Savannah Love
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Comment from writerwish
Good story. I like the idea of renting a big car. Just a few spags...We need copies of thier driver's ... (without the a) ....next to last Mary Pat needs P capitalized.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Good story. I like the idea of renting a big car. Just a few spags...We need copies of thier driver's ... (without the a) ....next to last Mary Pat needs P capitalized.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the catches. I appreciate them.
Comment from barkingdog
The girls are dressed all sexy and distracting the fellas from driving. How funny. The teasing was written so well. I'm still smiling.
Oh, would you believe barbara, that I just used dagnabbit in my post, too.
I looked it up.
You have: 'Dab nabit. I'll need a few more toothpicks.'
That would be: Dagnabbit. I'll need a few more toothpicks.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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The girls are dressed all sexy and distracting the fellas from driving. How funny. The teasing was written so well. I'm still smiling.
Oh, would you believe barbara, that I just used dagnabbit in my post, too.
I looked it up.
You have: 'Dab nabit. I'll need a few more toothpicks.'
That would be: Dagnabbit. I'll need a few more toothpicks.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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I have had a few people tell me how to write it. I will go with your version. I enjoyed reading your review.
Comment from Mteske
great word choice- timely, lifted, started, scanned, handful etc. Great writing and the organization makes it easy to follow. Great job on being number 6!
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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great word choice- timely, lifted, started, scanned, handful etc. Great writing and the organization makes it easy to follow. Great job on being number 6!
Comment Written 13-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
I like Paige's idea of a rental car to go to the ball game. They'll be going in style and comfort. It sounds like a good plan to advertise the fact that they're all leaving the house to go to the game. It will be a signal for the people who've been thieving and generally making life miserable for Paige to gain enter the house and look for whatever they want. They should be caught at long last. Very interesting, and worth 6 stars. judi
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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I like Paige's idea of a rental car to go to the ball game. They'll be going in style and comfort. It sounds like a good plan to advertise the fact that they're all leaving the house to go to the game. It will be a signal for the people who've been thieving and generally making life miserable for Paige to gain enter the house and look for whatever they want. They should be caught at long last. Very interesting, and worth 6 stars. judi
Comment Written 13-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and your continued support.
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You're so welcome. Worth waiting for. judi
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
Haven't heard 'Dag nab it' in years. Love the setting (out of the house now) as the three get ready to drive to Atlanta dressed as BB fans. No SPAG or POV infractions of note. An enjoyasble read.
Regards:
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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Haven't heard 'Dag nab it' in years. Love the setting (out of the house now) as the three get ready to drive to Atlanta dressed as BB fans. No SPAG or POV infractions of note. An enjoyasble read.
Regards:
Comment Written 13-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and your support.
Comment from JM daSilva
I'm curious about what will happen, and I think she has to be careful because I broke my leg twice because I didn't pay attention when I was recovering.
spag suggestion
"Seven-thirty (seven thirty). Right on time." She opened the front door and stepped outside where Cash and Billy Joe are? We need (remove a) copies of their drivers' licenses (driver's licenses). They'll drive, right?"
needs to make a copy of your drivers' license (driver's licenses)."
you're already dressed(,) and it's time to leave. Dab nabit. I'll need a few more toothpicks."
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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I'm curious about what will happen, and I think she has to be careful because I broke my leg twice because I didn't pay attention when I was recovering.
spag suggestion
"Seven-thirty (seven thirty). Right on time." She opened the front door and stepped outside where Cash and Billy Joe are? We need (remove a) copies of their drivers' licenses (driver's licenses). They'll drive, right?"
needs to make a copy of your drivers' license (driver's licenses)."
you're already dressed(,) and it's time to leave. Dab nabit. I'll need a few more toothpicks."
Comment Written 13-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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It's taken me this long to make the corrections. Thank you for the help. I appreciate it.
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Great pleasure.
Comment from elgone
The road trip to see the Braves game begins. The girls have spread the word all over town that they are going to be gone. The motion detectors and cameras are all set to catch the thieves red handed when they break in.
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reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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The road trip to see the Braves game begins. The girls have spread the word all over town that they are going to be gone. The motion detectors and cameras are all set to catch the thieves red handed when they break in.
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Comment Written 13-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I always appreciate hearing from you.
Comment from adewpearl
I love how she researches everything, Googling what outfits to wear to a football game. LOL She and Cash are such fun, always bickering over the silliest little things. A light-hearted chapter section before you get to the excitement of the actual sting :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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I love how she researches everything, Googling what outfits to wear to a football game. LOL She and Cash are such fun, always bickering over the silliest little things. A light-hearted chapter section before you get to the excitement of the actual sting :-) Brooke
Comment Written 13-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I always appreciate hearing from you.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hi Barb
I hope their plan works about the camera
What I like the dialogue it's so natural which makes it easy to read and understand
One question why does Billy Joe need so many toothpicks?
Gert
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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Hi Barb
I hope their plan works about the camera
What I like the dialogue it's so natural which makes it easy to read and understand
One question why does Billy Joe need so many toothpicks?
Gert
Comment Written 13-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I always appreciate hearing from you. Billy Joe is chewing on them to quit smoking.
Comment from Glasstruth
I haven't been following this, so what the big deal is about the alarm and police department... I don't know. Which obviously isn't your fault. The dialogue is very natural, like how the characters interact. I admit the T-shirt got my attention. Great job! Les
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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I haven't been following this, so what the big deal is about the alarm and police department... I don't know. Which obviously isn't your fault. The dialogue is very natural, like how the characters interact. I admit the T-shirt got my attention. Great job! Les
Comment Written 13-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I always appreciate hearing from you.
