Savannah Love
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Comment from judiverse
Excellent chapter. The scene moves along and develops through the dialogue. Paige worries about Cash after his disappearing act. She really grills him, but he's reluctant to come clean. Finally he admits he spent the night in the SUV. He is such a gentleman! That seems to please Paige. Paige has been worried about him, and you definitely show that. With so much attention having been showered on Paige, good that she has some reason to worry about someone else. judi
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Excellent chapter. The scene moves along and develops through the dialogue. Paige worries about Cash after his disappearing act. She really grills him, but he's reluctant to come clean. Finally he admits he spent the night in the SUV. He is such a gentleman! That seems to please Paige. Paige has been worried about him, and you definitely show that. With so much attention having been showered on Paige, good that she has some reason to worry about someone else. judi
Comment Written 04-Nov-2013
Comment from Norbanus
Absolutely delightful, Barbara. It's not often we see a writer capture both sides a such tremendous, realistic situation. Superb.
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Absolutely delightful, Barbara. It's not often we see a writer capture both sides a such tremendous, realistic situation. Superb.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2013
Comment from jamib
You have great attention to detail as far as their actions and the characters are very enjoyable. I look forward to reading more. I would have liked to see a little more detail in the environment to really pull me into the story. Overall, nicely done!
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You have great attention to detail as far as their actions and the characters are very enjoyable. I look forward to reading more. I would have liked to see a little more detail in the environment to really pull me into the story. Overall, nicely done!
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Comment Written 04-Nov-2013
Comment from Terror2s
I liked this and didn't notice any grammar errors. Your story moved along nicely and was easy to follow even though I haven't read every chapter. (I love that you provide a brief summary of the former chapter.) I was surprised that the very last line was in italics instead of quotes. T2
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I liked this and didn't notice any grammar errors. Your story moved along nicely and was easy to follow even though I haven't read every chapter. (I love that you provide a brief summary of the former chapter.) I was surprised that the very last line was in italics instead of quotes. T2
Comment Written 04-Nov-2013
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Super build-up of tense feelings and great resolution at end. I only noticed little bitsy things to fix:
occured
should be
occurred
Because that's how I was raised and that's who I am.
Put a comma after raised
How nice to have a character who is a gentleman.
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Super build-up of tense feelings and great resolution at end. I only noticed little bitsy things to fix:
occured
should be
occurred
Because that's how I was raised and that's who I am.
Put a comma after raised
How nice to have a character who is a gentleman.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2013
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
That's what I figured he did, because that's the type of person he is in this story and he is definitely attracted to her. Good chapter. God loves you and so do we.
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That's what I figured he did, because that's the type of person he is in this story and he is definitely attracted to her. Good chapter. God loves you and so do we.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2013
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Your best chapter yet, in my opinion. Wow. The sexual chemistry was palpable, her drama perfect (not overdone) and Cash...well, I think I'm in love with Cash. He's pretty darn sexy, Barbara. Confident, patient with her, controlled. You wrote him perfectly.
And that kiss at the end? Bloody yummy!
Excellent job, my friend. You nailed it and I LOVE it.
Bravo.
Big hugs
Av
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2013
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Your best chapter yet, in my opinion. Wow. The sexual chemistry was palpable, her drama perfect (not overdone) and Cash...well, I think I'm in love with Cash. He's pretty darn sexy, Barbara. Confident, patient with her, controlled. You wrote him perfectly.
And that kiss at the end? Bloody yummy!
Excellent job, my friend. You nailed it and I LOVE it.
Bravo.
Big hugs
Av
Comment Written 03-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I really appreciate coming from a wonderful author as yourself. Thank you very much for the kind words.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, barbara, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where cash and paige work things out once he explained where he was and why. somebody offered to buy me a membership for one year so i guess i'll be around a little while longer.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2013
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this is very well written, barbara, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where cash and paige work things out once he explained where he was and why. somebody offered to buy me a membership for one year so i guess i'll be around a little while longer.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2013
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That is the most wonderful news I have heard in a long time. I am so happy. God works in mysterious way. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from boxergirl
Thanks for your author notes. This was my first read and I do not know all the dynamics but I still found it an engaging dialogue between Paige and Cash. I did see a small typo I think at the end where you say, After the kiss, Cashed continued to ..." I think, it is just Cash? 8-) BG
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2013
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Thanks for your author notes. This was my first read and I do not know all the dynamics but I still found it an engaging dialogue between Paige and Cash. I did see a small typo I think at the end where you say, After the kiss, Cashed continued to ..." I think, it is just Cash? 8-) BG
Comment Written 03-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2013
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Thank your for the kind review and the catch. I appreciate it.
Comment from Mteske
Your organization makes it easy to follow along and I did not get lost at all. The format of your dialogue is perfect and I can't find any errors. Great word choice- sniffed, released, slapped, escaped etc. Great job on this.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2013
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Your organization makes it easy to follow along and I did not get lost at all. The format of your dialogue is perfect and I can't find any errors. Great word choice- sniffed, released, slapped, escaped etc. Great job on this.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
