Savannah Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 66 "CHAPTER 14: PART THREE"Can a fallen confederate soldier encourage love?
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Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Well done. Fun day. I keep forgetting Paige is rich. I didn't see any error and thought it fun, different from the others as you got to see another side of the characters. Rox
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Well done. Fun day. I keep forgetting Paige is rich. I didn't see any error and thought it fun, different from the others as you got to see another side of the characters. Rox
Comment Written 21-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and your support.
Comment from barkingdog
If anyone's been to Atlanta, they can relate to the traffic problem. LOL No wonder he missed the exit.
Your foreshadowed that Paige would give the king sized bed to Mary Pat and Billy Joe, by letting Mary Pat tell how she always wished to spend her honeymoon in a place like this. Nicely done.
I laughed at the men thinking it was a waste of money to pay to see fish. LOL Typical.
Now, why did Cash leave? And where the heck did he go?
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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If anyone's been to Atlanta, they can relate to the traffic problem. LOL No wonder he missed the exit.
Your foreshadowed that Paige would give the king sized bed to Mary Pat and Billy Joe, by letting Mary Pat tell how she always wished to spend her honeymoon in a place like this. Nicely done.
I laughed at the men thinking it was a waste of money to pay to see fish. LOL Typical.
Now, why did Cash leave? And where the heck did he go?
Comment Written 21-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and your support.
Comment from CR Delport
Cash sure took Paige by surprise leaving like that. This is another well written chapter. A few suggestions:
and come a little later," added Billy Joe. --- drop "a little"
That's all I really know." --- drop "really"
I could really get used to this." --- drop "really"
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Cash sure took Paige by surprise leaving like that. This is another well written chapter. A few suggestions:
and come a little later," added Billy Joe. --- drop "a little"
That's all I really know." --- drop "really"
I could really get used to this." --- drop "really"
Comment Written 21-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and your support.
Comment from noronradss55
WelI Written lot of style to this chapter
characters the reader can care about.
Does drag along a little towards the end
but all in all a worth while read.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2013
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WelI Written lot of style to this chapter
characters the reader can care about.
Does drag along a little towards the end
but all in all a worth while read.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the review and welcome to FS.
Comment from essence56
You are such an awesome writer. I enjoy so much reading what you post. It's needless to say your writing is flawless, smooth, and easy flowing. I look forward to reading more. Thank you for your work.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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You are such an awesome writer. I enjoy so much reading what you post. It's needless to say your writing is flawless, smooth, and easy flowing. I look forward to reading more. Thank you for your work.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and your support.
Comment from JM daSilva
When she talked about the honeymoon, I imagined what was coming. Nice.
They have limousine service. Since the game doesn't start until (no hyphen seven-fifteen), I
"No, but I do take offence to you calling Morgan a mutt. He's a pure(-) bred chocolate
Billy Joe whispered, "Great(,) a boutique."
Cash took Paige's hand. "I have to give it to you, (. Or ;)when you do something(,) you go all
"I'm glad you liked it. The limousine should be waiting. Off to the Hall of Fame (M)museum."
memorabilia. Paige took Mary Pat aside. "I know this man must be important(,) but who is
"Most fans believe the best Braves players(player) ever.
Mary Pat and Paige were ready for bed(,) and they each crawled under the covers. After they
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2013
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When she talked about the honeymoon, I imagined what was coming. Nice.
They have limousine service. Since the game doesn't start until (no hyphen seven-fifteen), I
"No, but I do take offence to you calling Morgan a mutt. He's a pure(-) bred chocolate
Billy Joe whispered, "Great(,) a boutique."
Cash took Paige's hand. "I have to give it to you, (. Or ;)when you do something(,) you go all
"I'm glad you liked it. The limousine should be waiting. Off to the Hall of Fame (M)museum."
memorabilia. Paige took Mary Pat aside. "I know this man must be important(,) but who is
"Most fans believe the best Braves players(player) ever.
Mary Pat and Paige were ready for bed(,) and they each crawled under the covers. After they
Comment Written 20-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2013
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Sorry for the late reply. I needed time to make the corrections. I appreciate the help.
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Great pleasure.
Comment from judiverse
Excellent work. Six stars worth! Paige really knows how to do things in style. The limousine service, the hotel rooms, everything is top notch. Mary Pat really enjoys having such luxury. The excellent seats impress the guys. They're still waiting to find out if their plan to catch the people who've been breaking in to Paige's home try something while they're a way. Interesting bit at the end where Paige suggests that Billy Joe and Mary Pat share the room. Where will that leave Paige and Cash? Cash isn't sure what's on Paige's mind, but I'm sure eager to find out. judi
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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Excellent work. Six stars worth! Paige really knows how to do things in style. The limousine service, the hotel rooms, everything is top notch. Mary Pat really enjoys having such luxury. The excellent seats impress the guys. They're still waiting to find out if their plan to catch the people who've been breaking in to Paige's home try something while they're a way. Interesting bit at the end where Paige suggests that Billy Joe and Mary Pat share the room. Where will that leave Paige and Cash? Cash isn't sure what's on Paige's mind, but I'm sure eager to find out. judi
Comment Written 20-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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I think Cash worried about the later consequences. Thank you for the wonderful review.
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You're so welcome. Cash seems worried about getting involved with a wealthy woman. judi
Comment from Adri7enne
Sounds like your characters are on a nice holiday. Paige is picking up the tab? How would that make the rest of them feel? But as you say, if I haven't read the rest of it...I'm sure you know whether all of this is essential to the plot. It was a pleasant interlude in any case. What's with Cash? He prefers to look a gift horse in the mouth I guess. LOL!
I'm wondering what the word count might be so far? Are you keeping a running total? A light romance should come in around 65,000 to 70,000 words? I think. I'm sure you must be keeping track of that. Well done, Barb.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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Sounds like your characters are on a nice holiday. Paige is picking up the tab? How would that make the rest of them feel? But as you say, if I haven't read the rest of it...I'm sure you know whether all of this is essential to the plot. It was a pleasant interlude in any case. What's with Cash? He prefers to look a gift horse in the mouth I guess. LOL!
I'm wondering what the word count might be so far? Are you keeping a running total? A light romance should come in around 65,000 to 70,000 words? I think. I'm sure you must be keeping track of that. Well done, Barb.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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Yes, Paige is paying for it. I am wondering what's with Cash myself. LOL I just turned over 58,000 words. I'm right on target. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from emjaihammond
This really is a good addition to the story. It shows a little further into the girls and their private lives. The boys too, and I was surprised to learn that Mary Pat and her husband had never had a honeymoon. Is this just a ploy? I enjoyed the read.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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This really is a good addition to the story. It shows a little further into the girls and their private lives. The boys too, and I was surprised to learn that Mary Pat and her husband had never had a honeymoon. Is this just a ploy? I enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
"... the Braves Hall of Fame museum...
As usual, the country chatter continues as the foursome anticipate touring Atlanta. After all is said and done...hanky pamky occurs. What's next? Reminds me of that old movie "Bob, Ted, Carol and Alice'.
Regards:
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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"... the Braves Hall of Fame museum...
As usual, the country chatter continues as the foursome anticipate touring Atlanta. After all is said and done...hanky pamky occurs. What's next? Reminds me of that old movie "Bob, Ted, Carol and Alice'.
Regards:
Comment Written 20-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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HMMM, I am wondering what comes next myself. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
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Dear Barbara: You'll figure it out. Just posted #37/38.
Hugs: Steve C
