Savannah Love
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Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Whoohooo, something is percolating! Will be interesting to see where it all leads after finding Tyler and Daniel in house!
*Happy Holidays*
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*;*)
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014
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Whoohooo, something is percolating! Will be interesting to see where it all leads after finding Tyler and Daniel in house!
*Happy Holidays*
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*;*)
Comment Written 15-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014
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You're great.
Comment from Sankey
Once again getting hotter and hotter. I love this story. Award winning stuff have you given Movie rights to anyone yet? Really good again. No Spags.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Once again getting hotter and hotter. I love this story. Award winning stuff have you given Movie rights to anyone yet? Really good again. No Spags.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from BethShelby
this is a very exciting chapter, It pretty well backs up claims that ghosts exists in the house, Paige sees the ghost as her protector and doesn't want him to leave. I can't blame her. it seems thsy or he is keeping her house safe frrom intruders It will be interesting to see what the police will do.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2013
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this is a very exciting chapter, It pretty well backs up claims that ghosts exists in the house, Paige sees the ghost as her protector and doesn't want him to leave. I can't blame her. it seems thsy or he is keeping her house safe frrom intruders It will be interesting to see what the police will do.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Barbara, nicely penned post with Bradley getting up to some of its own mischief. Great job and still have me caught up in this story - I enjoyed it.
Thanks for sharing and happy holidays.
Maureen
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2013
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Dear Barbara, nicely penned post with Bradley getting up to some of its own mischief. Great job and still have me caught up in this story - I enjoyed it.
Thanks for sharing and happy holidays.
Maureen
Comment Written 06-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I always enjoying hearing from you.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Hahahaha - sorry, I shouldn't be laughing I guess, but those two deserved exactly what they got. Your description of what Paige saw on the video was priceless, Barbara! I enjoyed this part very much.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2013
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Hahahaha - sorry, I shouldn't be laughing I guess, but those two deserved exactly what they got. Your description of what Paige saw on the video was priceless, Barbara! I enjoyed this part very much.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by. I appreciate both.
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You are welcome. :)
Comment from NaughtieScribe
First off, I'd like to know how anybody (except Paige) has the authority to bar her from her own home, and to order ghost busters in. Seem like an over reach by Savanah's finest. Also, where were Tyler and Daniel going, and what were they after. Man, I need more time.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2013
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First off, I'd like to know how anybody (except Paige) has the authority to bar her from her own home, and to order ghost busters in. Seem like an over reach by Savanah's finest. Also, where were Tyler and Daniel going, and what were they after. Man, I need more time.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2013
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I think some of your questions will be answered soon, or at least I hope they will. I appreciate your review.
Comment from Erik McGinley
I think I liked the story but I could not easily read it through the mass of dialogue. That's a personal preference obviously, but I'd have marked this down as more of a script than a chapter of prose.
I do, though, find myself wanting to know more, so that makes it a good read imo.
Three stars because I disliked all the verbiage. Four if I had more to read about.
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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2013
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I think I liked the story but I could not easily read it through the mass of dialogue. That's a personal preference obviously, but I'd have marked this down as more of a script than a chapter of prose.
I do, though, find myself wanting to know more, so that makes it a good read imo.
Three stars because I disliked all the verbiage. Four if I had more to read about.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2013
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Since you don't like a lot of dialogue, I don't think you had better read my work any more. I write in mostly dialogue and my fans like it. Thank you.
Comment from mellee
I felt this could be an excellent story it will appeal to the credulous and is readable. perhaps some more character background is needed? Altogether a great start x
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2013
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I felt this could be an excellent story it will appeal to the credulous and is readable. perhaps some more character background is needed? Altogether a great start x
Comment Written 05-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2013
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This is chapter 15, so I can guarantee that the characters were defined in the first few chapters.
Comment from watergirl
I liked this part of the story it makes me want to read more.
You have portrayed your characters well, and the ending here just serves to whet my appetite. Nicely told and the suspense is woven in nicely. Good luck with it.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2013
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I liked this part of the story it makes me want to read more.
You have portrayed your characters well, and the ending here just serves to whet my appetite. Nicely told and the suspense is woven in nicely. Good luck with it.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mastery
Coming along very nicely, Barb. Your dialogue is superb and the images are realistic. Like:
"Ma'am, you must understand it's very rare that we find anything. Most of the time there's a reasonable explanation for the strange happenings. If there are actual spirits in the house, we'll rid the house of them."
I have one suggestion if you don't mind:
"I don't want the house rid of my ghost. I have become very fond of Bradley Bookman. Bradley's mischievous but not dangerous." Paige folded her arms across her chest."
(In this situation, I would put this first: " Paige folded her arms across her chest." then follow with the dialogue. Read it aloud and you'll see what I mean, I think.
Good job overall. Bob
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2013
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Coming along very nicely, Barb. Your dialogue is superb and the images are realistic. Like:
"Ma'am, you must understand it's very rare that we find anything. Most of the time there's a reasonable explanation for the strange happenings. If there are actual spirits in the house, we'll rid the house of them."
I have one suggestion if you don't mind:
"I don't want the house rid of my ghost. I have become very fond of Bradley Bookman. Bradley's mischievous but not dangerous." Paige folded her arms across her chest."
(In this situation, I would put this first: " Paige folded her arms across her chest." then follow with the dialogue. Read it aloud and you'll see what I mean, I think.
Good job overall. Bob
Comment Written 04-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2013
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Sorry for the late response. At school it's semester break and we had a lot of paperwork to catch up on. I am now on break for two weeks and I have time to breath. I appreciate your help.
