Savannah Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 73 "CHAPTER FIFTEEN; PART FIVE"Can a fallen confederate soldier encourage love?
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Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
I don't have the greatest vibes with the police chief.
It is amazing, having come from a small town, how cliquish communities can be. Not to mention the same when it comes to gossips. Hmmm, must be where I get all my inspiration in my books. LOL.
Interesting chapter.
*Happy Holidays*
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*;*)
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014
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I don't have the greatest vibes with the police chief.
It is amazing, having come from a small town, how cliquish communities can be. Not to mention the same when it comes to gossips. Hmmm, must be where I get all my inspiration in my books. LOL.
Interesting chapter.
*Happy Holidays*
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*;*)
Comment Written 15-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and the continuous support.
Comment from adewpearl
Fascinating information about the Gullah beliefs and why some cops won't enter the house. Excellent dialogue that conveys people's attitudes well. Good character development as Paige keeps on pushing for answers and continues to demand respect for Nala. Brooke
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2013
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Fascinating information about the Gullah beliefs and why some cops won't enter the house. Excellent dialogue that conveys people's attitudes well. Good character development as Paige keeps on pushing for answers and continues to demand respect for Nala. Brooke
Comment Written 15-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I am sorry you had to read it without it being promoted.
Comment from Sankey
Good work again. have to go to bed. Be back to this tomorrow. I gather you are away from internet access as you said so look forward to some response later.
Still enjoying the book. No Spags. By the way I have a feeling this may have been where I came in on the original prompt.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Good work again. have to go to bed. Be back to this tomorrow. I gather you are away from internet access as you said so look forward to some response later.
Still enjoying the book. No Spags. By the way I have a feeling this may have been where I came in on the original prompt.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from Zue65
Again this is another suspense-filled chapter and I can see how Paige is coping up to the challenge. I like the fact that she looked straight into the eyes of the police chief. I believe the police chief will be an important character in the story, for there is something sinister with his attitude and his story on the voodoo thing, evil ghosts and witches. I will wait for the next chapter. God bless.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Again this is another suspense-filled chapter and I can see how Paige is coping up to the challenge. I like the fact that she looked straight into the eyes of the police chief. I believe the police chief will be an important character in the story, for there is something sinister with his attitude and his story on the voodoo thing, evil ghosts and witches. I will wait for the next chapter. God bless.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A good chapter. It does remind me of my house and how some realtors refused to show it because it is haunted.I bet you are ready for Christmas vacation. It's below zero here--has been for days. Have a great week~Debbie
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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A good chapter. It does remind me of my house and how some realtors refused to show it because it is haunted.I bet you are ready for Christmas vacation. It's below zero here--has been for days. Have a great week~Debbie
Comment Written 12-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from SDTracyHarper
Without regards to the previous chapters, I found your story well-focused. I'm hard pressed as to where or what overall clear suggestions to make. I did find the dialogue between characters a bit rigid with little life, but that maybe due to your writing style. I'm sure if I had read the pervious chapters, this wouldn't be the case. My only suggestion is for you to read your work out loud, or better still, have someone read it to you. I use this method to smooth out the flow of my own overall compositions and point out passages I believe are present but are not. Nice work.
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reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Without regards to the previous chapters, I found your story well-focused. I'm hard pressed as to where or what overall clear suggestions to make. I did find the dialogue between characters a bit rigid with little life, but that maybe due to your writing style. I'm sure if I had read the pervious chapters, this wouldn't be the case. My only suggestion is for you to read your work out loud, or better still, have someone read it to you. I use this method to smooth out the flow of my own overall compositions and point out passages I believe are present but are not. Nice work.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from ELumpkins
Very interesting to be thia far into the project,CHAPTER FIFTEEN. That is getting well into the story I should think. It seems the police chief is onto something if he can get certain information from Redman. The chief went to the interrogation room to question Redman. Story coming along very nicely.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Very interesting to be thia far into the project,CHAPTER FIFTEEN. That is getting well into the story I should think. It seems the police chief is onto something if he can get certain information from Redman. The chief went to the interrogation room to question Redman. Story coming along very nicely.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Barb. The misadventures of Cash and Paige forges on and is well written. Your images and dialogue are very well done as usual.
Suggestions: "pushed his half eaten sandwich away." (I think this would be a better image if you said "Balogna or tuna sandwich...something the reader can see and relate to)
"Paige rolled her shoulders." (I cannot picture this as is...sorry)
""Can we listen in?" Billy Joe stood." (I would switch these around, were it me)
"Billy Joe stood. "Can we listen in?"
Merry Christmas, barb...Bob
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Hi, Barb. The misadventures of Cash and Paige forges on and is well written. Your images and dialogue are very well done as usual.
Suggestions: "pushed his half eaten sandwich away." (I think this would be a better image if you said "Balogna or tuna sandwich...something the reader can see and relate to)
"Paige rolled her shoulders." (I cannot picture this as is...sorry)
""Can we listen in?" Billy Joe stood." (I would switch these around, were it me)
"Billy Joe stood. "Can we listen in?"
Merry Christmas, barb...Bob
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by. I wasn't sure about the rolling shoulders either.
Comment from Righteous Riter
The photo has my mind wandering all over the place but it draws my attention. The setting, the tone and the atmosphere is set from the start. Good character balance. Good smooth dialogue. The pace is intense and consistent leading to a conclusion filled with anticipation.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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The photo has my mind wandering all over the place but it draws my attention. The setting, the tone and the atmosphere is set from the start. Good character balance. Good smooth dialogue. The pace is intense and consistent leading to a conclusion filled with anticipation.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from muezza56
i haven't read many stories of late, but I'm glad I did, having read this and previous postings of this book over the months. your standard of writing is really good, and I recognised the characters, that have remained the same as I remember, great writing and well worthy of the 6 stars
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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i haven't read many stories of late, but I'm glad I did, having read this and previous postings of this book over the months. your standard of writing is really good, and I recognised the characters, that have remained the same as I remember, great writing and well worthy of the 6 stars
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
