Savannah Love
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Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Barbara:)
This is a great post as Cash and Billy Joe seem to have found a great source of history and rumors. Best of all, one of the old-timers, Amos, is Nala's uncle. Both Amos and Clyde seem to know a lot about the old Bookman planyation where their ancestors worked all the way back to the days of slavery. Now they promise to tell about the old treasure and I'm ready to learn
I noted only one small error: "We're those guys." [Bill ==> Billy] Joe grinned and looked at Cash. (A typo?}
Love and Irish Hugs for a story that keeps getting better.
Roger
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Hi Barbara:)
This is a great post as Cash and Billy Joe seem to have found a great source of history and rumors. Best of all, one of the old-timers, Amos, is Nala's uncle. Both Amos and Clyde seem to know a lot about the old Bookman planyation where their ancestors worked all the way back to the days of slavery. Now they promise to tell about the old treasure and I'm ready to learn
I noted only one small error: "We're those guys." [Bill ==> Billy] Joe grinned and looked at Cash. (A typo?}
Love and Irish Hugs for a story that keeps getting better.
Roger
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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I fixed the Billy Joe. Thank you for the kind review and the encouragement.
Comment from Dawn Munro
You've mad me hanker for peach pie, you! (Pie is my very favorite dessert!) You have also reminded me of a very dear friend who has passed on; she baked a mean peach pie!
What a great chapter, and even better is the lead in to the next one (for me anyway, since I LOVE good ghost stories!)
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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You've mad me hanker for peach pie, you! (Pie is my very favorite dessert!) You have also reminded me of a very dear friend who has passed on; she baked a mean peach pie!
What a great chapter, and even better is the lead in to the next one (for me anyway, since I LOVE good ghost stories!)
Comment Written 19-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and the encouraging words.
Comment from judiverse
I'm going with 6 stars because Amos is such a great character. That peach pie is almost a character in itself. Amos has a story about Paige's house being used as an underground railroad and that Bookman supposedly helped slaves escape. Funny that Amos should ask if Bookman has been seen. He would know about a treasure chest. Great reaction to that and love when Amos says Cash and Billy Joe look as if they've seen a ghost. Exciting chapter. judi
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I'm going with 6 stars because Amos is such a great character. That peach pie is almost a character in itself. Amos has a story about Paige's house being used as an underground railroad and that Bookman supposedly helped slaves escape. Funny that Amos should ask if Bookman has been seen. He would know about a treasure chest. Great reaction to that and love when Amos says Cash and Billy Joe look as if they've seen a ghost. Exciting chapter. judi
Comment Written 19-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and encouragement. I was going to finish with Amos when Cash and Billy Joe leave, but I think he may have to make another appearance.
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You're welcome. He was certainly entertaining. judi
Comment from angelface2
I like dialogue. I think it makes the story move along. Just be consistent when you use it in their speech. Amos says in one sentence.. pretty Yankee and in the next one.. she's as purdy as.. good job. Miss Sally
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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I like dialogue. I think it makes the story move along. Just be consistent when you use it in their speech. Amos says in one sentence.. pretty Yankee and in the next one.. she's as purdy as.. good job. Miss Sally
Comment Written 19-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Thank you for catching that. I missed it. I appreciate the kind review and the help.
Comment from Ricky1024
Very delightful and scrumptious!
I love peach pie.
'You had me from "Peach Pie!"
Adjective content in order,
Flow and Grammar impeccable.
Objective Content from 1-100 based on imagery, characterization a solid 98!
Complete Synopsis- Continue writing but I'm up
to 22 books this year and 108 last year, dear..
Thanks,
24.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Very delightful and scrumptious!
I love peach pie.
'You had me from "Peach Pie!"
Adjective content in order,
Flow and Grammar impeccable.
Objective Content from 1-100 based on imagery, characterization a solid 98!
Complete Synopsis- Continue writing but I'm up
to 22 books this year and 108 last year, dear..
Thanks,
24.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and encouragement.
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
Consider: Ass a bit of detail here and there. For ex:
"The old man SLOWLY wiped his lips with a dark blue handkerchief.
"Clyde adjusted his tattered straw hat and BEGAN walking toward a lit up diner.
Don't worry about the dialogue. Looks good to me.
Regards:
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Consider: Ass a bit of detail here and there. For ex:
"The old man SLOWLY wiped his lips with a dark blue handkerchief.
"Clyde adjusted his tattered straw hat and BEGAN walking toward a lit up diner.
Don't worry about the dialogue. Looks good to me.
Regards:
Comment Written 19-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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I was wondering about that. I get gigged for not having enough detail, but I would have stronger sentences without the slowly and began. Thank you.
Comment from Auroraboreal800
I think the dialogue in this chapter is great. Cash is still hunting for information about the treasure. I like how they share apple pie and coffee after discovering that Nala is his niece.
VERY GOOD job Barbara!
:)
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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I think the dialogue in this chapter is great. Cash is still hunting for information about the treasure. I like how they share apple pie and coffee after discovering that Nala is his niece.
VERY GOOD job Barbara!
:)
Comment Written 19-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from lindalcreel
I love that Nala is related to the old gentlemen, that way they will have some trust. I'm sure there is a lot more to this story, and even though Cash and his friend don't believe in ghosts, the old man believes that Mr. Bookman is still hanging around. Can't wait to hear what he's going to tell them. I'm sure it might help them to keep Paige safe. Thanks so much for sharing, another great chapter.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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I love that Nala is related to the old gentlemen, that way they will have some trust. I'm sure there is a lot more to this story, and even though Cash and his friend don't believe in ghosts, the old man believes that Mr. Bookman is still hanging around. Can't wait to hear what he's going to tell them. I'm sure it might help them to keep Paige safe. Thanks so much for sharing, another great chapter.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
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My pleasure:)
Comment from mumsyone
You just had to show a picture of that peach pie, didn't you? Now I'm going to have to get some peaches from my freezer and bake one! Ha!
I heard tell she's a (as?) purdy as a speckled pup."
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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You just had to show a picture of that peach pie, didn't you? Now I'm going to have to get some peaches from my freezer and bake one! Ha!
I heard tell she's a (as?) purdy as a speckled pup."
Comment Written 19-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Thank you for catching that. I wonder sometimes where my eyes are at when I am editing. I appreciate the help.
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Thank you for catching that. I wonder sometimes where my eyes are at when I am editing. I appreciate the help.
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Well done again and fun to get to see this side of the story. The history that goes with the house and the ghost that lives there. Look forward to the rest. Rox
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Well done again and fun to get to see this side of the story. The history that goes with the house and the ghost that lives there. Look forward to the rest. Rox
Comment Written 19-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
