Savannah Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 67 "CHAPTER 14: PART FOUR"Can a fallen confederate soldier encourage love?
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Comment from Charade
Well it looks like I came in at a great time in the story! (Please keep in mind I haven't read anything up to this point).
Great way to show how Cash wreaked havoc on Paige!
She stepped out naked? or in pj's?
Why would the police be at her door when she hadn't dialed them yet? She was going to call them anyway, why upset if they were already there?
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
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Well it looks like I came in at a great time in the story! (Please keep in mind I haven't read anything up to this point).
Great way to show how Cash wreaked havoc on Paige!
She stepped out naked? or in pj's?
Why would the police be at her door when she hadn't dialed them yet? She was going to call them anyway, why upset if they were already there?
Comment Written 30-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. She was afraid something happened to Cash and the police was coming to tell her.
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Ok That makes sense! Thanks ;)
Comment from jadapenn
Lol, a worrying chapter for Paige. Wonder what Cash is up to other than realising he is over his head in love and now has to face the music. The story is becoming very interesting and I enjoyed the internal dialogue.luv jada
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
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Lol, a worrying chapter for Paige. Wonder what Cash is up to other than realising he is over his head in love and now has to face the music. The story is becoming very interesting and I enjoyed the internal dialogue.luv jada
Comment Written 30-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from emjaihammond
Another good chapter in this very hard to figure out who done it. I loved the way Paige went to the door, threw her arms around Cash and then quickly remembered her frustration with him being missing and she slaps him! Easy to believe and all the time leading us closer to the answer.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
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Another good chapter in this very hard to figure out who done it. I loved the way Paige went to the door, threw her arms around Cash and then quickly remembered her frustration with him being missing and she slaps him! Easy to believe and all the time leading us closer to the answer.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from GWinterwin
Good chapter, with some sexy thoughts from Paige about Cash. She seems to want more than kissing to take place. I suppose more will become of this situation. Interesting words to keep the thought of the reader.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
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Good chapter, with some sexy thoughts from Paige about Cash. She seems to want more than kissing to take place. I suppose more will become of this situation. Interesting words to keep the thought of the reader.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Tonulak
Dear Barbra,I liked the tension that was skillfully built in this post. Page is upset and flustered and her nervousness was shown by unclear thinking. Great job with this one--Ted
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
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Dear Barbra,I liked the tension that was skillfully built in this post. Page is upset and flustered and her nervousness was shown by unclear thinking. Great job with this one--Ted
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Margol
I haven't read the other posts so I am only commenting on this one as I read it here.
I like the romance between the two.
It seems to move a bit too fast. As in: Paige dials room service and then there's a knock on the door. There is no time gap. Putting more words in between can be like a time gap. In the following example just one sentence gives a sense of time passing.
e.g. Paige dialed room service and ordered a bottle of rose scented bubble bath. She put the phone down and paced around the room thinking of where Cash might be. There was a knock on the door. ... etc....
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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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I haven't read the other posts so I am only commenting on this one as I read it here.
I like the romance between the two.
It seems to move a bit too fast. As in: Paige dials room service and then there's a knock on the door. There is no time gap. Putting more words in between can be like a time gap. In the following example just one sentence gives a sense of time passing.
e.g. Paige dialed room service and ordered a bottle of rose scented bubble bath. She put the phone down and paced around the room thinking of where Cash might be. There was a knock on the door. ... etc....
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Welcome to FS. My writing is sharp and crisp. My fans like that. I don't like reading a lot of description so I don't waste the readers time with a lot of extra words. There are plenty of authors you can read who like using extra words.
Comment from allborn66
This is a very interesting piece. I took a few days off, so I'm behind. I'm intrigued about the situation. I liked the dialogue.
Barbara
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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This is a very interesting piece. I took a few days off, so I'm behind. I'm intrigued about the situation. I liked the dialogue.
Barbara
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
A very good chapter. Kept me on the edge of my seat the whole way through. You have done an excellent job on this chapter. Thank you.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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A very good chapter. Kept me on the edge of my seat the whole way through. You have done an excellent job on this chapter. Thank you.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from rtobaygo
I believe this the first post where the focus was on one character. The range of feelings and emotions allowed for a deeper understanding of how Paige feels toward Cash. The tension and worry Paige generated are palpable. Well done!
Take care,
Ray
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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I believe this the first post where the focus was on one character. The range of feelings and emotions allowed for a deeper understanding of how Paige feels toward Cash. The tension and worry Paige generated are palpable. Well done!
Take care,
Ray
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Emotions are high between Cash and Paige.
First she hugs him then smacks him
It seems Cash is somewhat overwhelmed with their differences. I'm looking forward to hearing what
he has to say.
bother them until I have too - to
Margaret
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Emotions are high between Cash and Paige.
First she hugs him then smacks him
It seems Cash is somewhat overwhelmed with their differences. I'm looking forward to hearing what
he has to say.
bother them until I have too - to
Margaret
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
