Night Guilt
Guilt never rests30 total reviews
Comment from cottoncandy11
This chapter or story really hit home for me. I was a battered child and wife, but was able to overcome my hardship. We are dealt things in life and for sure there is dysfunction all around us. It was a beautiful read and I look forward to more of your work. Congratulations on your win.
Warm Regards, CC
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2013
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This chapter or story really hit home for me. I was a battered child and wife, but was able to overcome my hardship. We are dealt things in life and for sure there is dysfunction all around us. It was a beautiful read and I look forward to more of your work. Congratulations on your win.
Warm Regards, CC
Comment Written 29-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2013
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Thank you very much
Comment from Mastery
Hi. Lance. Congratulations on one whale of a good story. This is well written from the very first imagery-laden paragraph to the last. Bravo! I wish I had six stars left to give you...You deserve it for lines like these:
"But, Tracy had let him in, and now they were stuck with each other in the worst possible way. It only took moments, before Frank pulled his eyes away from his wife. He knew what he did. He felt it each day he walked passed Jessica's closed room. He hid it deep inside when they attended the press conference. When he wasn't drinking that scene played out over and over again, like a never ending rerun"
Happy Thanksgiving...Bob
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2013
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Hi. Lance. Congratulations on one whale of a good story. This is well written from the very first imagery-laden paragraph to the last. Bravo! I wish I had six stars left to give you...You deserve it for lines like these:
"But, Tracy had let him in, and now they were stuck with each other in the worst possible way. It only took moments, before Frank pulled his eyes away from his wife. He knew what he did. He felt it each day he walked passed Jessica's closed room. He hid it deep inside when they attended the press conference. When he wasn't drinking that scene played out over and over again, like a never ending rerun"
Happy Thanksgiving...Bob
Comment Written 28-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2013
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Thank you very much, Bob
Comment from gramalot8
Lancelot, thank you so much for this story. It is well worth winning the contest. It's a story we've seen in the headlines, yet, it's the rest of the story that's kept well hidden deep within those involved. I got teary eyed at the end for the peace of both Tracy and Jessica.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2013
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Lancelot, thank you so much for this story. It is well worth winning the contest. It's a story we've seen in the headlines, yet, it's the rest of the story that's kept well hidden deep within those involved. I got teary eyed at the end for the peace of both Tracy and Jessica.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2013
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Thank you very much.
Comment from ragamuffin
Certainly bittersweet. Justice, but never a happy ending to a tragic story. Well written piece that has good description and flowing conversation. Makes one wonder how many missing children are actually children murdered by a parent or relative but the family's keeping quiet about it. I bet there's been more than one or two. Well done.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2013
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Certainly bittersweet. Justice, but never a happy ending to a tragic story. Well written piece that has good description and flowing conversation. Makes one wonder how many missing children are actually children murdered by a parent or relative but the family's keeping quiet about it. I bet there's been more than one or two. Well done.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2013
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Thank you very much. It does make one wonder.
Comment from adewpearl
Congratulations on your contest win!
Barely containing its hatred for her, the cheap clock - add comma
You set the stage and create tone well in your opening
came on with a snap, causing her to raise - add comma
looking into her eye's - drop the apostrophe
You're just a shiftless, lazy drunk, and if - add comma
You work back story in effectively
Not wanting to stir suspicion, he - add comma
A very eerie, character-driven story about the power of guilt
I love the ending where she literally passes the guilt along to her sheriff lover by sharing the secret with him
Brooke
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2013
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Congratulations on your contest win!
Barely containing its hatred for her, the cheap clock - add comma
You set the stage and create tone well in your opening
came on with a snap, causing her to raise - add comma
looking into her eye's - drop the apostrophe
You're just a shiftless, lazy drunk, and if - add comma
You work back story in effectively
Not wanting to stir suspicion, he - add comma
A very eerie, character-driven story about the power of guilt
I love the ending where she literally passes the guilt along to her sheriff lover by sharing the secret with him
Brooke
Comment Written 28-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2013
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Thank you very much, Brooke. I always look forward to your reviews. You see so much, I miss. Thank you again. :)
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This was simply wonderful! Such a hauntingly captivating read from start to finish. Your construction of description and dialog is masterfully executed. This was an absolutely inspiring read for me. Thank you so much for sharing it with me.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2013
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This was simply wonderful! Such a hauntingly captivating read from start to finish. Your construction of description and dialog is masterfully executed. This was an absolutely inspiring read for me. Thank you so much for sharing it with me.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2013
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2013
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 A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 28-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2013
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Thank you very much.
Comment from watergirl
This is an interesting story about crimes and drunks and love. You write in an easy to read fashion. It is easy to imagine this horrible man and how unpleasant it is to be near him. I shudder. A question mark after the deputies' words "attack someone." I think would help.
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This is an interesting story about crimes and drunks and love. You write in an easy to read fashion. It is easy to imagine this horrible man and how unpleasant it is to be near him. I shudder. A question mark after the deputies' words "attack someone." I think would help.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2013
Comment from Sylvia Page
This is an incredible story. I was engrossed in this well written story to the end. Was it Tracy who got rid of her daughter or was it her drunken husband? Did she avenge her daughter's death by shooting her husband?
Sylvia
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2013
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This is an incredible story. I was engrossed in this well written story to the end. Was it Tracy who got rid of her daughter or was it her drunken husband? Did she avenge her daughter's death by shooting her husband?
Sylvia
Comment Written 13-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2013
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Thank you. I was her husband, but she let him get away with it for a while.
Comment from c_lucas
Guilt can play tricks on one's mind. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an interesting read. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Guilt can play tricks on one's mind. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an interesting read. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Thank you
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You're welcome.
