Beautiful
1500 words - short for me!!34 total reviews
Comment from TonyD
This is no mystery story that holds the reader's interest and keeps him/her at the edge of the seat. All the same this story has the same effect of holding the reader's interest to the end. I was rooting for Ann's transformation, no matter how slight because of the love and dedication of her husband.
Extremely well written.
TonyD
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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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This is no mystery story that holds the reader's interest and keeps him/her at the edge of the seat. All the same this story has the same effect of holding the reader's interest to the end. I was rooting for Ann's transformation, no matter how slight because of the love and dedication of her husband.
Extremely well written.
TonyD
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Comment Written 12-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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thank you so much Tony! :)Sharyn
Comment from Kingsrookviii
This is outstanding in every respect. I do not usually look at much other than poetry , but this really had me hooked. I love the way you brought characters to life and tell such a story of love. This is haunting in a lot of ways because as I get older I know so many people who have been through similar circumstances and it is not fun. However, yours is a story of humanity too and the truest form of love and devotion. It is moving and it is age that brings this so close to home because when I was young, I had no perspective on mortality. It is sad, but natural too and this shows the essence of grace and dignity on the better side of dealing with life.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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This is outstanding in every respect. I do not usually look at much other than poetry , but this really had me hooked. I love the way you brought characters to life and tell such a story of love. This is haunting in a lot of ways because as I get older I know so many people who have been through similar circumstances and it is not fun. However, yours is a story of humanity too and the truest form of love and devotion. It is moving and it is age that brings this so close to home because when I was young, I had no perspective on mortality. It is sad, but natural too and this shows the essence of grace and dignity on the better side of dealing with life.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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What a wonderful review! Yes, age does bring us that sense of mortality, doesn't it? Dammit! I'm so delighted with your reaction to my story my dear - thank you so much for that wonderful six!
Blessings,
Sharyn
Comment from mfowler
You are a great story teller V1234. You built this up so well with your father's backstory of genius, and your concerns for him trying to care for and improve a severely impaired mother. Your technical explanations enhance, not confuse,the central premise of the story. I found that your concern for your Dad's super optimism, led me to suppose that the mother/wife would in fact make the sound like no other; but that didn't matter, as the 'how' kept nagging me until the very end. It's a story imbued with love, and the hand of a wonderful writer.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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You are a great story teller V1234. You built this up so well with your father's backstory of genius, and your concerns for him trying to care for and improve a severely impaired mother. Your technical explanations enhance, not confuse,the central premise of the story. I found that your concern for your Dad's super optimism, led me to suppose that the mother/wife would in fact make the sound like no other; but that didn't matter, as the 'how' kept nagging me until the very end. It's a story imbued with love, and the hand of a wonderful writer.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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Mark, I'm delighted with your wonderful review and for your thoughtful response. I was a little concerned that I was giving away too much at the beginning, so your response was really welcome. And BLESS YOU FOR THAT WONDERFUL SIX!
:)Sharyn
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You have this knack of entering these contests when I have something good in them. I see your work in them, and know mine has no cahnce. I know, that's defeatist. I just love the way you tell a story.
Comment from Gungalo
Such a wonderful write girl. Made me almost cry. Such devotion he has made to her. A rose garden that is all he wanted to do. I think he definitely made progress. SIgh.
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Such a wonderful write girl. Made me almost cry. Such devotion he has made to her. A rose garden that is all he wanted to do. I think he definitely made progress. SIgh.
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Comment Written 12-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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only "almost" ... what's a girl gotta do Pam????
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LOL okay, I cried.
