Savannah Love
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Comment from Anthony Crosbie
Hi Barbara. This is good paced chapter. The dialogue is clever and snappy, and you keep the descriptions brief, but still keep the reader involved. It's a good style of writing as it's better to let the reader use their imagination and do a bit of the work.
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Hi Barbara. This is good paced chapter. The dialogue is clever and snappy, and you keep the descriptions brief, but still keep the reader involved. It's a good style of writing as it's better to let the reader use their imagination and do a bit of the work.
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Curly Girly
Cash is clearly sexually attracted to Paige. He exercised self-control by backing off. He did not want to treat her casually or use her. He is an unusual young man, and I hope Paige will realise that.
All good. Another well written chapter.
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Cash is clearly sexually attracted to Paige. He exercised self-control by backing off. He did not want to treat her casually or use her. He is an unusual young man, and I hope Paige will realise that.
All good. Another well written chapter.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2013
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Thank you for catching the about Cash trying to be a gentleman and being attracted to Paige. Some reviewers have not caught on.
Comment from elgone
LOL, Cash knows he wants to take whatever bed Paige is going to be sleeping in, just doesn't know whether he wants everything else that will go with that. It good for Billy Joe and Mary Pat, though.
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LOL, Cash knows he wants to take whatever bed Paige is going to be sleeping in, just doesn't know whether he wants everything else that will go with that. It good for Billy Joe and Mary Pat, though.
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I'm starting two worry a little about Cash. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gungalo
LOL don't tell me this is gonna be Cash's chance and he is no where to be found now?? The trip in was harrowing but the whole stay was almost beautiful. One tends to forget what they are doing there.
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LOL don't tell me this is gonna be Cash's chance and he is no where to be found now?? The trip in was harrowing but the whole stay was almost beautiful. One tends to forget what they are doing there.
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
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Smile.
Comment from Stephen Wolff
Good dialogue and characterisation. As a Londoner the cultural references are a bit of a mystery to me and think that effected my enjoyment. Haven't been able to read any other chapters yet but I'll try to get to it!
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Good dialogue and characterisation. As a Londoner the cultural references are a bit of a mystery to me and think that effected my enjoyment. Haven't been able to read any other chapters yet but I'll try to get to it!
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mteske
Great word choice- revenuers, tapped, settles etc. I really liked how your organization makes it easy to follow and read. Great job and your dialogue fits in perfectly. Great job!
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Great word choice- revenuers, tapped, settles etc. I really liked how your organization makes it easy to follow and read. Great job and your dialogue fits in perfectly. Great job!
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh that man is so frustrating! Why did he leave? (<< you see? I am asking the same question Paige is asking! LOL)
How sweet of Paige to arrange for Billy Joe and Mary Pat to have a romantic night together.
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Oh that man is so frustrating! Why did he leave? (<< you see? I am asking the same question Paige is asking! LOL)
How sweet of Paige to arrange for Billy Joe and Mary Pat to have a romantic night together.
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I am asking the same question myself. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from mumsyone
Good chapter, Barbara. I can see why Paige would wonder!
I thought maybe we could sight-see (sightsee) for a few hours, eat a nice lunch,
"What do you have in mind for sight-seeing (sightseeing)?"
"I enjoyed watching the different types of fish and see (seeing?) the different depths that certain fish live at."
Cash grinned and glance (glanced) back at Paige before he got behind the steering wheel.
Once the elevator stopped, he opened the ladies (ladies') room (I would use an apostrophe here just so that it doesn't sound the a restroom, but that's up to you)
After they were seated, Paige watched her friends (friends') eyes widen as they enjoyed the game.
Cash's glaze (gaze) slowly glided down from Paige's eyes
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Good chapter, Barbara. I can see why Paige would wonder!
I thought maybe we could sight-see (sightsee) for a few hours, eat a nice lunch,
"What do you have in mind for sight-seeing (sightseeing)?"
"I enjoyed watching the different types of fish and see (seeing?) the different depths that certain fish live at."
Cash grinned and glance (glanced) back at Paige before he got behind the steering wheel.
Once the elevator stopped, he opened the ladies (ladies') room (I would use an apostrophe here just so that it doesn't sound the a restroom, but that's up to you)
After they were seated, Paige watched her friends (friends') eyes widen as they enjoyed the game.
Cash's glaze (gaze) slowly glided down from Paige's eyes
Comment Written 20-Oct-2013
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Thank you for catching those. I guess I rushed to fast.
Comment from ladykah81
Great chapter. I loved the dialogue and the banter between the characters is great. I can't wait to see what happens between Cash and Paige! Nice job!
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Great chapter. I loved the dialogue and the banter between the characters is great. I can't wait to see what happens between Cash and Paige! Nice job!
Comment Written 20-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from c_lucas
Cash has a new name, Superman, Only a man with a will of steel could walk out of Paige dress the way she was. This is very well written.
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Cash has a new name, Superman, Only a man with a will of steel could walk out of Paige dress the way she was. This is very well written.
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Comment Written 20-Oct-2013
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I'm starting to worry about Cash myself. Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie
