Savannah Love
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Comment from adewpearl
check your house for paranormal activity. - add period
reasonable explanation for the strange happens - happenings
Paige's eyes widen as she watched - widened
I wonder where they need to get back too - back to
I love that Paige is standing up for Bradley the Ghost and insisting nobody hurt him. Great description of the video and the break in :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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check your house for paranormal activity. - add period
reasonable explanation for the strange happens - happenings
Paige's eyes widen as she watched - widened
I wonder where they need to get back too - back to
I love that Paige is standing up for Bradley the Ghost and insisting nobody hurt him. Great description of the video and the break in :-) Brooke
Comment Written 01-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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I have made those corrections. I had a clean copy then, accidently posted my previous post and then posted my working copy, Not a good day. Thank you for your support.
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It's a really fun story :-)
Comment from Gert sherwood
Oh Yes Barb
I read there are ghost in the house.
I will stick with you soon as you rid of the ghost.
In the house and find out what in the world they desire
Sounds like you need Ghost Busters
Will see you later.
Gert
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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Oh Yes Barb
I read there are ghost in the house.
I will stick with you soon as you rid of the ghost.
In the house and find out what in the world they desire
Sounds like you need Ghost Busters
Will see you later.
Gert
Comment Written 01-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I always appreciate hearing from you.
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Huge smiles
Gert
Comment from mumsyone
Interesting chapter, Barbara.
"We're the team that's going to check your house for paranormal activity(.)"
Most of the time there's a reasonable explanation for the strange happens (happenings).
"This way(,) please." Wes led them to a room with a large rectangle (rectangular) table and chairs placed around it.
Paige's eyes widen (widened) as she watched Tyler and Daniel entered (enter) the house (through?) the front door.
As a desk draw (drawer) flew open(,) hitting Tyler in the lower stomach,
"I'm behind you?(!)"
Also(,) who taped the racial note to her door?"
He's only here for the ghosts, but I'll take you to somebody who might have the answers.(close space) "
The foursome followed the young officer through the narrows (narrow) halls to the chief-of-police's office.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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Interesting chapter, Barbara.
"We're the team that's going to check your house for paranormal activity(.)"
Most of the time there's a reasonable explanation for the strange happens (happenings).
"This way(,) please." Wes led them to a room with a large rectangle (rectangular) table and chairs placed around it.
Paige's eyes widen (widened) as she watched Tyler and Daniel entered (enter) the house (through?) the front door.
As a desk draw (drawer) flew open(,) hitting Tyler in the lower stomach,
"I'm behind you?(!)"
Also(,) who taped the racial note to her door?"
He's only here for the ghosts, but I'll take you to somebody who might have the answers.(close space) "
The foursome followed the young officer through the narrows (narrow) halls to the chief-of-police's office.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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I had a horrible time posting. I had those errors corrected and then promoted the wrong post. DARN!!!!! Thank you for catching them.
Comment from c_lucas
Paige is controlling her temper quite well. I would like to see how Cash can explain his "No-Ghost Theoy." This is very well written. I have followed from the first and I like the way you have built your characters and plot.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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Paige is controlling her temper quite well. I would like to see how Cash can explain his "No-Ghost Theoy." This is very well written. I have followed from the first and I like the way you have built your characters and plot.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Alena Smith
I think that this quotation mark was being silly and jumped to the next line instead of standing behind it's quote:
He's only here for the ghosts, but I'll take you to somebody who might have the answers.
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"While you're taking care of that business
this is a wonderfully written poem that kept me interested from the first sentence all the way to the end. great descriptions and a way to capture your reader.
I also like that you gave a quick preview on the last part of the previous chapter.
well don
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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I think that this quotation mark was being silly and jumped to the next line instead of standing behind it's quote:
He's only here for the ghosts, but I'll take you to somebody who might have the answers.
"
"While you're taking care of that business
this is a wonderfully written poem that kept me interested from the first sentence all the way to the end. great descriptions and a way to capture your reader.
I also like that you gave a quick preview on the last part of the previous chapter.
well don
Comment Written 01-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. Thank you, I fixed the wayward ".
Comment from Gungalo
Oh boy, the video showed the ghosts and Paige can't believe her eyes. LOL they are asking the sheriff just what is going on. I doubt he knows.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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Oh boy, the video showed the ghosts and Paige can't believe her eyes. LOL they are asking the sheriff just what is going on. I doubt he knows.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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I doubt he knows too, but Paige is not happy. Thank you for the kind review.
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LOL I can't blame her for that.
Comment from jjstar
I'm sorry I've been gone for a few months and missed some chapters. Paige is too funny. I like Bradley and don't want him gone...lol. Obviously Bradley doesn't want the ghost hunters there either. Those two seem like a couple of wussies running out the door just because Bradley's acting up. Nice chapter, Barb!
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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I'm sorry I've been gone for a few months and missed some chapters. Paige is too funny. I like Bradley and don't want him gone...lol. Obviously Bradley doesn't want the ghost hunters there either. Those two seem like a couple of wussies running out the door just because Bradley's acting up. Nice chapter, Barb!
Comment Written 01-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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I agree. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
CONSIDER:
"Paige accepted HIS hand. "Yes, and you are?"
"As she tilted her head,Paige asked, "What will you do when you find this activity?"
"Don't forget WHO harassed your mom and Nala in their homes."
"I need answers. I was told you have SOME."
WHAT tense here? "Paige's eyes widen as she watched Tyler and Daniel entered the house the front door.
Loved the piece.
Regards:
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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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CONSIDER:
"Paige accepted HIS hand. "Yes, and you are?"
"As she tilted her head,Paige asked, "What will you do when you find this activity?"
"Don't forget WHO harassed your mom and Nala in their homes."
"I need answers. I was told you have SOME."
WHAT tense here? "Paige's eyes widen as she watched Tyler and Daniel entered the house the front door.
Loved the piece.
Regards:
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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I just really messed up this post. I even reposted my last post by accident. Oh dear!!! Thank you for your support and help.
