Savannah Love
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Comment from rvictoriab
Dialogue is well done, effective and in a manner people would actually employ. The story progresses fast enough that the reader doesn't get bored while still providing all of the necessary information. Especially liked how the narrative is interspersed with the dialogue rather than taking up big blocks of the piece.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2013
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Dialogue is well done, effective and in a manner people would actually employ. The story progresses fast enough that the reader doesn't get bored while still providing all of the necessary information. Especially liked how the narrative is interspersed with the dialogue rather than taking up big blocks of the piece.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Zue65
Cash and Paige love story, I miss your story for more than three months,for I just renewed my membership about two days ago. But as always I enjoyed this chapter too, the mystery, the doubts cast upon Paige intensified the tension and conflict and made the plot more interesting and exciting. Thanks for sharing the story, God bless.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2013
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Cash and Paige love story, I miss your story for more than three months,for I just renewed my membership about two days ago. But as always I enjoyed this chapter too, the mystery, the doubts cast upon Paige intensified the tension and conflict and made the plot more interesting and exciting. Thanks for sharing the story, God bless.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. Glad you are back.
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Barb. As usual, very good characterizations and superb dialogue. The images are solid too, like this:
"Cash took Paige's arm and led her away from the others. "Don't you think it's about time you come clean about the special-effects? How much did they cost? They must've been really good."
I amy be wrong but I would ad something here as it seems so cold for some reason. Even if she is angry at him:
""Cash mentioned it." Perhaps: "Yes--Cash did mention it."
Happy Thanksgiving, Barb. Bob
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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Hi, Barb. As usual, very good characterizations and superb dialogue. The images are solid too, like this:
"Cash took Paige's arm and led her away from the others. "Don't you think it's about time you come clean about the special-effects? How much did they cost? They must've been really good."
I amy be wrong but I would ad something here as it seems so cold for some reason. Even if she is angry at him:
""Cash mentioned it." Perhaps: "Yes--Cash did mention it."
Happy Thanksgiving, Barb. Bob
Comment Written 27-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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I have made the corrections. Thank you for the kind review and help.
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We help one another and that's a good thing, huh, Barb. Bob :)
Comment from joneau2
An interesting and mysterious tale. Ghosts are always a great subject to write about. I wonder if this ghost is benevolent?
You left a good hook for the reader to want to continue.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2013
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An interesting and mysterious tale. Ghosts are always a great subject to write about. I wonder if this ghost is benevolent?
You left a good hook for the reader to want to continue.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from BethShelby
Well, the policemen believe there are ghost but it seems something that Billy Joe and Cash aren't ready to accept. Paige says Cleve taught her not to trust men, but it seems as though Cash must have had some experience in the past that left him unwilling to trust women.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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Well, the policemen believe there are ghost but it seems something that Billy Joe and Cash aren't ready to accept. Paige says Cleve taught her not to trust men, but it seems as though Cash must have had some experience in the past that left him unwilling to trust women.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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You are probably correct about Cash. Maybe we need to delve a little more into this not talking Southern boy. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Oh goody we are going to find out about the ghost. As always very well done. I found no errors. Looking forward to the next chapter. Hope you have a nice Thanksgiving. Rox
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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Oh goody we are going to find out about the ghost. As always very well done. I found no errors. Looking forward to the next chapter. Hope you have a nice Thanksgiving. Rox
Comment Written 27-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
Told in a direct manner without pretension. Everyone involved knows their place and acts accordingly..Officer Baker comes to mind. As for Paige she's caught between a rock and a hard place. For ex:
"Paige glared at Cash. "I don't know anything about this. I honestly had nothing to do with it."
Well told and presented.
Regards:
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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Told in a direct manner without pretension. Everyone involved knows their place and acts accordingly..Officer Baker comes to mind. As for Paige she's caught between a rock and a hard place. For ex:
"Paige glared at Cash. "I don't know anything about this. I honestly had nothing to do with it."
Well told and presented.
Regards:
Comment Written 27-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by. I always appreciate hearing from you.
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Dear Barbara: Thanks. Just posted 2 more.
XX Steve C
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Barbara, excellent work on this one and you leave me hanging again. Mysterious ghost on video - can't wait for the next post. You did a great job on this one.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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Dear Barbara, excellent work on this one and you leave me hanging again. Mysterious ghost on video - can't wait for the next post. You did a great job on this one.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
Comment Written 26-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by. I always appreciate hearing from you.
Comment from Mishelly
I can't wait to see what was caught on tape. I also look forward to Cash's reaction if Bradley Bookman does appear. This post shows there are still a lot of trust issues on both sides. Paige obviously doesn't trust men after what Cleve did to her, and Cash doesn't trust Paige enough to believe her when she said she didn't use special effects. I get the feeling something major is going to happen to force these two to learn to trust again. I look forward to finding out how that is going to happen :-)
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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I can't wait to see what was caught on tape. I also look forward to Cash's reaction if Bradley Bookman does appear. This post shows there are still a lot of trust issues on both sides. Paige obviously doesn't trust men after what Cleve did to her, and Cash doesn't trust Paige enough to believe her when she said she didn't use special effects. I get the feeling something major is going to happen to force these two to learn to trust again. I look forward to finding out how that is going to happen :-)
Comment Written 26-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by. I always appreciate hearing from you.
Comment from ELumpkins
Looks like certain folks don't trust Paige. It seems they have been friends for a long time yet there is that trust thing. I wonder if they have reason not to trust her. I suppose we will find out in the next chapter. Interesting so far.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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Looks like certain folks don't trust Paige. It seems they have been friends for a long time yet there is that trust thing. I wonder if they have reason not to trust her. I suppose we will find out in the next chapter. Interesting so far.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
