Savannah Love
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Comment from rtobaygo
The banter between friends brings back memories. The casual yet sincere interest your characters have toward one another is typical of people who care for each other.
Take care,
Rayr
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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The banter between friends brings back memories. The casual yet sincere interest your characters have toward one another is typical of people who care for each other.
Take care,
Rayr
Comment Written 21-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and your support.
Comment from Selina Stambi
Hi Barbara,
I have a six for you today! A masterful moment to end the chapter ... now your readers are going to come crying for more!
Nicely done, ma'am!
xx
Sonali
"Great(,) a boutique."
Paige told the bellhop (one word) they would
be important(,) but who is he?"
The Braves beat the Dodgers(,) five to three.(remove the inverted comma " )
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Hi Barbara,
I have a six for you today! A masterful moment to end the chapter ... now your readers are going to come crying for more!
Nicely done, ma'am!
xx
Sonali
"Great(,) a boutique."
Paige told the bellhop (one word) they would
be important(,) but who is he?"
The Braves beat the Dodgers(,) five to three.(remove the inverted comma " )
Comment Written 21-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and your support.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This is great writing my friend. So tight and sweet. You sure know how to paint with words. Weaving them into a fine tapestry of literary delight.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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This is great writing my friend. So tight and sweet. You sure know how to paint with words. Weaving them into a fine tapestry of literary delight.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and your support.
Comment from Cumbrianlass
NOOOO! What, is he bloody daft? Barbara, he should not have left. She's there, all skimpy and sexy, and he LEAVES? I understand he's a Southern gentleman, but maybe it's time he became a lewd Yankee for a bit. LOL!
Great post. Loved it!!!
A couple of things (but still worthy of a sixer.)
, "Great a boutique." - Suggest: "Great. A boutique." (More emphasis on the sarcasm, I think.
"Crystal chandeliers and a water fountain.(") - missing quote.
Another kiss quickly ensured. - ensued
Av
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2013
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NOOOO! What, is he bloody daft? Barbara, he should not have left. She's there, all skimpy and sexy, and he LEAVES? I understand he's a Southern gentleman, but maybe it's time he became a lewd Yankee for a bit. LOL!
Great post. Loved it!!!
A couple of things (but still worthy of a sixer.)
, "Great a boutique." - Suggest: "Great. A boutique." (More emphasis on the sarcasm, I think.
"Crystal chandeliers and a water fountain.(") - missing quote.
Another kiss quickly ensured. - ensued
Av
Comment Written 21-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2013
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Sorry for the late reply. I needed time to make the corrections. I appreciate the help.
Comment from Cajungirl
Interesting read. I enjoyed the tour of Atlanta. It was easy to share in fun the couples were having.
To be honest this is the first chapter of your novel that I have read. It will definitely not he my last. I would like to know if Cash and Paige relationship blossom. I also would like to know why Cash, kiss and ran.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Interesting read. I enjoyed the tour of Atlanta. It was easy to share in fun the couples were having.
To be honest this is the first chapter of your novel that I have read. It will definitely not he my last. I would like to know if Cash and Paige relationship blossom. I also would like to know why Cash, kiss and ran.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and your support.
Comment from Auroraboreal800
This is a lovely chapter, so romantic and sweet... We have valuable stories and cultural information from Georgia.
Great job, SO enjoyable!!
Regards Barbara,
:)
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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This is a lovely chapter, so romantic and sweet... We have valuable stories and cultural information from Georgia.
Great job, SO enjoyable!!
Regards Barbara,
:)
Comment Written 21-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and your support.
Comment from Norbanus
You must know these characters like family, especially Cash and Paige. They are so at home in the story.
There seems to be a spurious quote mark here:
The Braves beat the Dodgers five to three."
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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You must know these characters like family, especially Cash and Paige. They are so at home in the story.
There seems to be a spurious quote mark here:
The Braves beat the Dodgers five to three."
Comment Written 21-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and your support.
Comment from rama devi
WOW--What a huge payout, dear...so generous of you!
As usual, you excel at crafting natural-sounding, true to life dialog that carries the story along at a swift pace. Very readable. Good flow read aloud and flow of details the scene as well. Solid POV and characterization.
Very good diction on Billy Joe.
Excellent use of action tags in general.
The content of the chapter is not very engrossing, to be frank...just the details of their nice day with an odd kiss and departure at the end--which is the only tension I perceived. But since this is NOT a chapter but part of one, no stars deducted on that aspect.
Did notice a single spag. Yay!
Love and light,
rd
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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WOW--What a huge payout, dear...so generous of you!
As usual, you excel at crafting natural-sounding, true to life dialog that carries the story along at a swift pace. Very readable. Good flow read aloud and flow of details the scene as well. Solid POV and characterization.
Very good diction on Billy Joe.
Excellent use of action tags in general.
The content of the chapter is not very engrossing, to be frank...just the details of their nice day with an odd kiss and departure at the end--which is the only tension I perceived. But since this is NOT a chapter but part of one, no stars deducted on that aspect.
Did notice a single spag. Yay!
Love and light,
rd
Comment Written 21-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and your support.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
So Cash and Paige are together in a posh suite at the Ritz -
and yet he leaves --- I'm looking forward to find out why!!
Needs some tweaking, Barbara...
these two attempt(s) to find love - add s
pure-bred - hyphen
Great(,) a boutique - add comma
when you do something(,) you go...
get in a(n) accident - an
Hall of Fame Museum - cap M for museum
man must be important(,) but
believe the best Braves player[s] - lose s
Margaret
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2013
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So Cash and Paige are together in a posh suite at the Ritz -
and yet he leaves --- I'm looking forward to find out why!!
Needs some tweaking, Barbara...
these two attempt(s) to find love - add s
pure-bred - hyphen
Great(,) a boutique - add comma
when you do something(,) you go...
get in a(n) accident - an
Hall of Fame Museum - cap M for museum
man must be important(,) but
believe the best Braves player[s] - lose s
Margaret
Comment Written 21-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2013
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Sorry for the late reply. I needed time to make the corrections. I appreciate the help.
Comment from pickthorn
A fun filled day in Atlanta and it looks like a fun filled romantic night with Paige and Cash now find themselves together in a swanky suite at the Ritz-Carlton. The suspense is building. Another great chapter in this unfolding drama.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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A fun filled day in Atlanta and it looks like a fun filled romantic night with Paige and Cash now find themselves together in a swanky suite at the Ritz-Carlton. The suspense is building. Another great chapter in this unfolding drama.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and your support.
