Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Excellent

Sometimes simplicity is the key and as you've shown here
quite effective and clever poetry can still be created.
The pool itself is simply designed to create the maximum effect.
Clever combination of poetry and chosen image.

 Comment Written 25-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013

Thank you very much Shirley. I appreciate your comments.

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

The form is rather like an abbreviated sonnet. I enjoyed the color contrasts and serenity, along with the rhyme scheme. The combination of your words and photograph made it like being there. Enjoy the rest of Christmas Day- Joan

 Comment Written 25-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013

Thank you Joan. I will.

Comment from rod007

Excellent

I must admit I can see the temptation very clearly and I am pretty certain many a child have had that temptation and perhaps some have not been able to resist in that mad dash to feel the cool water on their feet. Well done.

 Comment Written 24-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 24-Dec-2013

Thank you Rod. Fortunately it's only knee deep on me.

Comment from sunnilicious

Excellent

That is a pretty indoor landscape. Nice photograph. Good poem. Good poetic form. Good visual imagery. Good rhythm. Good rhymes. Creative. Nice work.

 Comment Written 24-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 24-Dec-2013

Thank you Alicia.

Comment from RGstar

Excellent

You never know what would bite you if you put your toe in that, Treschiel. Could be an alligator in there somewhere.
A lovely picture for a quiet moment.
The moment lasts forever. It is captured.
Best wishes,
RGstar

 Comment Written 23-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2013

Thank you RG. Good point.

Comment from joneau2

Excellent

Hmm, I reserve my dipping to the times I surf fish salt water, from the Atlantic Ocean through the coastal regions of the Gulf of Mexico. I have a special affection for the sea.

 Comment Written 23-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2013

Thanks joneau2, the sea is awesome, I loved watching the storm when they blew in on Long Island.

Comment from Capricorn30

Excellent

Beautiful image--well-crafted quatrains to complement the photography;
Images created by man easily attract the eye in the same fashion as nature.
Excellent!

 Comment Written 23-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2013

Thank you Margaret. I'll take beauty wherever I find it.

Comment from Preston McWhorter

Excellent

Hi, Treischel,
This is an excellent poem with good aabb rhyme scheme except that for me "too" does not rhyme with "pool" in the first stanza. Other than that it has good rhyme and flow. The figurative language and imagery are excellent.
Preston

 Comment Written 23-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2013

Thanks Preston, agreed, I went with a slant rhyme there.

Comment from MoIronE13

Excellent

Not only are you a wonderful poet of prose and flow
Your photography work is brilliant!
I am I tempted.
Hell yeah.
I wanna jump in head first! LOL
There's that reflective pool that I can gaze into and see Adonis again...LOL

Thanks for a snapshot of Peace and Grace.

 Comment Written 23-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2013

Thanks MolronE13, I'm sure you might find Adonis lurking in there.

reply by MoIronE13 on 23-Dec-2013

I am done with that guy...LOL

Comment from Hatch1515

Excellent

To dip the toe would only vibrate the waters, thus taking away from the stillness and beauty of should a glorious scene. Yes, tempted, but how could one dip without knowing of the consequences of ruining the ravishing set? The rhyming was very nice and added much support to the message of the poem. Thank you for sharing.

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 Comment Written 23-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2013

Thank you Hatch. Yes, it would break the mirror effect.