Savannah Love
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Comment from Deejharrington
Thank you for sharing another chapter of your delightful book. I think dialog done well makes a great story. You have done just that. Each character comes alive and the plot develops as they speak and interact. I look forward to the next chapter. Have a terrific holiday.
deb
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2013
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Thank you for sharing another chapter of your delightful book. I think dialog done well makes a great story. You have done just that. Each character comes alive and the plot develops as they speak and interact. I look forward to the next chapter. Have a terrific holiday.
deb
Comment Written 23-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from Auroraboreal800
I love this chapter, it's so fun to read how you mixed romance with adventure and mystery. I like the ghost's sense of humor and the relationship between him and the owner of the house.
MERRY XMAS Barbara!!
:))
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2013
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I love this chapter, it's so fun to read how you mixed romance with adventure and mystery. I like the ghost's sense of humor and the relationship between him and the owner of the house.
MERRY XMAS Barbara!!
:))
Comment Written 23-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and encouragement.
Comment from nora arjuna
Hi Barb. Nice to see this story is still going on. Sorry I haven't been able to follow it. All things are going rather crazy at my end, especially work. I'm also stuck at translating my book for local publication, and not having that much time for it.
I take it romance has developed between Paige and Cash?
See some notes:
Wes nodded. "I'm on my way." They drove away and the [horn honked] one more time.
-rather awkward there with the same words close and it sounds as if the honk is honking itself. How about:
They drove away and the horn blared one more time.
In richer desc. -They drove away and the horn pierced the air one more time.
Or simply - They honked one more time and drove away.
"Rumor has it Walker lost the family fortune playing the commodities[,]" said Cash.
As the pup licked [her face], Paige moved [her face] from side to side.
Suggest:
Paige moved her head from side to side as the pup licked her face.
Hope those help.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2013
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Hi Barb. Nice to see this story is still going on. Sorry I haven't been able to follow it. All things are going rather crazy at my end, especially work. I'm also stuck at translating my book for local publication, and not having that much time for it.
I take it romance has developed between Paige and Cash?
See some notes:
Wes nodded. "I'm on my way." They drove away and the [horn honked] one more time.
-rather awkward there with the same words close and it sounds as if the honk is honking itself. How about:
They drove away and the horn blared one more time.
In richer desc. -They drove away and the horn pierced the air one more time.
Or simply - They honked one more time and drove away.
"Rumor has it Walker lost the family fortune playing the commodities[,]" said Cash.
As the pup licked [her face], Paige moved [her face] from side to side.
Suggest:
Paige moved her head from side to side as the pup licked her face.
Hope those help.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the suggestions and I have made the corrections.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
This ghost has an off beat sense of humour. In fact he sounds like a poltergeist. At least he didn't give Billy Joe a wedgie!
I can't wait not to see how the police chief reacts to Nala's offering to shake hands. Another good chapter, and the dialogue certainly carries the information. Just one thing - surely the 'paranormal' team would have checked their van and environs for any ghost before getting into it?
Patrick
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2013
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Hi Barbara,
This ghost has an off beat sense of humour. In fact he sounds like a poltergeist. At least he didn't give Billy Joe a wedgie!
I can't wait not to see how the police chief reacts to Nala's offering to shake hands. Another good chapter, and the dialogue certainly carries the information. Just one thing - surely the 'paranormal' team would have checked their van and environs for any ghost before getting into it?
Patrick
Comment Written 23-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2013
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Nope, as Billy Joe says they are dimwits. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Dawn Munro
This is another wonderful chapter, Barbara. I'm wondering what follows after Paige introduced Nala, however, since the chief seems to feel superior. I can see fireworks between he and Paige coming when he doesn't take Nala's hand...
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2013
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This is another wonderful chapter, Barbara. I'm wondering what follows after Paige introduced Nala, however, since the chief seems to feel superior. I can see fireworks between he and Paige coming when he doesn't take Nala's hand...
Comment Written 22-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate you dropping by.
Comment from Zue65
Oh I will stick with your story, Paige and her adventure or misadventure and her love story with Cash is interesting and exciting to read. I shall eagerly wait for the next chapters, I just hope the turn of events will lean more on the romance angle next time. God bless.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2013
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Oh I will stick with your story, Paige and her adventure or misadventure and her love story with Cash is interesting and exciting to read. I shall eagerly wait for the next chapters, I just hope the turn of events will lean more on the romance angle next time. God bless.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and encouragement
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, barbara, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where bradley plays some more games with the investigators and with cash and billy joe as well. that was my favorite part. the investigator says they can't find walker. he's pulling the strings.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2013
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this is very well written, barbara, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where bradley plays some more games with the investigators and with cash and billy joe as well. that was my favorite part. the investigator says they can't find walker. he's pulling the strings.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate you dropping by.
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Barbara:)
I think you will soon have some new believers in ghostly activity. What is one to believe, early teachings or your own eyes?
As various relatives of Dr. Walker are investigated we learn just how they are involved. Now there is great motivation for their illegal actions. No wonder there have been attempts to find proof of ownership for Paige's mansion.
I look forward to your next entertaining post.Love and Irish Hugs for encouragement.
Marilyn and I both wish you a Merry Christmas and a happy and prosperous new year.
Roger
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2013
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Hi Barbara:)
I think you will soon have some new believers in ghostly activity. What is one to believe, early teachings or your own eyes?
As various relatives of Dr. Walker are investigated we learn just how they are involved. Now there is great motivation for their illegal actions. No wonder there have been attempts to find proof of ownership for Paige's mansion.
I look forward to your next entertaining post.Love and Irish Hugs for encouragement.
Marilyn and I both wish you a Merry Christmas and a happy and prosperous new year.
Roger
Comment Written 22-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2013
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Thank you for being such a faithful fan. I really appreciate it. Hugs to you and your wife.
Comment from Zinnia48
Intersting chapter--I love the ghost's sense of humor and the relationship between him and the owner of the house. I'm ready for another chapter. Caroline
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2013
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Intersting chapter--I love the ghost's sense of humor and the relationship between him and the owner of the house. I'm ready for another chapter. Caroline
Comment Written 22-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and your encouraging words.
Comment from Gungalo
Paige and Nala are reunited again. It's been a while. I like where this is headed girl. Nala is introduced to Chief Dennison. A very Merry Christmas to you too.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2013
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Paige and Nala are reunited again. It's been a while. I like where this is headed girl. Nala is introduced to Chief Dennison. A very Merry Christmas to you too.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and I appreciate you dropping by.
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Smile Barb.
