Savannah Love
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Comment from Mishelly
I wonder if the video will make a believer out of Cash, or if he will still insist it was all done by special effects. I find I also have a soft spot for Bradley Bookman, and hope Paige won't let him be exorcised from her house :-)
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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I wonder if the video will make a believer out of Cash, or if he will still insist it was all done by special effects. I find I also have a soft spot for Bradley Bookman, and hope Paige won't let him be exorcised from her house :-)
Comment Written 04-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
Comment from Galarneaux
This was a nice writing! It grasped my attention from the beginning, I'm looking forward to what happens in the end. Good job.
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This was a nice writing! It grasped my attention from the beginning, I'm looking forward to what happens in the end. Good job.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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I am not sure what to correct to receive five stars. Please let me know. thank you
Comment from JD Storms
Enjoyed this chapter. Now I must read the rest. I enjoy paranormal can't Waite to check out the rest. I found myself right there with them watching the video. Great job.
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Enjoyed this chapter. Now I must read the rest. I enjoy paranormal can't Waite to check out the rest. I found myself right there with them watching the video. Great job.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
An excellent post, Barbara. I love the way Bradley is protecting the house and its secrets. One SPAG:
"I wonder where they need to get back too." - to
Well done. :) Nancy
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An excellent post, Barbara. I love the way Bradley is protecting the house and its secrets. One SPAG:
"I wonder where they need to get back too." - to
Well done. :) Nancy
Comment Written 04-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and pointing our my error. I appreciate it.
Comment from JMUwrites
Just like the others, this is an excellent chapter write Barbara...wonderfully written conversational exchanges between characters, and I'm enjoying how the suspense is building within the story.
Thanks for sharing this, and as always I'll now await the next installment to be posted for my reading enjoyment! ;)
Take care and happy writing going forward!
Jeffrey
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Just like the others, this is an excellent chapter write Barbara...wonderfully written conversational exchanges between characters, and I'm enjoying how the suspense is building within the story.
Thanks for sharing this, and as always I'll now await the next installment to be posted for my reading enjoyment! ;)
Take care and happy writing going forward!
Jeffrey
Comment Written 04-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by. I appreciate both.
Comment from barkingdog
I apologize for being so late reviewing. I have had trouble for two nights in a row accessing the site.Something going on with the server it says.
I thought this was great. Paige doesn't want to hurt the ghost. I don't blame her. He did punish Tyler and Daniel for breaking in. Now, to find out who gave them the key.
I only got to read your post.
Couldn't post mine. I hope this review goes through.
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I apologize for being so late reviewing. I have had trouble for two nights in a row accessing the site.Something going on with the server it says.
I thought this was great. Paige doesn't want to hurt the ghost. I don't blame her. He did punish Tyler and Daniel for breaking in. Now, to find out who gave them the key.
I only got to read your post.
Couldn't post mine. I hope this review goes through.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by. I appreciate both.
Comment from Tonulak
Dear Barbra,
This had a nice blend of slapstick and the supernatural. I liked how you captured the "ghost" on film and set the stage for more supernatural events. One small thing; "a rectangle table", should be rectangular table" Great write--
Ted
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Dear Barbra,
This had a nice blend of slapstick and the supernatural. I liked how you captured the "ghost" on film and set the stage for more supernatural events. One small thing; "a rectangle table", should be rectangular table" Great write--
Ted
Comment Written 03-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by. I appreciate both.
Comment from Siouxsun
I have read previous posts and have enjoyed them much. But this portion still leaves me a bit confused. Some sentences seem to mix past and present in the same sentence.
1."If the video contains an actual paranormal event, it's more than naughty. It was dangerous to humans." - This reads as if he already watched it and knows the conclusion. - should be [it is] dangerous.[was is past tense.
2."My friends, Mary Pat Johnson and her husband, Billy Joe." - didn't Paige already meet Billy Joe? -previously mentioned,[Billy Joe pulled Cash aside,]
3."This video's very graphic. We need to see the inside of the house before we can make any decisions about paranormal activity." - I find this sentence very confusing.He is saying he needs to see the inside of the house first but then he says it is very graphic?? so he saw it already.
I think you may be getting ahead of yourself with your thought and writing.
I'm sorry,I really enjoy your writing but I think this needs a little revision. Love your work.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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I have read previous posts and have enjoyed them much. But this portion still leaves me a bit confused. Some sentences seem to mix past and present in the same sentence.
1."If the video contains an actual paranormal event, it's more than naughty. It was dangerous to humans." - This reads as if he already watched it and knows the conclusion. - should be [it is] dangerous.[was is past tense.
2."My friends, Mary Pat Johnson and her husband, Billy Joe." - didn't Paige already meet Billy Joe? -previously mentioned,[Billy Joe pulled Cash aside,]
3."This video's very graphic. We need to see the inside of the house before we can make any decisions about paranormal activity." - I find this sentence very confusing.He is saying he needs to see the inside of the house first but then he says it is very graphic?? so he saw it already.
I think you may be getting ahead of yourself with your thought and writing.
I'm sorry,I really enjoy your writing but I think this needs a little revision. Love your work.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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#1 the paranormal expert has already watched it an saw the spiritual be dangerous to humans.
#2 Paige is introducing these people to the paranormal expert.
#3 He has already seen the video, but not the inside of the house. He will need to get a reading which will come up in a later post.
I know I am not to defend my work, but I wonder if you hurried through this post. Thank you for the time it took to read it and write the review.
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I sent you a personal message to help explain. Hope it is helpful.
Comment from JM daSilva
This is a great ghost to have around. They were breaking and entering. They deserved what they got.
The foursome followed the young officer through the narrow halls to the (no hyphen chief-of-police's) office.
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This is a great ghost to have around. They were breaking and entering. They deserved what they got.
The foursome followed the young officer through the narrow halls to the (no hyphen chief-of-police's) office.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by. I appreciate both.
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Great pleasure
Comment from Zue65
Well your story is heating up and wow, the twists and turns make the story more exciting that the readers are hooked up to reading your story, asking and waiting for more. Excellent job, God bless, I enjoyed this chapter.
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Well your story is heating up and wow, the twists and turns make the story more exciting that the readers are hooked up to reading your story, asking and waiting for more. Excellent job, God bless, I enjoyed this chapter.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by. I appreciate both.
