Savannah Love
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Comment from BethShelby
I love the way you're making these Southern guys sound so authentic. The slang and other dialogue and even the chewing on the toothpicks make them come across as very real characters.
We need a copies (omit the a)
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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I love the way you're making these Southern guys sound so authentic. The slang and other dialogue and even the chewing on the toothpicks make them come across as very real characters.
We need a copies (omit the a)
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Thank you for kind review and the encouragement.
Comment from amahra
I love the way you keep your chapters short but pack them full of excitement. I've got to learn that one. Also I loved your dialogue as usual. Dagnabbit (LOL) So, that's how you spell it. Thanks!
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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I love the way you keep your chapters short but pack them full of excitement. I've got to learn that one. Also I loved your dialogue as usual. Dagnabbit (LOL) So, that's how you spell it. Thanks!
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Tatarka2
I realize that this is just one chapter of a book. However, I'm intrigued by the dialogue, and would continue reading. The story seems to be moving quickly, which keeps the reader engaged.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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I realize that this is just one chapter of a book. However, I'm intrigued by the dialogue, and would continue reading. The story seems to be moving quickly, which keeps the reader engaged.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Nosha17
I haven't read any other part of your book, but if this is anything to go by, it will be a super story. Your dialogue, characters and use of language are excellent, and I as the reader wanted to read on. Commendable
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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I haven't read any other part of your book, but if this is anything to go by, it will be a super story. Your dialogue, characters and use of language are excellent, and I as the reader wanted to read on. Commendable
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rtobaygo
I am always impressed by the natural flow of your characters' dialogue. You are able to keep the reader focused on who is speaking with the minimal use of tags. The characters' dialogue helps define who and what they are. Well done!
Take care,
Ray
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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I am always impressed by the natural flow of your characters' dialogue. You are able to keep the reader focused on who is speaking with the minimal use of tags. The characters' dialogue helps define who and what they are. Well done!
Take care,
Ray
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I always enjoy hearing from you.
Comment from Gregt46
I feel kinda humble attempting to critique the work of an accomplished author such as you. I am amazed at all the intricate details and characters included in this story. I'm pretty sure I know Paige personally! Only one thing I questioned, maybe a typo? "We need (a copies) of their drivers' licenses." WGT
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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I feel kinda humble attempting to critique the work of an accomplished author such as you. I am amazed at all the intricate details and characters included in this story. I'm pretty sure I know Paige personally! Only one thing I questioned, maybe a typo? "We need (a copies) of their drivers' licenses." WGT
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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I had changed that sentence at the last minute and messed up. Thank you for the catch.
Comment from Sloegin
Another well written chapter. I enjoyed the read. Your verbiage is right on, and there is nothing stilted or forced about your dialogue. Your words seem to flow.
One thing, "Cash was rechecking" try not to use words ending in "ING" after was, it puts the work in a negative voice and you need to stay in a positive voice. Try something like, "She watched Cash recheck the cameras."
"Seven-thirty. Right on time." Make one sentence, use comma instead of period.
I hate to nit pick such good writing, but if I don't your editor will.
Keep writing.
sloegin
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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Another well written chapter. I enjoyed the read. Your verbiage is right on, and there is nothing stilted or forced about your dialogue. Your words seem to flow.
One thing, "Cash was rechecking" try not to use words ending in "ING" after was, it puts the work in a negative voice and you need to stay in a positive voice. Try something like, "She watched Cash recheck the cameras."
"Seven-thirty. Right on time." Make one sentence, use comma instead of period.
I hate to nit pick such good writing, but if I don't your editor will.
Keep writing.
sloegin
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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I completely understand and appreciate your help. Thank you.
Comment from emrpoems
Like how the story is developing. However your chapters should all have a little intrigue so even if one has not read the other chapters they can dive into the work. This chapter was somehow able to hold my interest and so I look forward to reading the subsequent chapters
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Like how the story is developing. However your chapters should all have a little intrigue so even if one has not read the other chapters they can dive into the work. This chapter was somehow able to hold my interest and so I look forward to reading the subsequent chapters
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Barbara,
This is a good chapter and I enjoyed reading it. I hope their plan works and they catch the culprit that has been making their lives miserably, not to mention it might be a ghost. It appears that Cash didn't even notice the sexy way Paige was dressed. MEN! Well done, blessings, chey
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Hi Barbara,
This is a good chapter and I enjoyed reading it. I hope their plan works and they catch the culprit that has been making their lives miserably, not to mention it might be a ghost. It appears that Cash didn't even notice the sexy way Paige was dressed. MEN! Well done, blessings, chey
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I always enjoy hearing from you.
Comment from JMUwrites
I enjoyed this chapter write extremely much, love the genuine feeling conversational exchange between characters...which you delivered so very well!
As an avid reader, I've come to realize that there's always a danger in writing stories that depict everyday occurrences, because they can become boring to the reader if the author isn't careful...but you did a masterful job at keeping the story interesting and colorful!
Technically it looks to be spot-on and the accompanying photo adds to the story's genuineness...a gal wearing an Atlanta Braves tank-top which is routinely seen at their home games.
All the best to you with this excellent chapter (and book it belongs to) going forward, with warm regards!
JMU
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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I enjoyed this chapter write extremely much, love the genuine feeling conversational exchange between characters...which you delivered so very well!
As an avid reader, I've come to realize that there's always a danger in writing stories that depict everyday occurrences, because they can become boring to the reader if the author isn't careful...but you did a masterful job at keeping the story interesting and colorful!
Technically it looks to be spot-on and the accompanying photo adds to the story's genuineness...a gal wearing an Atlanta Braves tank-top which is routinely seen at their home games.
All the best to you with this excellent chapter (and book it belongs to) going forward, with warm regards!
JMU
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
