You did an excellent job, Barbara, with the dialect and dialogue. I was at the table eating pie and drinking coffee.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're very welcome.
Comment from adewpearl
came tame - would the dialect version of can sound like came?
I love the story of how Bradley helped his grandson cheat at poker LOL
As the waitress, poured fresh cups - drop that comma
Interesting history of the origins of the treasure
Brooke
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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came tame - would the dialect version of can sound like came?
I love the story of how Bradley helped his grandson cheat at poker LOL
As the waitress, poured fresh cups - drop that comma
Interesting history of the origins of the treasure
Brooke
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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These commas are going to be the death of me. LOL Thank you for the kind review and dropping by. I always enjoy hearing from you.
Comment from Ben Colder
Salute six times at dat pie. Dat coffee is cold but Ya know how it is when tackling too much. Bring on the gator tail. Another goodie my writing friend. Shalom.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Salute six times at dat pie. Dat coffee is cold but Ya know how it is when tackling too much. Bring on the gator tail. Another goodie my writing friend. Shalom.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Thank you for the kind review. It's always a pleasure hearing from you.
Comment from angelface2
Beautiful, Barbara. I a few errors. Just typos...
1. ya came tame.. (can)
2. Paul and me's got. add apostrophe.
3. "Ya know, Sherman spent... add comma.
good read. Miss Sally
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Beautiful, Barbara. I a few errors. Just typos...
1. ya came tame.. (can)
2. Paul and me's got. add apostrophe.
3. "Ya know, Sherman spent... add comma.
good read. Miss Sally
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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I have made the corrections. Thank you for catching them. I appreciate it.
Comment from Narvik
Nice use of dialogue to make it believable and interesting, but not over the top vernacular and punctuation.
From the writing, I could really envision the alligator, even without the photo on top.
I like how you contrast the different social classes in this book. The contrast makes for interesting reading. Nice foreshadowing of the next chapter at the end too.
Write On,
~ Jack
I don't see anything I would change in this chapter.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Nice use of dialogue to make it believable and interesting, but not over the top vernacular and punctuation.
From the writing, I could really envision the alligator, even without the photo on top.
I like how you contrast the different social classes in this book. The contrast makes for interesting reading. Nice foreshadowing of the next chapter at the end too.
Write On,
~ Jack
I don't see anything I would change in this chapter.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and encouragement.
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Barbara:)
Now the pieces are starting to come together. The rumor about tunnels under Paige's mansion must be real. Amos and Clyde also heard about the possibility of a treasure. Even the card games seem to add to the trouble between the Bookman's and the Walkers. Maybe Bradley Bookman's ghost did help his grandson win the treasure from the Walkers or was he just a better card player.
Will Cash ans Billy Joe now go back hooking for the old underground railroad tunnels?
Love and Irish Hugs to add to the treasure
Roger
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Hi Barbara:)
Now the pieces are starting to come together. The rumor about tunnels under Paige's mansion must be real. Amos and Clyde also heard about the possibility of a treasure. Even the card games seem to add to the trouble between the Bookman's and the Walkers. Maybe Bradley Bookman's ghost did help his grandson win the treasure from the Walkers or was he just a better card player.
Will Cash ans Billy Joe now go back hooking for the old underground railroad tunnels?
Love and Irish Hugs to add to the treasure
Roger
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Thank you for the kind review. It's always a pleasure hearing from you.
Comment from NaughtieScribe
Bradley helping his blood cheat at cards. Now is that a gentlemanly thing to do? lol.
This is a colorful (no pun intended) and engaging scene. It reads as if I can see it (like a clip playing in my head - Billy Joe is definitely Larry the Cable Guy). It is so credible. I mean seriously, I can see a bunch of guys, and a few gals, rushing out the diner to see the gator. And of course someone would try to measure it.
This was a simple "jawing around the kitchen table" type scene that works on every level (character engagement, setting visualization, and absolutely moves the storyline).
You clearly know how to write, and keep your readers needing more. Good going.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Bradley helping his blood cheat at cards. Now is that a gentlemanly thing to do? lol.
This is a colorful (no pun intended) and engaging scene. It reads as if I can see it (like a clip playing in my head - Billy Joe is definitely Larry the Cable Guy). It is so credible. I mean seriously, I can see a bunch of guys, and a few gals, rushing out the diner to see the gator. And of course someone would try to measure it.
This was a simple "jawing around the kitchen table" type scene that works on every level (character engagement, setting visualization, and absolutely moves the storyline).
You clearly know how to write, and keep your readers needing more. Good going.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and the encouragement. I appreciate both.
Comment from Sankey
Awwww got me going again. Glad to see you back. Hope we can get back to this soon. Getting impatient. Saw something up near the top my browser just lost it. "So ya dink ya came tame a Yankee ...I thin k I just looked at this again means "so you think you can tame a Yankee woman" does that sound right translated hehe. Bit hard "interruptin'" hehe Good work again. Hurry back.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Awwww got me going again. Glad to see you back. Hope we can get back to this soon. Getting impatient. Saw something up near the top my browser just lost it. "So ya dink ya came tame a Yankee ...I thin k I just looked at this again means "so you think you can tame a Yankee woman" does that sound right translated hehe. Bit hard "interruptin'" hehe Good work again. Hurry back.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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I have fixed my type. Typing and commas are not my thing. LOL Thank you for the kind review and stopping by.
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Yeah well wasn't sure with the Southern and Redneck and Coonazz hehe
