Savannah Love
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Comment from elchupakabra
I thought this was an excellent addition to your story. This chapter is definitely moving things along, and I'm glad that you kept this piece succint. The characters and dialogue feel real and the narrative is flowing well. Excellent work overall here, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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I thought this was an excellent addition to your story. This chapter is definitely moving things along, and I'm glad that you kept this piece succint. The characters and dialogue feel real and the narrative is flowing well. Excellent work overall here, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from LucaFen4
You're author notes are correct, it is difficult to follow by starting with this part. I did think the diaglogue flowed well and it was well written. I love that this talks about gullah and 'boo hags'. From here, I am going to look up Gullah & boo hags. Well written.
No guarantees I will go back and read all 72 previous parts, that's a lot of catching up to do, but I will meander over to read some of your other stuff.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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You're author notes are correct, it is difficult to follow by starting with this part. I did think the diaglogue flowed well and it was well written. I love that this talks about gullah and 'boo hags'. From here, I am going to look up Gullah & boo hags. Well written.
No guarantees I will go back and read all 72 previous parts, that's a lot of catching up to do, but I will meander over to read some of your other stuff.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from Cajungirl
This is getting better and better. That picture of the Boo Hag peering through the keyhole is very creepy. Your book is right-up-my ally, being from Louisiana this stuff interest me. Excellent job.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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This is getting better and better. That picture of the Boo Hag peering through the keyhole is very creepy. Your book is right-up-my ally, being from Louisiana this stuff interest me. Excellent job.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Barbara, I took one look at that picture and almost fell off my chair. Then I read your post. Er, you do realize I'm hoping to get some sleep tonight? LOL!
Loved it. It was interesting and fascinating. Good dialogue and a nice smooth flow.
A couple of suggestions:
"We're getting the same information we already (have)."
Chief Dennison rapped his fingers on the desk.() - errant quotation mark at the end of this sentence.
Paige folded her arms across her chest. - You don't really need to say 'across her chest', because it's obvious. Just Paige folded her arms is enough for the reader to see the gesture. Your choice though!
Big hugs,
Av
I'm not gonna sleep tonight.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2013
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Barbara, I took one look at that picture and almost fell off my chair. Then I read your post. Er, you do realize I'm hoping to get some sleep tonight? LOL!
Loved it. It was interesting and fascinating. Good dialogue and a nice smooth flow.
A couple of suggestions:
"We're getting the same information we already (have)."
Chief Dennison rapped his fingers on the desk.() - errant quotation mark at the end of this sentence.
Paige folded her arms across her chest. - You don't really need to say 'across her chest', because it's obvious. Just Paige folded her arms is enough for the reader to see the gesture. Your choice though!
Big hugs,
Av
I'm not gonna sleep tonight.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2013
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Sorry for the late response. At school it's semester break and we had a lot of paperwork to catch up on. I am now on break for two weeks and I have time to breath. I appreciate your help.
Comment from Writingfundimension
I like the fact your chapter reflects a good amount of research on the paranormal. Your facts correspond with many of the current beliefs in that field. You manage to both entertain and educate in this very finely balancec chapter, barbara.
Warmest regards, Bev
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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I like the fact your chapter reflects a good amount of research on the paranormal. Your facts correspond with many of the current beliefs in that field. You manage to both entertain and educate in this very finely balancec chapter, barbara.
Warmest regards, Bev
Comment Written 08-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
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Always a pleasure, barbara. I really enjoy your story. Happy Holidays! Bev
Comment from Zinnia48
Your use of dialogue is my favorite part of your writing style. The story continues to get more compelling, and the dialogue is what carries it merrily on its way. Thanks! Caroline
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Your use of dialogue is my favorite part of your writing style. The story continues to get more compelling, and the dialogue is what carries it merrily on its way. Thanks! Caroline
Comment Written 08-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from Sasha
This was a very interesting chapter that provided a lot of information but also left a lot of unanswered questions. I like dialogue, and your read very well. Usually people complain about not enough dialogue. Nice work with this one. I look forward to reading the next chapter.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013
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This was a very interesting chapter that provided a lot of information but also left a lot of unanswered questions. I like dialogue, and your read very well. Usually people complain about not enough dialogue. Nice work with this one. I look forward to reading the next chapter.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013
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On my last post I got a 3 because I had too much dialogue. I suggested he doesn't read me any more because I use dialogue. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lindalcreel
The chief didn't really give her much information, except that they seem to be trying to get the house and it's belongings from Paige. I can't wait to hear the explanation for those men being in her house. I still don't think it's right that they don't allow her to go back to the house until it has been evaluated by the paranormal experts. We'll see where this is headed. Another great chapter. Looking forward to the next.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013
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The chief didn't really give her much information, except that they seem to be trying to get the house and it's belongings from Paige. I can't wait to hear the explanation for those men being in her house. I still don't think it's right that they don't allow her to go back to the house until it has been evaluated by the paranormal experts. We'll see where this is headed. Another great chapter. Looking forward to the next.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013
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Hopefully it will be exciting. Thank you for the kind review.
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Welcome:)
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So Welcome. It's a great story:)
Comment from mellmom1
Great chapter and story, I came across the chapter under the reviews and now I want to go back and read all the chapters. I like the dialogue, you get more out of the story.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013
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Great chapter and story, I came across the chapter under the reviews and now I want to go back and read all the chapters. I like the dialogue, you get more out of the story.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hi Barb I like the info of how ghost of how one of the ghost is left behind protecting their family if needed which give me the creep
I must say you are making your novel more interesting
Gert
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013
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Hi Barb I like the info of how ghost of how one of the ghost is left behind protecting their family if needed which give me the creep
I must say you are making your novel more interesting
Gert
Comment Written 08-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. It actually gave me the creeps too.
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You are welcome Barb
Gert
