Savannah Love
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Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Yikes, I have to wait to see what happens! I'm being 'forced' to go out to lunch. My hubby is one mean hombre. (*.*)
Back attcha later. Another good chapter.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*,*)
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2014
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Yikes, I have to wait to see what happens! I'm being 'forced' to go out to lunch. My hubby is one mean hombre. (*.*)
Back attcha later. Another good chapter.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*,*)
Comment Written 06-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from Sankey
Wow what next huh. Still exciting intriguing and all that. Still not dull by any means. What jollies have you cooked up for us now? No Spags.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Wow what next huh. Still exciting intriguing and all that. Still not dull by any means. What jollies have you cooked up for us now? No Spags.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from NaughtieScribe
Oh this is getting so good, and a little creep. I'm betting that even after Cash and Billy Joe see the video they still won't belive in Bookman. Either way Paige got some serious backup for her home.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2013
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Oh this is getting so good, and a little creep. I'm betting that even after Cash and Billy Joe see the video they still won't belive in Bookman. Either way Paige got some serious backup for her home.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Whoops! Somehow I read this chapter after I'd read the one about Paige and the group actually watching the video. No matter, it was still an excellent chapter, even if I did read it a bit out of sequence.
I don't believe Paige did manipulate anything that went on inside the house, nor do I believe she used any special FX to create what happened to Daniel and Tyler. I believe she actually has a poltergeist inhabiting her home, in addition to Bradley's ghost. Poltergeists are notorious for hurtful and harmful behavior, throwing things around the house, causing hallucinations, etc.
Also, that would be terrible to return home form a trip and be told you couldn't go into your own home. We all know, no matter how well the vacation one takes goes, there's no place quite like home...
Nice job, Barbara!
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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Whoops! Somehow I read this chapter after I'd read the one about Paige and the group actually watching the video. No matter, it was still an excellent chapter, even if I did read it a bit out of sequence.
I don't believe Paige did manipulate anything that went on inside the house, nor do I believe she used any special FX to create what happened to Daniel and Tyler. I believe she actually has a poltergeist inhabiting her home, in addition to Bradley's ghost. Poltergeists are notorious for hurtful and harmful behavior, throwing things around the house, causing hallucinations, etc.
Also, that would be terrible to return home form a trip and be told you couldn't go into your own home. We all know, no matter how well the vacation one takes goes, there's no place quite like home...
Nice job, Barbara!
Comment Written 02-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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I made a mistake in posting and reposted this on instead of the one I mean to post. OH Dear, of course Tom wouldn't let me correct it. At least you got points for reading. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rama devi
Oops! Reviewed in wrong order, but that is because I started from the top...and I cannot always review each chapter section. One good sign in your writing is that I jump in on any chapter and never feel lost.
The characterization is consistent, (though I do think it could be a little more multidimensional). The style and good pacing are also consistently good. I get the gist of the plot but have not read steadily enough to comment on its structure (yet). Each scene I read unfolds vividly. Well done.
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For that(,) I thank him."
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You do a great job of using gestures and expressions to enhance both characterization and dialog. Well done!
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Before long(,) Bart arrived.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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Oops! Reviewed in wrong order, but that is because I started from the top...and I cannot always review each chapter section. One good sign in your writing is that I jump in on any chapter and never feel lost.
The characterization is consistent, (though I do think it could be a little more multidimensional). The style and good pacing are also consistently good. I get the gist of the plot but have not read steadily enough to comment on its structure (yet). Each scene I read unfolds vividly. Well done.
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For that(,) I thank him."
*check for missing line breaks in formatting.
You do a great job of using gestures and expressions to enhance both characterization and dialog. Well done!
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Before long(,) Bart arrived.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 02-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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I accidently reposted this one. I can't believe myself sometimes. Thank you for reading.
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That way, I got to review it! :)
Comment from N.K. Wagner
This turn of events is not ringing true. Since when can an owner not enter his house because it is haunted? There's no law concerning haunted property except that if you sell it, you're required to disclose the information. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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This turn of events is not ringing true. Since when can an owner not enter his house because it is haunted? There's no law concerning haunted property except that if you sell it, you're required to disclose the information. :) Nancy
Comment Written 01-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sylvia Page
I had no problem following this story. It flowed in an easy manner, not forced and the scenes knitted very well. Great picture too. Look forward to reading more of this story/
Cheers
Sylvia
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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I had no problem following this story. It flowed in an easy manner, not forced and the scenes knitted very well. Great picture too. Look forward to reading more of this story/
Cheers
Sylvia
Comment Written 01-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Shirley B
Dear Barbara, You always do a great job posting your chapters. I have missed a couple but It was easy for me to catch up. You write wonderful dialouge. It is so smooth. I am interested in the Ghost. :) Great job, Shirley
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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Dear Barbara, You always do a great job posting your chapters. I have missed a couple but It was easy for me to catch up. You write wonderful dialouge. It is so smooth. I am interested in the Ghost. :) Great job, Shirley
Comment Written 01-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from evrenios
I like the slow unfolding of suspense that you are managing without endless repetition. Excellent. The premise sounds exciting. The addition of the police presence only adds to the urgency and suspense of the piece. The masterful way you injected the forward trajectory of the story (conversation between the two girls in the SUV) was excellent. You let us discover the news about Clive and the relationship rather than just stating it. Well done.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2013
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I like the slow unfolding of suspense that you are managing without endless repetition. Excellent. The premise sounds exciting. The addition of the police presence only adds to the urgency and suspense of the piece. The masterful way you injected the forward trajectory of the story (conversation between the two girls in the SUV) was excellent. You let us discover the news about Clive and the relationship rather than just stating it. Well done.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from comanalbert
Confused a little less than you think... only because it is good writing.I will read the others to enjoy myself further...This piece has the qualities of a movie, especially if avoiding today's stereotips and comes up with some novelties in its kind...
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2013
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Confused a little less than you think... only because it is good writing.I will read the others to enjoy myself further...This piece has the qualities of a movie, especially if avoiding today's stereotips and comes up with some novelties in its kind...
Comment Written 28-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
